Under my tin roof
A comfortable feeling51 total reviews
Comment from Nicolee Maree
There is a lot of imagery in this poem. You could easily picture yourself in the setting and listening to the rain. I thought it was a very nice poem and makes you feel at home.
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There is a lot of imagery in this poem. You could easily picture yourself in the setting and listening to the rain. I thought it was a very nice poem and makes you feel at home.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A wonderful poem full of
Great imagery that gives your readers the opportunity to feel and hear the sounds of the rain hitting the tin roof.
Great job.
Best wishes
Mary
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A wonderful poem full of
Great imagery that gives your readers the opportunity to feel and hear the sounds of the rain hitting the tin roof.
Great job.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and beautiful poetry. It is well written. It is clear and concise. Exceptional work! No mistakes found. Nice work! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and beautiful poetry. It is well written. It is clear and concise. Exceptional work! No mistakes found. Nice work! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Raul, for the review and shiny six stars. They are both appreciated. I doubt that many people today have any idea what a feather bed is. I haven't heard of anyone using them for years. Willie
Comment from Spitfire
A feather bed, the roar of a fire behind a screen, but most of all the ping of raindrops on the tin roof. I love that sound, but it's sometimes hard to hear on a house roof. And thick windows present another barrier to this pleasant noise that can put me to sleep.
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A feather bed, the roar of a fire behind a screen, but most of all the ping of raindrops on the tin roof. I love that sound, but it's sometimes hard to hear on a house roof. And thick windows present another barrier to this pleasant noise that can put me to sleep.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done reflections on a childhood memory. I like the use of handwriting for this poem. It works well. the narrative is great, the images sharp.
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nicely done reflections on a childhood memory. I like the use of handwriting for this poem. It works well. the narrative is great, the images sharp.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Shantal Minoso
Wow! What a gorgeous poem. The imagery is so vivid and soothing. I love a good rainstorm while being nestled peacefully in bed. I haven't experienced a good rainfall and thunder storm in quite some time but was able to briefly relive one through your words. Congratulations on this exceptional poem.
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Wow! What a gorgeous poem. The imagery is so vivid and soothing. I love a good rainstorm while being nestled peacefully in bed. I haven't experienced a good rainfall and thunder storm in quite some time but was able to briefly relive one through your words. Congratulations on this exceptional poem.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very interesting poem of remembrance, sparked by images and sound.
-You get beautiful movement and imagery of the limbs of trees in this poem, as well as sound of wind through the trees, contrasting with rain on the tin roof.
-Nicely structured poem.
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A very interesting poem of remembrance, sparked by images and sound.
-You get beautiful movement and imagery of the limbs of trees in this poem, as well as sound of wind through the trees, contrasting with rain on the tin roof.
-Nicely structured poem.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about rain and thunder. I like the sound, also the smell of rain. Good rhymes that don't sound forced. The meter is melodic. I like the overall presentation. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - AtticusWell done!
Gypsy
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Excellent poem about rain and thunder. I like the sound, also the smell of rain. Good rhymes that don't sound forced. The meter is melodic. I like the overall presentation. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - AtticusWell done!
Gypsy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Frank Malley
I have a few minor suggestions for this excellent poem. There is no comma needed after "proof," line 10. Especially if there's a rain, raindrops don't fall "in perfect tempo." I'd choose something like 'Nature's drum rolls.' In addition, "...feather bed" is usually one word. Going beyond these small complaints, this is a nice, gentle poem.
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I have a few minor suggestions for this excellent poem. There is no comma needed after "proof," line 10. Especially if there's a rain, raindrops don't fall "in perfect tempo." I'd choose something like 'Nature's drum rolls.' In addition, "...feather bed" is usually one word. Going beyond these small complaints, this is a nice, gentle poem.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
Comment from Jennifer Keeley
I like the idea behind your work. Great use of detail and it takes you(the reader) back to when they were a kid because it is a familiar feeling for lots of people. When I was a kid I loved when it rained.- I was one of those kids who loved to jump in puddles. Haha. The font style was a little different, but overall the poem was a pleasure to read!
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I like the idea behind your work. Great use of detail and it takes you(the reader) back to when they were a kid because it is a familiar feeling for lots of people. When I was a kid I loved when it rained.- I was one of those kids who loved to jump in puddles. Haha. The font style was a little different, but overall the poem was a pleasure to read!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
