I Couldn't Wait
I knew from first sight we were meant to be together.7 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Whilst I enjoyed the sentiments of this rondeau, and found the vocabulary used well-suited to the mood, I felt the poem creaked a bit on reading aloud. I think this was because the syllable counts on the a / b rhyme lines wasn't constant. I checked in 'Poetry dances' and that's recommended. Kate xx
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Whilst I enjoyed the sentiments of this rondeau, and found the vocabulary used well-suited to the mood, I felt the poem creaked a bit on reading aloud. I think this was because the syllable counts on the a / b rhyme lines wasn't constant. I checked in 'Poetry dances' and that's recommended. Kate xx
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thanks, I will look into the syllable counts.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Harry,
Very nice rondeau poem. These are words every person would love to hear.
Your poem flows nicely and is rich in sentiment.
Great poem.
Good luck with this one.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Harry,
Very nice rondeau poem. These are words every person would love to hear.
Your poem flows nicely and is rich in sentiment.
Great poem.
Good luck with this one.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thanks much for the read and the encouraging review.
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You?re welcome.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good love poem. The text is large and easy to read. The message is clear and consistent throughout the piece. I wish you luck in the contest. You have a good entry.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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This is a good love poem. The text is large and easy to read. The message is clear and consistent throughout the piece. I wish you luck in the contest. You have a good entry.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the read and the review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from jessizero
"God whisper" should be "God whispered"
Other than that, this is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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"God whisper" should be "God whispered"
Other than that, this is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the read and the catch. Appreciated.
Comment from Trodden
How neatly done and sweet the poem is. Nice rhyming
I wish the refrain is a bit shorter, but your effusive full sentence does its magic too.
Very enjoyable to read. Thanks.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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How neatly done and sweet the poem is. Nice rhyming
I wish the refrain is a bit shorter, but your effusive full sentence does its magic too.
Very enjoyable to read. Thanks.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the read and encouraging review.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello HarryT a wonderful day to you I hope it finds you well. I enjoyed your rondeau poem entry, great execution and a great story and message of love. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Hello HarryT a wonderful day to you I hope it finds you well. I enjoyed your rondeau poem entry, great execution and a great story and message of love. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the read and encouraging review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This modified rondeau, I Couldn't Wait, projects the sentiment which is what it's all about really. The piece follows the format for the most part, though the modified refrain might better be incorporated into the first line or limit the refrain to "the first time I saw you".
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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This modified rondeau, I Couldn't Wait, projects the sentiment which is what it's all about really. The piece follows the format for the most part, though the modified refrain might better be incorporated into the first line or limit the refrain to "the first time I saw you".
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Like your suggestion I will edit. Thanks for the read and review.
