Cedar Breaks National Monument
Contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Nobody can beat that for a sky-diving adventure!! Very vividly described! Just as well your Sam is both intelligent and obedient, so he can enjoy such wonderful outings. Love your imagination and creativity. And a fantastic image - well done there too! Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Nobody can beat that for a sky-diving adventure!! Very vividly described! Just as well your Sam is both intelligent and obedient, so he can enjoy such wonderful outings. Love your imagination and creativity. And a fantastic image - well done there too! Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Hey, Wendy, hello. Thank you so much for fantastic review and giant sixer. I'm not sure if I've mentioned this before or not, but I love working in my art program just about as much as writing. I think the picture actually took longer to complete. Lol. There's like seven different pictures I used just to make this one. I love creating my own accompanying pictures. As always, I dearly appreciate the kind comments and stars, Wendy. I'm glad you liked another one of my ridiculous outings. Thank you again.
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Ron
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Very welcome. You are very creative, both with stories and with art.
Comment from Susan Newell
DS,
What a delightfully entertaining story, flawlessly written. One could almost believe it happened. "Flip the bill" is a new idiom for me. I'm familiar with "foot the bill" and assume both have the same meaning. A toast to Sam and his grand adventures.
Sue
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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DS,
What a delightfully entertaining story, flawlessly written. One could almost believe it happened. "Flip the bill" is a new idiom for me. I'm familiar with "foot the bill" and assume both have the same meaning. A toast to Sam and his grand adventures.
Sue
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Sue. I was tired while writing this and I'm pretty sure you were right. I corrected it and changed it to 'foot' the bill, like it's suppose to be. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.
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Ron
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You are welcome, Ron.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Sam, what a great name for a dog.
Para 6, 3rd sentence: (I've) should be (I'd) past tense (I'd) vs present tense (I've) past tense to agree with (been)
Para 7, 1st sentence: Insert (of) between (couple) and (miles)
Para 7, 2nd sentence: (Yelled) should be (yelled) capitalization
Para 8, 1st sentence: Add comma after (limp)
Para 10, 3rd sentence: (two day) should be (two-day) Hyphen
I had to check again to make sure this was fiction. I couldn't imagine a dog, named Sam or any name, being willing to jump out of a perfectly good airplane into who knows what. It was a thrilling story though.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Sam, what a great name for a dog.
Para 6, 3rd sentence: (I've) should be (I'd) past tense (I'd) vs present tense (I've) past tense to agree with (been)
Para 7, 1st sentence: Insert (of) between (couple) and (miles)
Para 7, 2nd sentence: (Yelled) should be (yelled) capitalization
Para 8, 1st sentence: Add comma after (limp)
Para 10, 3rd sentence: (two day) should be (two-day) Hyphen
I had to check again to make sure this was fiction. I couldn't imagine a dog, named Sam or any name, being willing to jump out of a perfectly good airplane into who knows what. It was a thrilling story though.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the great review and for catching the goofs, Gary. I fixed them. Yep, my pooch's name was Sam. Yeah, I'm pretty sure not many folks would let their dog jump out of a plane without being connected to it. Lol. I appreciate the stars and help, friend. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Ron
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting and well written. Well, your dog is your bestfriend so why not?
notes:
At thirty-two thousand feet, Dave hollered, "Two minutes!" I looked at Sam with wide, excited eyes and yelled, "Wingsuiting? Who wants to go wingsuiting?" He jumped around in circles, wagging his tail in anticipation and barking with ecstatic enthusiasm. I pulled the door open and got ready. He stood at the exit, fervently shaking, just waiting for the command.
- Recommend breaking this up, as you have different speakers and actors.
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Very interesting and well written. Well, your dog is your bestfriend so why not?
notes:
At thirty-two thousand feet, Dave hollered, "Two minutes!" I looked at Sam with wide, excited eyes and yelled, "Wingsuiting? Who wants to go wingsuiting?" He jumped around in circles, wagging his tail in anticipation and barking with ecstatic enthusiasm. I pulled the door open and got ready. He stood at the exit, fervently shaking, just waiting for the command.
- Recommend breaking this up, as you have different speakers and actors.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the great review and heads up on the mistake, Lancellot. I separated it. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. Have yourself a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is so amusing my friend. You have awakened my interest in these restrictive contests... I will try and remember to vote. However it's driving me mad of course trying to work out how much of this story is true. It seems so plausible. Kate xx
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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This is so amusing my friend. You have awakened my interest in these restrictive contests... I will try and remember to vote. However it's driving me mad of course trying to work out how much of this story is true. It seems so plausible. Kate xx
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Kate. Yep, just use some imagination and the sky's the limit. Haha. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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Ron
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The stars weren't super generous, but it's all I have left. Kate xx
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They were perfect, K. Thank you again.
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