The Warning
3-6-9 Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Shirley McLain
Some storms that happen here in Oklahoma always require courage. I like your poem and the picture of the lightening is great. Have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Some storms that happen here in Oklahoma always require courage. I like your poem and the picture of the lightening is great. Have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Your words stand strong here in an excellent 3-6-9 poem. I'll tell you as a number told me: You need to write two more verses for it to complete the contest rules.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Your words stand strong here in an excellent 3-6-9 poem. I'll tell you as a number told me: You need to write two more verses for it to complete the contest rules.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Verna, thanks for the kind review and the heads up. I have added two stanzas to my poem to comply with the requirements.
Steve
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Kiwisteveh a wonderful Wednesday to you. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the 3-6-9 form of poem quite well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Hello Kiwisteveh a wonderful Wednesday to you. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the 3-6-9 form of poem quite well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Steve.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I don't think you will be disqualified as long as it is before voting starts.
-Effective imagery and progression of how the storm develops.
-Some vivid images make us feel the strength of the storm,
"Forked-tongue rage cracks open moonless sky."
-I can see and hear the crack of the thunder and lightening.
-A very good closing verse with alliteration and a good message to be prepared.
-A very good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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-Nice image and presentation, Steve.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I don't think you will be disqualified as long as it is before voting starts.
-Effective imagery and progression of how the storm develops.
-Some vivid images make us feel the strength of the storm,
"Forked-tongue rage cracks open moonless sky."
-I can see and hear the crack of the thunder and lightening.
-A very good closing verse with alliteration and a good message to be prepared.
-A very good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Pam. Yes, someone else pointed out I had misread the requirements so I have indeed fixed it. It's probably better now!
Steve
Comment from GWHARGIS
Wow. The implications of this poem could be used for so many different things. A real atmospheric event. A socially upheaval of a storm, or a political one. This was a powerfully and somewhat darkly written poem. Packs quite the punch for so few syllables. It deserved a six but alas, I am out. I really enjoyed this.
Gretchen
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Wow. The implications of this poem could be used for so many different things. A real atmospheric event. A socially upheaval of a storm, or a political one. This was a powerfully and somewhat darkly written poem. Packs quite the punch for so few syllables. It deserved a six but alas, I am out. I really enjoyed this.
Gretchen
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Gretchen, thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
And yes, almost all of my poems have levels of meaning. Social upheaval and political storms are flavour of the day!
Steve
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this piece. It's very cohesive from the title, the piece and the picture all perfectly tied together.
It's a powerful little piece which can be applied to a multitude of woes.
There should be two more verses though to qualify
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Hi there,
I liked this piece. It's very cohesive from the title, the piece and the picture all perfectly tied together.
It's a powerful little piece which can be applied to a multitude of woes.
There should be two more verses though to qualify
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks, GMan!
Oops! I have added the extra stanzas.
Steve
