One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from June Sargent
The imagery in this free verse is powerful - capturing the deep emotions of loss and mourning. Mourning over the carcass of what used to be. Now that hopes and dreams have become dust in the wind.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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The imagery in this free verse is powerful - capturing the deep emotions of loss and mourning. Mourning over the carcass of what used to be. Now that hopes and dreams have become dust in the wind.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much, June. I appreciate your exceptional review.
I am always grateful of encourament and kindness.
Gypsy hugs
"Happiness is an uphill battle. Wear the good shoes." --Kurt Vonnegut
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your free verse poem - good picture presentation - picture of sadness - poem has excellent flow and a good use of metaphor's describing the perception of a young woman - expressing her thoughts of the future without hope, anticipating a future without her other - women - the masters of emotion - will certainly be in touch with the this theme on a deeper level. Good Job.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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I like your free verse poem - good picture presentation - picture of sadness - poem has excellent flow and a good use of metaphor's describing the perception of a young woman - expressing her thoughts of the future without hope, anticipating a future without her other - women - the masters of emotion - will certainly be in touch with the this theme on a deeper level. Good Job.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from aryr
This was beautifully well done, Gypsy. The picture was purely delightful. Your words of the free verse were magnificent in that they explained how one felt as one closed the door. Great job, really enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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This was beautifully well done, Gypsy. The picture was purely delightful. Your words of the free verse were magnificent in that they explained how one felt as one closed the door. Great job, really enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Aryr, thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Blessed be. and hugs .
Gypsy
"Hand over the chocolate and nobody will get hurt."
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Most welcome Gypsy. Blessed be n Hugs!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Your poetry is amazing . It has a beautiful overall presentation background and font colour. Nice photos to compliment your words. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Your poetry is amazing . It has a beautiful overall presentation background and font colour. Nice photos to compliment your words. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Joanne,
Thank you very much for your time, kindness, exceptional six stars review, and helpfull feedback. I really appreciate it.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Your kindly welcome
Comment from lyenochka
That's such a sad poem as it describes the loss of a love relationship and the memories of a happy, loving couple is buried like summer's warmth in winter. Great use of alliteration and onomatopoeia and personification in your free verse!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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That's such a sad poem as it describes the loss of a love relationship and the memories of a happy, loving couple is buried like summer's warmth in winter. Great use of alliteration and onomatopoeia and personification in your free verse!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much, big sister (*÷*) I'm happy you like it. From 10 to 5 years ago, I was very sad for my divorce and I pull emotions from my own experience...enbelished for poetic effect. I grieved for 5 years. I'm finally over him. I thought he was the one to share my life till we died but he had othe plans. I think writing is therapeutic.
Thank you very, big sister.
Love you ❤️
Marival
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He's not worthy of you! I'm glad you recovered but so sorry for all your pain. 💖
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Thank you, big sis. You are right.
Marival xoxox ❤️
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Your poem exemplifies Dr Seuss' quote. Everything comes to an end, well almost everything. But we cannot dwell on the end, we must always look forward to a new beginning.
Very nice verse Gypsy.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Your poem exemplifies Dr Seuss' quote. Everything comes to an end, well almost everything. But we cannot dwell on the end, we must always look forward to a new beginning.
Very nice verse Gypsy.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much, Gary, I appreciate your review.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This beautifully written poem is extremely emotional. I agree with Dr. Suess. Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened. I think those are perfect words to live by.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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This beautifully written poem is extremely emotional. I agree with Dr. Suess. Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened. I think those are perfect words to live by.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much, Barbara, I appreciate your review.
Gypsy
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It is not easy to pick up parts of a broken human heart. It is not like a puzzle that can be fit together by cardboard parts. A broken heart cannot be seen with the human eye. It takes time to pick yourself up. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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It is not easy to pick up parts of a broken human heart. It is not like a puzzle that can be fit together by cardboard parts. A broken heart cannot be seen with the human eye. It takes time to pick yourself up. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much, Carolyn. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
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You are welcome.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
As always this is a fabulous free verse revealing your versatility and talent, a very language rich and smoothly written articulation and a terrific write dear Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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As always this is a fabulous free verse revealing your versatility and talent, a very language rich and smoothly written articulation and a terrific write dear Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
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Welcome
Comment from dragonpoet
MariVal,
It sounds like this relationship, on the man's part at least, was based on lust and not love. She sees the relationship flying away like dust in the wind when he leaves. I think she will get over him in time.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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MariVal,
It sounds like this relationship, on the man's part at least, was based on lust and not love. She sees the relationship flying away like dust in the wind when he leaves. I think she will get over him in time.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Yes, with time all pain past... or gets easier. Thank you very much, Joan. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
