The Warning
3-6-9 Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I reckon this could be a winner for the contest Steve as you created a special atmospheric here as the darkness falls and the heavens are filled with anger which is threatening to be released, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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I reckon this could be a winner for the contest Steve as you created a special atmospheric here as the darkness falls and the heavens are filled with anger which is threatening to be released, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Dolly. yes, the atmospheric touch was enhanced by the addition of two stanzas - more room to 'grow' the piece.
I have not been writing lately so I hope this spurs the muse to return!
Steve
Comment from Tom Horonzy
So much of this is lifted by the visual selected. I don't think you can be dq'd, in fact the CEC wouldn't have even known you added two stanzas,
had you not confessed, but isn't that what the "edit button" is for. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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So much of this is lifted by the visual selected. I don't think you can be dq'd, in fact the CEC wouldn't have even known you added two stanzas,
had you not confessed, but isn't that what the "edit button" is for. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Tom. Since this contest is judged by the committee I don't think they bother to actually disqualify anybody - but they may simply choose to omit works from their short list. I agree that this should be OK and edits accepted.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
I made the same mistake with this contest a couple of years back. When my error was pointed out, I made adjustments and lo, I won the contest--one of very few poetry contest wins for me. Maybe that's a good omen for you.
Speaking of omens, this one is pretty dark--as intended. I know you've been active on the political page of the forum. Naturally, I go right there as I read this poem. The cipher is not a complicated one. The first two stanzas flesh out the original third. Judas has been busy--romantically speaking--lately. As has his forked tongue. Who knows where it will strike next. With hope, not in the same place again.
Steve, I hope this poem isn't an indication of your overall mood.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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I made the same mistake with this contest a couple of years back. When my error was pointed out, I made adjustments and lo, I won the contest--one of very few poetry contest wins for me. Maybe that's a good omen for you.
Speaking of omens, this one is pretty dark--as intended. I know you've been active on the political page of the forum. Naturally, I go right there as I read this poem. The cipher is not a complicated one. The first two stanzas flesh out the original third. Judas has been busy--romantically speaking--lately. As has his forked tongue. Who knows where it will strike next. With hope, not in the same place again.
Steve, I hope this poem isn't an indication of your overall mood.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Many thanks, Lee. And no, not any sort of indication of mood, although possibly stirred by other people's thoughts about where the world is heading. In general I am pretty relaxed about most things - too much so perhaps!
And yep I am still slightly obsessed by Trumpy stuff. Yesterday was a good day. Ain't schadenfreude grand?
Appreciate the sixth star.
Steve
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written and presented poem. The font size is great. I like how the poem can be related to the awesome power of nature or the awesome power of religious faith and adherence to God's word and being a dependable disciple. The white lettering against the black background is great. The visual works well with the text. Well done, and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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This is a well-written and presented poem. The font size is great. I like how the poem can be related to the awesome power of nature or the awesome power of religious faith and adherence to God's word and being a dependable disciple. The white lettering against the black background is great. The visual works well with the text. Well done, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Hi, Sandra, and thanks for the great review. You and a couple of others see some religious meaning here, but I have to confess that was not really intended. This is more just me musing about how some people see the direction of the world and the multiple crises that face us right now.
Steve
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A poem that is subject to the interpretation of the readers. Cool! You are welcome.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You made the right decision to expand your verse.
This is well written, constructed and presented.
It is a perfect example of a 3-6-9, as the syllable count is correct.
Very clever to weave your faith into metaphors relating back to the sentiment left.
A great contest entry that I hope will do well.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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You made the right decision to expand your verse.
This is well written, constructed and presented.
It is a perfect example of a 3-6-9, as the syllable count is correct.
Very clever to weave your faith into metaphors relating back to the sentiment left.
A great contest entry that I hope will do well.
Good luck!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Many thanks for the kind words. I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from WLHall
A beautiful poem that paints a word picture with double meaning. A good alliteration with 'courage to confront' and followed the syllable count requirements. Well done.
Yes, definitely better. Who knows if it had been this good if you did follow the rules originally? Referencing 'Judas kiss' is powerful.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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A beautiful poem that paints a word picture with double meaning. A good alliteration with 'courage to confront' and followed the syllable count requirements. Well done.
Yes, definitely better. Who knows if it had been this good if you did follow the rules originally? Referencing 'Judas kiss' is powerful.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
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I did not catch that. Thanks, I will read it.
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line put
the poem all together. I found there is a message in these words. The
poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments
this poem.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line put
the poem all together. I found there is a message in these words. The
poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments
this poem.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
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It extremely stronger! Much more
descriptive, detailed and intense!
Thank for letting me know.
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed your 3-6-9 poem. I like that the storm could be anything - a literal storm or an event in life. Thanks for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed your 3-6-9 poem. I like that the storm could be anything - a literal storm or an event in life. Thanks for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
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I think it is a stronger piece now. However, your font and background are the same color, making it impossible to read without "copy and paste"
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Oops! I changed the font to edit it and forgot to change it back!
Thanks!
Comment from Boogienights
This is amazing and could have two different meanings. An actual storm or the storm of unrest in this world. Its food for thought definitely. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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This is amazing and could have two different meanings. An actual storm or the storm of unrest in this world. Its food for thought definitely. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
With all the strange weather everybody around the world has been having this contest entry is very much on the spot. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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With all the strange weather everybody around the world has been having this contest entry is very much on the spot. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review. Another reviewer has pointed out that the contest demanded THREE stanzas, so I have made major edits to the piece to comply. I think it is stronger now if you want to take a second look.
Steve
