Ungrateful
An unfortunate situation15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Congrats on third place. Last night I wrote reviews like crazy. One was for this. It seems all of them disappeared into the ether and I'm laboriously going back trying to retrace my steps. Not sure why the glitch, but it's likely on my end. (Old laptop, very grumpy)...
This has me gasping! One of those I WISH was fiction, but sadly, is true...
Very well written.
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Congrats on third place. Last night I wrote reviews like crazy. One was for this. It seems all of them disappeared into the ether and I'm laboriously going back trying to retrace my steps. Not sure why the glitch, but it's likely on my end. (Old laptop, very grumpy)...
This has me gasping! One of those I WISH was fiction, but sadly, is true...
Very well written.
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you Karenina. I appreciate your comments.
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You're very welcome...
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Thesis you've done a great job re-telling this story. I got it in one and of course horrified like others of the young girl's future abuse. Your words were so specific and direct. No flim flam in this one. Great job. Hope you are well. Take care. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thesis you've done a great job re-telling this story. I got it in one and of course horrified like others of the young girl's future abuse. Your words were so specific and direct. No flim flam in this one. Great job. Hope you are well. Take care. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hi Kiwi, thank you so much for reading. Yes, it was disturbing and I felt badly for the little girl. She hurt her arm and then she was hurt again by the slap and how she must have felt at that time. It was hard to witness.
Comment from jessizero
What a horrible thing to happen! I was really hoping this was fictional. I am glad that the young girl's arm was okay, but I was horrified that she was punished.
Still, you told the story well. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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What a horrible thing to happen! I was really hoping this was fictional. I am glad that the young girl's arm was okay, but I was horrified that she was punished.
Still, you told the story well. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
Comment from joann r romei
Oh how terrible, not only was she hurt, she got in even more trouble by the people who should have been concerned, at least you were the hero in her eyes.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Oh how terrible, not only was she hurt, she got in even more trouble by the people who should have been concerned, at least you were the hero in her eyes.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a very well written story that gives enough information to allow the reader to understand what took place. Unfortunately, the little girl was injured and then punished, while you never received acknowledgement or a thank you for helping her. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This is a very well written story that gives enough information to allow the reader to understand what took place. Unfortunately, the little girl was injured and then punished, while you never received acknowledgement or a thank you for helping her. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
Comment from Marienkiefer
This piece stirs discussion. It can be viewed and, interpreted differently dependent on culture, values on upbringing.
It appears that the writer leaves to readers to interpret what is going on, with out seemingly passing judgement or interpretation.
The title is provocative as it asks readers to interpret which parts of the picture are actually wrong.
Very interesting story.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This piece stirs discussion. It can be viewed and, interpreted differently dependent on culture, values on upbringing.
It appears that the writer leaves to readers to interpret what is going on, with out seemingly passing judgement or interpretation.
The title is provocative as it asks readers to interpret which parts of the picture are actually wrong.
Very interesting story.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You have done a great job with the writing prompt.
This is well written, compose, and realized.
Your detailed writing painted a clear picture for the reader to see and become engaged.
The ending came as a bit if a shock and was defiantly unexpected.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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You have done a great job with the writing prompt.
This is well written, compose, and realized.
Your detailed writing painted a clear picture for the reader to see and become engaged.
The ending came as a bit if a shock and was defiantly unexpected.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
Comment from royowen
How cruel and awful for the little girl, she will now probably grow up much like her parents. Is there any particular reason why you chose an Arabian couple for the parents? But a great little entry in this contest. Good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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How cruel and awful for the little girl, she will now probably grow up much like her parents. Is there any particular reason why you chose an Arabian couple for the parents? But a great little entry in this contest. Good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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It's a true story. The parents were from Saudi Arabia.
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Oh I see, great story
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Wow. Done any other favors lately? I would hesitate for sure. ...........................................................................................................................................................
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Wow. Done any other favors lately? I would hesitate for sure. ...........................................................................................................................................................
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Wow, what a horrific action the little girl received through
no fault of her own. You did a great job, Mystery Author,
with your contest entry. You described the situation well.
I could see everything due to your well-chosen words.
Your entry fits the prompt perfectly.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Wow, what a horrific action the little girl received through
no fault of her own. You did a great job, Mystery Author,
with your contest entry. You described the situation well.
I could see everything due to your well-chosen words.
Your entry fits the prompt perfectly.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review. I appreciate them.