Teenager In Love
I was a...11 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem . It has a great flow and rhyme scheme.Nice photo to compliment your words as well. Congrats on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem . It has a great flow and rhyme scheme.Nice photo to compliment your words as well. Congrats on winning the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you for this wonderful 6 star review. I can't tell you how much that means to me. :)
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Your welcome 🙂
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Now this writing I understand. It is very similar to the one I wrote. Four years of sitting on the pines wanting the coach (the girl) to let me play the game. Never happened, and though she was always smiling, and toying with me, (she was a tease) 1460 days passed and I never got on the field.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Now this writing I understand. It is very similar to the one I wrote. Four years of sitting on the pines wanting the coach (the girl) to let me play the game. Never happened, and though she was always smiling, and toying with me, (she was a tease) 1460 days passed and I never got on the field.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thanks for reading my poem, I'm sorry for what you went through, I totally understand. I appreciate this great review. :)
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Way too long ago to line. Beside, I found someone who accepted me unconditionally.
Comment from jessizero
I hurt for you while I was reading this story/poem. I am glad it no longer hurts you, and that you have found your true soulmate. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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I hurt for you while I was reading this story/poem. I am glad it no longer hurts you, and that you have found your true soulmate. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much, I appreciate this thoughtful review. :)
Comment from WLHall
Very nice poem with great rhyme and meter. Oh yes, the crushes we had in school! I remember how shy I was too. And would die if the guy knew. Wonderful job and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Very nice poem with great rhyme and meter. Oh yes, the crushes we had in school! I remember how shy I was too. And would die if the guy knew. Wonderful job and good luck.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for this thoughtful review and for understanding how it was. :)
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely poem of unrequited love, an the reader can certainly feel the angst, the anticipation, and then the bitter disappointment. Well written. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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A lovely poem of unrequited love, an the reader can certainly feel the angst, the anticipation, and then the bitter disappointment. Well written. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much for this great review. :)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Unrequited Love writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I was shy in school also. I am not shy now, but I didn't talk to the guys or very much to the girls either. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Unrequited Love writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I was shy in school also. I am not shy now, but I didn't talk to the guys or very much to the girls either. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for this thoughtful review and for the member cent pumps. School was a difficult time for me, with my social anxiety and I eventually dropped out( actually kicked out for never going ). After I met my future husband he encouraged me to get my GED and go to college. Life got better. I'm glad it got better for you as well. Thanks again.:)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Puppy Love? No, unrequited love. It seems I remember waking up to the fact there were some pretty dreamy boys on the basketball team. Of course at that age we are too young and awkward to do any more than dream. LOL Well done,Sharon. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Puppy Love? No, unrequited love. It seems I remember waking up to the fact there were some pretty dreamy boys on the basketball team. Of course at that age we are too young and awkward to do any more than dream. LOL Well done,Sharon. Nancy:)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you, this is my true story and I still remember what he looked like and his last name....lol. Thanks again. :)
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
He was not meant to be. Your husband is your soulmate. Things happen for a reason. I believe our lives are predestined. God knew who was right for you. It was not a coincidence that you and your husband were drawn together. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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He was not meant to be. Your husband is your soulmate. Things happen for a reason. I believe our lives are predestined. God knew who was right for you. It was not a coincidence that you and your husband were drawn together. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you, I definitely agree with you. When I was 13 though, I thought for sure I'd marry David Cassidy of The Partridge Family...lol. Thanks again.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lancellot
This is a well crafted poem structurally. Context or story wise. It leaves questions. If Tim never knew your feelings was it unrequited love? Also, you go from love to crush, to knowing nothing of love, to we never spoke. just saying.
Knew nothing of love, but he gave me a rush,
- who knew nothing of love? You, Tim or both. (I, He, or We)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This is a well crafted poem structurally. Context or story wise. It leaves questions. If Tim never knew your feelings was it unrequited love? Also, you go from love to crush, to knowing nothing of love, to we never spoke. just saying.
Knew nothing of love, but he gave me a rush,
- who knew nothing of love? You, Tim or both. (I, He, or We)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thanks for this great review and the tip on how to make it better. I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Oh my, puppy love hurts so bad, especially if you are too shy to try to do anything about it. That's exactly how I was all the way through high school. There were even a couple of girls who came right up to me and told me they liked me, but I didn't get it, I just let it pass by. So glad those years are behind me and I, too, have found my one true "pull-apart", my one true love.
A very cool poem, the rhyming is great, and it flows very nicely. And most of all, it hits on something that I am sure most or at least many of us have experienced at least once or twice in our young lives.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Oh my, puppy love hurts so bad, especially if you are too shy to try to do anything about it. That's exactly how I was all the way through high school. There were even a couple of girls who came right up to me and told me they liked me, but I didn't get it, I just let it pass by. So glad those years are behind me and I, too, have found my one true "pull-apart", my one true love.
A very cool poem, the rhyming is great, and it flows very nicely. And most of all, it hits on something that I am sure most or at least many of us have experienced at least once or twice in our young lives.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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You are so kind, thank you for reading and reviewing my poems. :)