Comment from Michaela Moore

Excellent

I love what you did in the last stanza! Love it! Yes, too many times, we feel like a pawn in a meaningless game. But then, when we sit with our Lord for even a moment, purpose comes pouring in.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022

Thanks so much Michaela, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Huh. Here I am, visiting FanStory again, and of course, reviewing some of my favorite poets' work, and what is the first poem I read? One that fits so well with my thoughts...
Roy, as usual, very well done.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022

Thanks so much Dawn, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Roy,
Nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive wording, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting Time's Goal!
Picture complements the poem.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022

Thanks so much RP, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy

reply by RPSaxena on 14-Oct-2022

Roy, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Nobody "swaps" like you "swap" Roy! Hard enough for me to make a line make sense in one direction, !such less inverting it!

Favorite stanza?


"As I have found time is profound,
it marks our steps to Holy ground.
If one looks up beyond fate's mound,
time is profound as I have found"

Very well written!

Karenina

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022

Thanks for these most encouraging comments and a super review, blessings Roy

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Loved your poem Roy. Yes, time is a jest. And also a pest! Getting old and sitting under the Golden Arches just waiting...go inside to Mcdonalds get your free senior's ice-cream! The road is long and arduous, still we have Jesus along side of us. He said, "in my house are many mansions where I go to prepare a place for you." Blessings, K xx

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks so much Kay, happy birthday dear girl, and for these terrific comments and a great review, and six wonderful stars, blessings Roy

reply by Aussie on 21-Sep-2022

Thanks Roy. Didn't think I would reach 77! Guess He has more for me to do.

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022

Of course He has.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I like this a lot, it's clear and well written, and the theme is clear, relevant and timely. It has an interesting format as well as smooth, unforced rhyme. Well done.
Wendy

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks Wendy for these wonderful comments and review, blessings Roy

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

another powerful poem about life, the universe and trying to make sense of it all. I like the ending lines the best. This is a bit of a departure for you, not as overly religious in its theme.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks so much Jake, for these terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hi Roy, good swap quatrains. I know people don't like to think about it, but we were born to die--just like our Christ. Your poem reads and flows well and is thought provoking. Of special note:

Time is a test, it's not a jest,
it's not a jest, time is a test.

(Amen. This is so true.)

Well chosen photo. Good rhyming. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks so much Margaret for these terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Roy,
I like the internal rhyme use in this swap quatrain which asks questions we all ask. About importance of time and do we have a plan for that time. A lot of people never find the path to spending the time on the path designed for them. But the goal is to spend the time we have being the best person we can be according to what we think God's plan it so we can enter Heaven.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks Joan for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy

reply by dragonpoet on 21-Sep-2022

My pleasure, Roy.
Joan

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

A wonderful swap quatrain poem, Roy. Thought provoking and yet clear, if that makes sense. As a Christian, I don't fear death but a have loved ones that are not there yet. dear, and much food for thought about time.

Well done as always my friend.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022

Thanks so much Janet, for these terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy