You May Never Know
Being the parent of a poet.53 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so true, Nomi, I always, from a child, used to write childish poetry when I felt hard done by. That's what children do. And it doesn't stop there, we grow up and still put our fears and pain, our loves and dislikes into poetry, safe in the knowledge the person won't know who the poet is writing about. It's a safe and therapeutic way to get it all out without hurting anyone. I loved the way you wrote this, my friend. We as parents can only hope those words will one day change into something nice. Warmest hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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That is so true, Nomi, I always, from a child, used to write childish poetry when I felt hard done by. That's what children do. And it doesn't stop there, we grow up and still put our fears and pain, our loves and dislikes into poetry, safe in the knowledge the person won't know who the poet is writing about. It's a safe and therapeutic way to get it all out without hurting anyone. I loved the way you wrote this, my friend. We as parents can only hope those words will one day change into something nice. Warmest hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Hello Sandra, and thank you for a wonderful review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Your note and poem are appreciated, nomi.
-I like how you use different poetic forms and
rhyme them with the point you are making.
-The first part has good examples of what a child might write.
-Then, you go on to show what could happen as they grow older, and in their minds, "wiser!"
-You make a good point about "fears they may hide."
-I like your comparison and ballad and salad. Maybe it will have mixed meter.
-I assume your intention was to repeat a previous line for emphasis.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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-Your note and poem are appreciated, nomi.
-I like how you use different poetic forms and
rhyme them with the point you are making.
-The first part has good examples of what a child might write.
-Then, you go on to show what could happen as they grow older, and in their minds, "wiser!"
-You make a good point about "fears they may hide."
-I like your comparison and ballad and salad. Maybe it will have mixed meter.
-I assume your intention was to repeat a previous line for emphasis.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This poem started out as a revision of a country song Mams Don't Let Your Babies Grow Up To be Cowboys" It somehow morphed into its current state. Even so, I maintained one or two characteristics of the song.
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I am familiar with that song. I don't know if I told you, but your interview with Debi was very good.
I think you said you had a sense of humor. That's why I put the part about mixed meter; I was going to say it went with the mixed greens when you rhymed ballad and salad😊
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Thank you for your very generous comments, and I love your mixed greens observation. You are very clever.
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You are very welcome, and I am glad you liked the mixed greens! I like puns and plays on words, as well as humor!!
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Me too. I also like and enjoy finding or discovering people who like what I like.
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I agree with you about that idea.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Speaking as a novice poet, sometimes even the poet isn't sure what or who they are writing about. I enjoyed you asking us to explore such considerations. An interesting poem. Kate xx
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Speaking as a novice poet, sometimes even the poet isn't sure what or who they are writing about. I enjoyed you asking us to explore such considerations. An interesting poem. Kate xx
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Hello Kate. I am never sure what the final version of any poem I attempt to write will be. This poem is almost totally different hat it was when I started writing it. I kept changing it as I sought to make it better and more relevant to how I thought and felt.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
No, you just never know what they will write about. Kids usually say what is on their mind. They only think about writing the poem. Most of the time, you will never see what has been written. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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No, you just never know what they will write about. Kids usually say what is on their mind. They only think about writing the poem. Most of the time, you will never see what has been written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review thoughts. I appreciate your comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Nomi, with your fun poem that has
great information. Your words were well chosen with
smooth flow, great rhymes, and super imagery. I
agree with you. I liked the internal rhymes, too.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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You did a great job, Nomi, with your fun poem that has
great information. Your words were well chosen with
smooth flow, great rhymes, and super imagery. I
agree with you. I liked the internal rhymes, too.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you Jan. It is always to share with you this wonderful experience of writing and reviewing each others work.
Comment from sunnilicious
That was an insightful poem to being a parent. I am not yet married with child. However, you are because you wrote this poem. It is observational and holds experience of parenting and/or researched. Well thought. Clearly written. Clever. Nicely done. Excellent work :)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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That was an insightful poem to being a parent. I am not yet married with child. However, you are because you wrote this poem. It is observational and holds experience of parenting and/or researched. Well thought. Clearly written. Clever. Nicely done. Excellent work :)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Ooh, I like your pen name. Thank you for your wonderful and welcome comments. It is nice to meet you, I don't recall seeing your name before, but I will be on the lookout for you in future.
Comment from SLMorrical
I think this is cute, and based in reality. This flows well, which made it easy to follow. When you have a child that is creative and talented, it takes a lot for them to show you.I wanted to give you 6 stars, but ran out of my allocation.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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I think this is cute, and based in reality. This flows well, which made it easy to follow. When you have a child that is creative and talented, it takes a lot for them to show you.I wanted to give you 6 stars, but ran out of my allocation.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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No problem, your fine review comments are very well received.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I loved this piece, nomi. As both my sons write, I haven't had anything written about me yet, but I'm sure something is brewing in the wings. My only defense is that I haven't taught them everything I know. Yet! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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I loved this piece, nomi. As both my sons write, I haven't had anything written about me yet, but I'm sure something is brewing in the wings. My only defense is that I haven't taught them everything I know. Yet! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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I felt pretty good about my writing skills until I read something my daughter wrote and was completely humbled. Children I think, should be better than their parents.
Comment from June Sargent
Very true. But it would be an interesting ride to see where their creative genius leads us! In the end, whatever talent they inherited could be either a blessing or a curse. lol
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Very true. But it would be an interesting ride to see where their creative genius leads us! In the end, whatever talent they inherited could be either a blessing or a curse. lol
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Right you are, let us hope and pray that it never becomes a curse.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, You May Never Know, is a fun matching of poetic formats and those cute kids revealing of their thoughts about the world from their perspective. Hopefully, we come out looking better than expected.
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This poem, You May Never Know, is a fun matching of poetic formats and those cute kids revealing of their thoughts about the world from their perspective. Hopefully, we come out looking better than expected.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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We can at least hop. It may not turn out that way, but we do have hope if nothing else.
