Striving & Starving
Striving & Starving7 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is very little duty and honour displayed these days Bob and your write reminds us of what is important in life and it is not passing the blame onto others. I enjoyed the sentiments here and your clever rhymes too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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There is very little duty and honour displayed these days Bob and your write reminds us of what is important in life and it is not passing the blame onto others. I enjoyed the sentiments here and your clever rhymes too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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What a nice response. Clever, duty and honour all in three lines. Are you sure you're describing my poem. I'm really flattered by your words. Thank you, Dolly
Comment from royowen
Likewise when I write I have no idea that these words existed in my depths, just remember we are all made in the image of God, and we are therefore plugged into the source of wisdom, and knowledge, beautifully written Bob, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Likewise when I write I have no idea that these words existed in my depths, just remember we are all made in the image of God, and we are therefore plugged into the source of wisdom, and knowledge, beautifully written Bob, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Your replies always make me feel good. You use words like Da Vinci used his brush. Your compliments are always valued and appreciated
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You are a very kind and gentle man Bob, bless you
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poem, Bob. I enjoyed reading
it. I liked the use of rhyme, the smooth flow, and the repeat
from the start at the end. I could see this as one remembering
things in their life and wondering if s/he could've/should've
done things differently.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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You did a great job with your poem, Bob. I enjoyed reading
it. I liked the use of rhyme, the smooth flow, and the repeat
from the start at the end. I could see this as one remembering
things in their life and wondering if s/he could've/should've
done things differently.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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One didn't dare do things differently around the Nuns. They ruled and you did things their way or your hands collided with the CANE.
Comment from Brady Bowen
Expressive dirge that does a good job of highlighting the low motivations of this era. The fact that the problem is recognized gives hope for its resolution.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Expressive dirge that does a good job of highlighting the low motivations of this era. The fact that the problem is recognized gives hope for its resolution.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Brady, for the review and the five stars. Your words fill me with the encouragement necessary to continue with my writing dream. For that I'm truly grateful
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Are the questions being asked herein being asked by the author or by God? Perplexing knowing what we know, and not doing it unless for show. Look at me Lord, I gave a tithe, helped someone survive while muttering to ourselves where's my reward?
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Are the questions being asked herein being asked by the author or by God? Perplexing knowing what we know, and not doing it unless for show. Look at me Lord, I gave a tithe, helped someone survive while muttering to ourselves where's my reward?
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Tom for another great review. You do however ask difficult questions. Were the questions from God or Me? In truth I guess I possess an overactive conscience provoked by the Nuns from my primary school days.
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Aah. Sister Donatus and Sister Mary Joseph. Lurch and Grandpa from the Adam's family. I remember them well.
Comment from HarryT
"Lord, I'm ask lots, more than I need I know." This line is weak. Lots is not a very poetic word. Suggest: Lord I'm ask questions, answers I do not know.
Last line also does not work for me because after your long list of things learned, it seems nothing has been learned. Would not one with such knowledge do a second chance differently? Still, I like the work, the rhyming works well, doesn't seem forced. The images are good and the entire poem leads the reader to think.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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"Lord, I'm ask lots, more than I need I know." This line is weak. Lots is not a very poetic word. Suggest: Lord I'm ask questions, answers I do not know.
Last line also does not work for me because after your long list of things learned, it seems nothing has been learned. Would not one with such knowledge do a second chance differently? Still, I like the work, the rhyming works well, doesn't seem forced. The images are good and the entire poem leads the reader to think.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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What a really positive review. I loved your two suggestions and I've made changes. Thank you so much for your great editing eyes.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written and presented.
I think a lot of us can relate to this verse, as it exposes some truths.
I appreciate your use of your faith to express your feelings. Faith is a crucial part of life, no matter the form it may take.
The rhymes work well here and create a smooth read.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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This is well written and presented.
I think a lot of us can relate to this verse, as it exposes some truths.
I appreciate your use of your faith to express your feelings. Faith is a crucial part of life, no matter the form it may take.
The rhymes work well here and create a smooth read.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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I really appreciate you're taking time to read and comment. Hope your week goes well.
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I really appreciate you're taking time to read and comment. Hope your week goes well.
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Yours as well!
