Comment from K. Lang-Slattery

Excellent

Thanks Verna for this lovely short poem about birds. I liked the first 2 lines best but also enjoyed the alliteration of "tiny twitterers" and "Singing against the sky."

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022

Thanks for an excellent review for my twitterers!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your contest entry read well, Verna. I enjoyed reading it.
Great job with the syllable count per line in each verse.
I liked the use of alliteration in each second and third lines
throughout. The picture was perfect. It' amazing how the
birds can line up so perfectly on the wire. Good job with
rhymes, too.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022

I always appreciate your excellent reviews, Jan. Thank you.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A picture to remember for sure. This morning I woke early to birdsong, and I will remember it. We are travelling and the birds were singing quite different songs from ours back home. Your poem is very lovely, and a reminder to consciously commit to memory such treasured experiences. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022

Thanks so much, dear Wendy, for the review. Safe travels!

Comment from GARY MACLEAN

Excellent

That is a cute way to refer to birds, "twitterers." There is not much in nature that can compare to the morning song of a bird, any bird, especially when mixed with the rest of the choir. Whether they are on a wire or not.

Nice poem, Sweet thoughts. All positive words, which is good.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks for a great review, Gary.

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Verna,
This is a lovely 3-6-9 poem you've written.
I love the way the returning birds herald in spring and summer.
Right now the birds are quiet. Most have flown South.
Your poem brings me solace as you captured them in a warmer, busier time.
Good luck, Verna.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks for your lovely review, Cindy.

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 20-Sep-2022

You?re welcome, Verna.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Verna,

How sweet! It's funny that we are all so used to seeing this, isn't it? Regardless of where you live, this is probably a sight we all know pretty well. Isn't that cool? Never thought of it before!

Your syllable count is good - for this one stanza. *smile* But according to contest rules - you need two more stanzas ofr 3/6/9.

Thanks and good luck! I'm gonna be nice and nogt deduct a star - 'cause I know you'll fix it quick. Good luck!

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022

Thanks, my friend. I'm glad I have friends to remind me. I'm already working on it!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like your single stanza of 3-6-9. I always like seeing those congregations of birds as they seem to have such a rich social life. Lol. But you see them as a choir.
For the contest, you need two more stanzas.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022

Thanks for the reminder. I'm glad I have friends here to keep me in line!

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

This is such a beautiful 3-6-9. I have pictured it all. The sight of dozens strung across the wire, the sounds of their trill as they wait for the warmth. What a perfect subject, Verna. I loved it. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022

Thanks, JohnC. I really appreciate your kind words. Several just reminded me that I didn't read far enough, so it's back to the drawing board to finish it.

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

Good poem for the contest. I like the phrase: "concert of praise." Great image to go along with the poem. Well done and good luck with the contest!!!!!!!!!!

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022

Thanks so very much, Theodore.