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Dark Watervaulted

It‚??s that thing in the background‚?¶

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Comment from karenina
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You know how to set a mood...
To take us where we've never been before, and make us wary of the place.

Another rich free verse that improves with each reading...

I've read it three times now...

It's a dark and murky place...

Many secrets no doubt.

Karenina

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
    This place is sometimes electric in its energetic undercurrents of secrecy and savagery. It?s so oddly juxtaposed with the very happy-making sense of hospitality that the residents show to strangers. It?s like the people, having fought the savage wildness of this place to settle here, are flaunting their victory by relentlessly welcoming every soul who visits.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
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This is a complex verse that is a bit challenging to decipher, but to me this explores our own mortality.

All aspects of ourselves and personal experiences, adds up to a complete life, a complete story.

How did we spend our life?

What did we do with our life?

How will others speak of us when we pass?

Noteworthy word painting:

" Aromatic swapsyrup,"

"Memories of joy are cataloged in spider-legged...."

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
    You?re welcome. Thanks!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello, Brady,

I enjoyed reading your poem about the bayou.
Nice presentation and imagery. I like your unique style of writing. You have a way with words that is captivating. Your writing flows well and it's easy to follow. Thank you for sharing it.

Well done. (*-*)

Gypsy
Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason.- Novalis

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
    Tyty
Comment from Lilly Flowers
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My oh my, the things you'll find sucken in a body of water. You did a fabulous job with imagery and also provided a bit of a storyline. Very nicely written. Regards, Lilly

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Thanks.
Comment from royowen
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A beautifully written free verse, describing areas of the US, I surmise, and so very well done my friend, there are so many new writers this year on fanstory, the numbers seem to have swelled quite markedly. Your use of poetic device is outstanding, well done, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Thanks! This is about my home in South Louisiana.
reply by royowen on 22-Sep-2022
    Uhuh, I?ve been to the US on four occasions, but never Louisiana.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
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An interesting poem full of dark images. The word selection fits well with the content of the poem. The flow is good. The negative words ending each stanza accentuates the general mood of the poem.

Suggestion:

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Note in the comment extra characters. Need to watch for these they show up frequently.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Thanks
reply by dellsworthpoet on 22-Sep-2022
    You are welcome.
Comment from newilk
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An absolutely incredible poem, I love that it reads like a story! It feels like I'm walking down a winding path as I read this, sort of exploring a mystery.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Wow. So many tales encrypted in words and stories most readers never will know but I can see the slow-moving waters lapping on the organic matter, with slithering snakes, and gators hidden, waiting for the next misteps to add to the volume of mysteries where man should not have been and isn't ... any longer.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Thanks!
Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was a very sad poem. I could feel the dark unknown of this place. Reminded me of the marshes near my home. At dawn and sunset the promise of life is glowing but in the dark it's unknown and murky waters are terrifying. The stories presented were heartbreaking. Incredible work.
Gretchen

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Thanks.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
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First of all, your description has glitches..."Itâ??s that thing in the backgroundâ?¦"

People throw many things in the swamp for various reasons... to one end...
so they will never be found.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Gotcha
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Gotcha