Under my tin roof
A comfortable feeling51 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Willie,
This poem has strong rhyme, both fill and slant, along with a smooth meter.
It gives clear images of the storm. It also shows that, whether rain or shine, all is well under your tin roof, for both rain an sun are bedded for growth.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Hi Willie,
This poem has strong rhyme, both fill and slant, along with a smooth meter.
It gives clear images of the storm. It also shows that, whether rain or shine, all is well under your tin roof, for both rain an sun are bedded for growth.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
When I was growing up my parents had a small cottage with a tin roof. Lol. There were no gentle rains. It always sounded like rocks being pelted . But I loved it. You have described this magical sound very creatively. The nostalgia came through as did the sense of peace. Great job. Gretchen
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When I was growing up my parents had a small cottage with a tin roof. Lol. There were no gentle rains. It always sounded like rocks being pelted . But I loved it. You have described this magical sound very creatively. The nostalgia came through as did the sense of peace. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a very well told experience in rhyme. It reminds me of the times I have slept out at the family camp with the rain coming down on the camp roof.
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This is a very well told experience in rhyme. It reminds me of the times I have slept out at the family camp with the rain coming down on the camp roof.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Barry Penfold
Nice poem. Brings back memories of days I spent at my grandmothers with her small cottage and tin roof. Nothing like listening to the rain on a tin roof. Sort of reassuring . Thanks for the memories.
Barry Penfold
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Nice poem. Brings back memories of days I spent at my grandmothers with her small cottage and tin roof. Nothing like listening to the rain on a tin roof. Sort of reassuring . Thanks for the memories.
Barry Penfold
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Rain on the roof and a feather bed - doesn't get much better than that!
From the onset of the storm to the point where it stops, this is a wonderfully expressed memory of something that brought you comfort. I hope that it still does.
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Rain on the roof and a feather bed - doesn't get much better than that!
From the onset of the storm to the point where it stops, this is a wonderfully expressed memory of something that brought you comfort. I hope that it still does.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Charity Stewart
The photo you chosen matches perfectly with this poem. The flow and structure is awesome. You have a way with words. Keep writing and looking forward to more work by you.
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The photo you chosen matches perfectly with this poem. The flow and structure is awesome. You have a way with words. Keep writing and looking forward to more work by you.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It was like living in heaven on earth. Yes, relaxing underneath a tin roof as it stormed through the night of lightning and thunder, I fell asleep. We did not have a fireplace, but a wood burning stove was in the living room. We were under enough homemade quilts that kept us warm and cozy. Thank you for sharing this great poem with heartfelt memories.
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It was like living in heaven on earth. Yes, relaxing underneath a tin roof as it stormed through the night of lightning and thunder, I fell asleep. We did not have a fireplace, but a wood burning stove was in the living room. We were under enough homemade quilts that kept us warm and cozy. Thank you for sharing this great poem with heartfelt memories.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from zanya
These stanzas evoke a powerful sense of nostalgia and life in a different time with different mores- the reader can almost hear the sound of the rain!
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These stanzas evoke a powerful sense of nostalgia and life in a different time with different mores- the reader can almost hear the sound of the rain!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from nomi338
There is something very soothing about the sound of rain falling upon the roof. I get a similar feeling when sitting in a very warm and secure room and look out at snow covered ground. It is always comforting to be securely locked away from cold, wet, or even heat. It may over a hundred degrees outside, but if you are in ana air conditioned room, you are very comfortable.
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There is something very soothing about the sound of rain falling upon the roof. I get a similar feeling when sitting in a very warm and secure room and look out at snow covered ground. It is always comforting to be securely locked away from cold, wet, or even heat. It may over a hundred degrees outside, but if you are in ana air conditioned room, you are very comfortable.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a wonderful glimpse at a moment in your childhood. The message is clearly presented. The text is large and easy to read. The font you selected looks like the writing of a child. The visual fits well. The word Rain drops} should be written together, raindrops is a compound word.
Thanks for sharing such a pleasant memory.
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This is a wonderful glimpse at a moment in your childhood. The message is clearly presented. The text is large and easy to read. The font you selected looks like the writing of a child. The visual fits well. The word Rain drops} should be written together, raindrops is a compound word.
Thanks for sharing such a pleasant memory.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
