My Name is Autism
High functioning autism makes me brilliant and cripples me.12 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I see you are new! Welcome to Fanstory! Thank you for sharing this unique part of you. You are also gifted in articulation and expression so writing is a natural tool for you.
Good use of alliteration and near rhymes in your two line poem. I especially liked the last line.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2022
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I see you are new! Welcome to Fanstory! Thank you for sharing this unique part of you. You are also gifted in articulation and expression so writing is a natural tool for you.
Good use of alliteration and near rhymes in your two line poem. I especially liked the last line.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I was fairly pleased with that one, but always trying to do better than before. I posted the first chapter of my book a few days ago. It's title is "Grim." I'm obsessed with it. If you should have time, please take a look. I'm debating a few revisions and could use the advisement, truly. I'm at that point. Where I need to commit to a few parts of the storyline/plot and I'm suddenly struggling a bit. Either way thank you for liking my poem!
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, My Name is Autism, has the right setup and brings the reality of autism to the fore with your participation in this challenge. .........................................................................................................
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This two-line poem, My Name is Autism, has the right setup and brings the reality of autism to the fore with your participation in this challenge. .........................................................................................................
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Bill. I try to bring awareness, but selfishly most of my poetry is about working through my own feelings. Sometimes a bit dramatic but always a reflection of my truths. Thanks, again.
Comment from giraffmang
HI there,
I am also neurodivergent (nice sparkling new terms!). My daughter is autistic as well (she's only 11) but I've spent 30 years working with children in this field.
High-functioning is a term which is going out of fashion, thankfully, as it one of the reasons for why you experienced what you had to go through.
High-functioning basically means my issues aren't a problem for other people, but negates to address what those issues are for me. It's something my daughter is facing at present.
I get this piece.
All syllables present and correct.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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HI there,
I am also neurodivergent (nice sparkling new terms!). My daughter is autistic as well (she's only 11) but I've spent 30 years working with children in this field.
High-functioning is a term which is going out of fashion, thankfully, as it one of the reasons for why you experienced what you had to go through.
High-functioning basically means my issues aren't a problem for other people, but negates to address what those issues are for me. It's something my daughter is facing at present.
I get this piece.
All syllables present and correct.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review and comments. My daughter who is 22 is also asperger's mild to moderate. You can speak with her for 5 min and she's 22. Speak with her for 10 and see a hint of immaturity. 20 mins and she's anywhere from 8 to 45. She lives on her own (with cameras). But she can't do money so no real hope for a job that she could potentially do. I have pushed and pushed her and everything else her whole life for her. And, she hates me - no exaggeration. She blames me for everything wrong in the world. She is a chronic liar, too and revels in the dramatic. So, this poem was a lot about my issues, her issues, our issues. It's tough. I wasnt diagnosed until 40. All my symptoms shifted and my coping skills were shot. I'd been in autism world with her so long and her symptoms it never occurred to me that it could be the cause of so many challenges Id had. Awkward, clumsy, inability to see social cues or relate to others, prefer alone time with hobbies, intense intuition/ some say psychicabilities, etc. By the time i was diagnosed my life had nearly fallen apart in a single year. Took 5 years to get back on track with differences in symptoms. Total shift. Anyway, just to color a bit for you with your expertise. Have your daughter prepared for 40 if she's aspergers. I know its a long way but it's very real and it started right around my birthday with me losing time. I'd be in the shower, then 20 mins later dripping in the closet like I'd been on autopilot. Or, I'd go for a walk and 40 mins later I was somewhere I never intended to be. My Dr explained it. I understood it to be periods of brain re-mapping sort of. Kind of like a seizure too. I couldn't drive for a long time. So, just a word of caution. I don't know why more isn't published on it. Thanks again.
TK
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem on a topic that needs to be discussed and understood. Your text is large and clear. However, your presentation needs improving. Some color in the background or font, and a visual of some sort would enhance your presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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This is a good poem on a topic that needs to be discussed and understood. Your text is large and clear. However, your presentation needs improving. Some color in the background or font, and a visual of some sort would enhance your presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you. I've been encouraged to do more visuals. I'll try to employ. Thanks so much!
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You are welcome. I have faith you can do it.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Tara,
I loved your creative, yet painful take on autism.
It is truly a unique way of looking at the disorder?? Can I call it that? I am bipolar, and feel the way you have expressed hopelessness.
Congrats on your finish.
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Tara,
I loved your creative, yet painful take on autism.
It is truly a unique way of looking at the disorder?? Can I call it that? I am bipolar, and feel the way you have expressed hopelessness.
Congrats on your finish.
Cindy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Cindy, you know it sees to hold true that the most creative and gifted minds are the most tortured. So many artists I've known all had some sort of neurological disorder. Bipolar is such a challenge as well as autism, but it does make for kindred spirits. Ice to meet you and I'm glad it spoke to you.
