The Last of the Sun
As the Sun Dies4 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing your poem from childhood. Wow, you were quite the mature poet for a child! The sun could symbolize many things or the end of the world but there is strong sense of continuing on even after the sun has died and the narrator seeks her destiny.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing your poem from childhood. Wow, you were quite the mature poet for a child! The sun could symbolize many things or the end of the world but there is strong sense of continuing on even after the sun has died and the narrator seeks her destiny.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Dear Helen, Thank you for your review and the five stars. I remember writing this piece. It had been an awful day, wet and cold and my mother kept making 'cups of tea" to warm us up. When I went outside the stars were shining and there was the most glorious sunset!! I came back inside and wrote the poem "straight off my head". I was about 15 or 16 at the time.What you see there today has barely changed.cheers Cass
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💖💖 You were always a poet and deep thinker, Cass!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
you have your first vote!
I enjoyed reading your lovely poem.
Sunset are both stunning but also for many a source of sadness. The day is at its end.
I read your notes and I'm impressed with the poetic artistry you already possessed as girl.
The opening segment is beautiful.
The sun in glory died alone
With last fanfare from fallen throne
His blazoned colours from ramparts high
Have stained the earth where now they lie
I am by nature gloomy hence I actually feel good watching the sun sink.
I feel embraced in those ( warm) arms you mention. (wink)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Ciao mystery poet,
you have your first vote!
I enjoyed reading your lovely poem.
Sunset are both stunning but also for many a source of sadness. The day is at its end.
I read your notes and I'm impressed with the poetic artistry you already possessed as girl.
The opening segment is beautiful.
The sun in glory died alone
With last fanfare from fallen throne
His blazoned colours from ramparts high
Have stained the earth where now they lie
I am by nature gloomy hence I actually feel good watching the sun sink.
I feel embraced in those ( warm) arms you mention. (wink)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
Thank you also for your vote.Very kind to be sure. When I was a girl, writing seemed like an exotic, unusual occupation, and visits from my Muse were viewed with some suspicion by my mother. Had my desire to write been encouraged more who knows what may have eventuated. However, it never left me entirely, and now in my old age (82) it still comes to me, pestering me to write the words that form in my brain. Some things just aen't meant to be.
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Ciao!
Your entry deserved more votes , I am disappointed.
Yes , it?s a shame you mother did not leave you cultivate your art. , glad you are back writing , its a great way to keep your mind active too.
I was never good with words ,I have always been a listener.
My father passed away in Sept 2017 and eight months later I started to think in rhyme , I wrote my first wee poem in July 2018.
It helped me deal with his death. I just babble but I do enjoy this form of art.
Looking forward to read more of your work
Keep safe
Ciao!
Comment from the13thpoet
A happy Thursday to you. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the contest. I enjoyed the flow and rhyme of it. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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A happy Thursday to you. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the contest. I enjoyed the flow and rhyme of it. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
I had a delightful day yesterday, thank you. Today is Friday, and, according to the menu here at Oakwood, fish for lunch today . So Friday's shaping up rather well too.
Thank you for your comments on my work. They are most welcome and generous. cheers
Comment from RodG
I really like how you have personified the sun in this poem as a dying warrior. The imagery paints a vivid picture of "him" lying "his arms upon the sea are cast/vale for glories that have passed" but worthy of a hero's reward of laurel leaves."
This poem may have been written long ago, but it stood the test of time. I like it a lot! Rod
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I really like how you have personified the sun in this poem as a dying warrior. The imagery paints a vivid picture of "him" lying "his arms upon the sea are cast/vale for glories that have passed" but worthy of a hero's reward of laurel leaves."
This poem may have been written long ago, but it stood the test of time. I like it a lot! Rod
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Dear Rod G. Thank you for your review and the five stars.
This poem has been lost for decades, and was found quite by accident in a bundle of old birthday cards. The only copy, written with pen and ink. The imagery was sombre as my poetic moods were inclined towards melancholy. Thank again for a rewarding review.
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My pleasure.
