Under my tin roof
A comfortable feeling51 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, there is something very special, although very loud, about rain drumming on a tin roof. Your poem is expressive as it takes one through the course of a storm. Well done.
Wendy
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Yes, there is something very special, although very loud, about rain drumming on a tin roof. Your poem is expressive as it takes one through the course of a storm. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from Thomas Blanks
The BD rhyme scheme works to paint vivid images. Very descriptive - the reader can sense the storm passing while the child feels safe in his feather bed.
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The BD rhyme scheme works to paint vivid images. Very descriptive - the reader can sense the storm passing while the child feels safe in his feather bed.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a verse exploring the sensations felt as one listens to the rain dance.
The sensory details used added a layer of dimension to your writing.
I appreciate the presentation and poetic formatting.
I, too find the rain soothing, inviting, and restful.
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This is a verse exploring the sensations felt as one listens to the rain dance.
The sensory details used added a layer of dimension to your writing.
I appreciate the presentation and poetic formatting.
I, too find the rain soothing, inviting, and restful.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Simplistic. Well written. Cadence continuous. Well done. Nothing more to say. ..........................................................................................................................
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Simplistic. Well written. Cadence continuous. Well done. Nothing more to say. ..........................................................................................................................
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Willie.
-I don't know if I would like a tin roof,
but you do a good job describing it
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I always hid under the covers during thunder and lightening!
-This is a good image:
"Rain drops falling,
In perfect Tempo."
-A good concluding verse.
-Well done.
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Willie.
-I don't know if I would like a tin roof,
but you do a good job describing it
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I always hid under the covers during thunder and lightening!
-This is a good image:
"Rain drops falling,
In perfect Tempo."
-A good concluding verse.
-Well done.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from royowen
A Beautifully written nostalgic poem Willie. Superbly written in great language, describing the times of yesteryear, that tend to define how we think and feel, this is a delightful read, well done, blessings Roy
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A Beautifully written nostalgic poem Willie. Superbly written in great language, describing the times of yesteryear, that tend to define how we think and feel, this is a delightful read, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Willie, your poem is so heartfelt. Good descriptive writing. I can hear the wind blowing and the rain tapping on the tin roof. This is a childhood memory to cherish, indeed. This is a great example of a time when less was more. Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Hi Willie, your poem is so heartfelt. Good descriptive writing. I can hear the wind blowing and the rain tapping on the tin roof. This is a childhood memory to cherish, indeed. This is a great example of a time when less was more. Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. This poem made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a great memory you shared with us, Willie.
I enjoyed reading this. Your words were descriptive,
and I could see everything you mentioned. Those days
are gone forever except in the memories of those who
actually go to enjoy the sights, sounds, and smells of them.
You described an awesome scene of being snuggled under
the feather quilt on the feather bed listening to the rain of the
roof. Your rhymes worked well, the flow was smooth, and the
repeated two lines fit in seamlessly.
lightening-->lightning
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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What a great memory you shared with us, Willie.
I enjoyed reading this. Your words were descriptive,
and I could see everything you mentioned. Those days
are gone forever except in the memories of those who
actually go to enjoy the sights, sounds, and smells of them.
You described an awesome scene of being snuggled under
the feather quilt on the feather bed listening to the rain of the
roof. Your rhymes worked well, the flow was smooth, and the
repeated two lines fit in seamlessly.
lightening-->lightning
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
Comment from country ranch writer
We love to hear the rain on a tin roof. It has a calming effect my husband used to say. He'd go right to sleep before everyone else snoring so loud!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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We love to hear the rain on a tin roof. It has a calming effect my husband used to say. He'd go right to sleep before everyone else snoring so loud!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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I don't have a tin roof now, but I wish I did. On a cold, rainy, thunder
and lightening night I sleep like a baby under a tin roof. You don't hear much about a feather bed anymore. One thick to sleep on and one thin to sleep under. I appreciate your six stars and review. Nighty nite. Willie P.
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Those was the good ole days of grandmas feather bed and feather pillows done up by hand using duck down.We used to hang them out in 5he sun. To kill the germs boric acid ,baking soda, and coarse salt used to get rid of bugs of all kinds,also apple cider vinerger was used .We took a bath at grandmas with homemade soaps.
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Those was the good ole days of grandmas feather bed and feather pillows done up by hand using duck down.We used to hang them out in 5he sun. To kill the germs boric acid ,baking soda, and coarse salt used to get rid of bugs of all kinds,also apple cider vinerger was used .We took a bath at grandmas with homemade soaps.Comforters we?re hand made and quilts.
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Those was the good ole days of grandmas feather bed and feather pillows done up by hand using duck down.We used to hang them out in 5he sun. To kill the germs boric acid ,baking soda, and coarse salt used to get rid of bugs of all kinds,also apple cider vinerger was used .We took a bath at grandmas with homemade soaps.Comforters we?re hand made and quilts.
Comment from BethShelby
This is my idea of perfect bliss. You are describing my life when I got to sleep in my grandparents house. I loved the rain on the tin roof and the feather bed and the roaring fire. The only thing I also loved that you didn't mention was the ticking and striking of the mantle clock. Even today i get excited and happy over a thunder storm when I snuggled in bed.
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This is my idea of perfect bliss. You are describing my life when I got to sleep in my grandparents house. I loved the rain on the tin roof and the feather bed and the roaring fire. The only thing I also loved that you didn't mention was the ticking and striking of the mantle clock. Even today i get excited and happy over a thunder storm when I snuggled in bed.
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