The poem came from a couple of factors. My parents (80 and 90 yo)have never understood my disorder (46yo). And, in truth, I don't understand my child's autism either. We both have asperger's, but it manifests differently. We all come to intimately know our passenger(s) but they leave others bewildered. With my condition, I have discovered ways to make the better symptoms work for me over the years and ways to mask or work around most of the others. My child (22yo) has not and I can't help her. We barely communicate (not my choice), but very related to me pushing her. And, I guess that's where really the lack of hope has settled in and the overall tone of the poem. I can communicate so well in my writing sometimes, and miss that boat totally otherwise which doesn't get me what I need and i fail to give others what they need (usually I don't even see it).
How does yours manifest and what is your severity (if ok to ask). My condition is very similar to a lot of standard bipolar symptoms. It is very loud in my head. I can change gears dramatically with my personality depending upon stress levels. Among other things...
Thanks again,
Tara
P.S I welcome criticism but I had a user who really took issue with the hopeless hope. Obviously they didn't understand and can't.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
i.d.k. This works but the first line reads uncomfortably for me. Hopeless hope. Might be better, your decision, using hopelessness. Same syllabic count. If it works, go for it, if not leave as is.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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i.d.k. This works but the first line reads uncomfortably for me. Hopeless hope. Might be better, your decision, using hopelessness. Same syllabic count. If it works, go for it, if not leave as is.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for your review. The word play on hope is a description of autism symptoms as well as that described in the second line. Due to the very nature of the disorder. It's hard for others to relate at times because every case has different nuances. For me, going in circles and over fixating on somethings is a problem. Inability to see others verbal and nonverbal cues is another. And, my Brain functions in such a way that I can tell you an answer and it be correct but I can't take you through the logic because it just comes to me. So all these things, I tried to fit in 20 words...
Thanks again,
Tara
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good syllables count.
Good subject
Excellent entry for the Two Line Poem writing prompt contest.
The vocabulary is easy to understand.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
"Happiness is an uphill battle. Wear the good shoes." -- Kurt Vonnegut
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Good syllables count.
Good subject
Excellent entry for the Two Line Poem writing prompt contest.
The vocabulary is easy to understand.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
"Happiness is an uphill battle. Wear the good shoes." -- Kurt Vonnegut
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Love Vonnegut. Thank you so much for the kind and supportive review. :)
Tara
Comment from Timmory Pisciotta
The poem was very impactful but the title is what really got me. Introducing yourself AS autism, I feel like it really shows that sometimes when people meet neurodivergent people all they see is that they are different than them. It is very very sad.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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The poem was very impactful but the title is what really got me. Introducing yourself AS autism, I feel like it really shows that sometimes when people meet neurodivergent people all they see is that they are different than them. It is very very sad.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you for understand ing my word choices. I very much feel like it does identify me some times instead of identifying as myself who happens to be autistic. I have a daughter who is 22 now - also autistic She is not high functioning. You would not think see it in a 5 min conversation. 10 min you'd think she's immature. 20 and you'll know. Knowing what she was going through at school killed me. I coped by crawling in books for about 13 years. She can read, but is slow and can hardly retain the ideas so I couldn't even give her that. I tried to find a place for her to get the benefits of her autism for many reasons (there's usually some sort of savant talent in there somewhere) We haven't found it yet...
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Firstly thanks for sharing the plus and minuses of H.F.Autism.. in your notes and your two line poem. It is a very emotional poem and I wish you well.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Firstly thanks for sharing the plus and minuses of H.F.Autism.. in your notes and your two line poem. It is a very emotional poem and I wish you well.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review and reading it. It does say a great many things in 20 words and I thank you for seeing that.
Comment from LJbutterfly
It sounds as though you've lived a most unusual and exceptional life with low points compensated with high points. Your poem creatively, and adequately defines the Autism experience.
Sparkling words: "hopeless hope" and "solution, not the question."
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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It sounds as though you've lived a most unusual and exceptional life with low points compensated with high points. Your poem creatively, and adequately defines the Autism experience.
Sparkling words: "hopeless hope" and "solution, not the question."
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for your review. I have had a very interesting life to say the least. I always knew I was different of course, had my autistic daughter at 22, knew something wrong by her first birthday. She is in the middle of severity and does not have the benefits I do. I had her dx all those years but her symptoms were so different from mine. When I turned 40, my world flipped upside down. Suddenly, I was coordinated! But, my organizational skills plummeted. My OCD receded but I started losing time for about a year - usually just 15-20 minutes, but it happened and it was scary. Almost every high became a low. Thought I was losing my mind. Went to psychologist who dx'd me. At 40 (exactly), asperger's women have a shift that is beyond explanation and their coping mechanisms don't work for new symptoms and it requires them to really build a whole new construction with these new factors to be able to function. I can tell you that it sucked. I'm rambling now but I just like to tell people what's it's like for us. Thanks again for reading and commenting!
