Broken Heart
My heart was broken when she said there was another.3 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Well done author. You captured both the joy and excitement of seeing the one you wanted to marry, and the shock and sorrow of rejection. It would be the ultimate blow. No doubt it took a long time to get over. After such an experience, it would be hard to step out and try again. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
Well done author. You captured both the joy and excitement of seeing the one you wanted to marry, and the shock and sorrow of rejection. It would be the ultimate blow. No doubt it took a long time to get over. After such an experience, it would be hard to step out and try again. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you, sir, for taking the time to read and review. Appreciated.
Comment from lancellot
This is a sad story with a happy ending. I will call this Free verse, but it really does read more like prose. Something to think about, if you want.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
This is a sad story with a happy ending. I will call this Free verse, but it really does read more like prose. Something to think about, if you want.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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I will stick with free verse. I believe it has some aspects of poetry. Thanks for the read and feedback.
Comment from jessizero
Your poem made me very sad, but I am glad it ended well. You told the story well in poem format, and you really brought out emotions in the reader. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
Your poem made me very sad, but I am glad it ended well. You told the story well in poem format, and you really brought out emotions in the reader. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the read and the positive feedback.