One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from karenina
Now this one I can sink my teeth into, having spent some 35 years working with the aged (until I became one of them!)--
I saw far too many sitting and gazing out at the world in just this way...
Now I fear that will be my place one day!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Now this one I can sink my teeth into, having spent some 35 years working with the aged (until I became one of them!)--
I saw far too many sitting and gazing out at the world in just this way...
Now I fear that will be my place one day!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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I fear to end up in a resthome. :( but I have kids so maybe not
Karenina
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback. Love you.
Gypsy Queen
"A friend is one who overlooks your broken fence and admires the flowers in your garden." -author unknown
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I have one who might take care of me.
Fifty fifty odds!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
Your poem struck a chord.
My Mamma died in Dec. 2006 and that's when I started to think about the inevitable:death.
She died suddenly, less than 5 minutes and she was gone. that s the best way.
My papà s anniversary was on the 9th of sept ( 2017).
My best friends father died last Tuesday.
He had a painful , ugly death , he was like a living corpse.
It sucked the life out of Lucia . 14 months bed ridden and the last three weeks was literally hell. The church is to blame for all this unnecessary pain.
I m scared to died slowly like that or end up in a home . I don't have children , never married and my father was the last of my family.
I just hope I died hit by a car , something quick.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Ciao!
Your poem struck a chord.
My Mamma died in Dec. 2006 and that's when I started to think about the inevitable:death.
She died suddenly, less than 5 minutes and she was gone. that s the best way.
My papà s anniversary was on the 9th of sept ( 2017).
My best friends father died last Tuesday.
He had a painful , ugly death , he was like a living corpse.
It sucked the life out of Lucia . 14 months bed ridden and the last three weeks was literally hell. The church is to blame for all this unnecessary pain.
I m scared to died slowly like that or end up in a home . I don't have children , never married and my father was the last of my family.
I just hope I died hit by a car , something quick.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Ciao, Amica,
I have the same fear and it creeps up from time to time. I try to push it away since I don't know when it will happen, seems like a waste of time... but I know what you mean. Dying while sleep would be the best. I want to be with family. I would be so sad if I end up in a rest home and dying alone.
Thank you very much for the exceptional six stars review, you are very kind. Ciao amica!
Gypsy
"hand over the chocolate and nobody will get hurt."
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I volunteered for a time in a nursing home and have had relatives who passed away as residents. is the loneliness. I cannot think of a more heartbreaking, lonely existence.
Your poem is striking in words and presentation.
Best regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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I volunteered for a time in a nursing home and have had relatives who passed away as residents. is the loneliness. I cannot think of a more heartbreaking, lonely existence.
Your poem is striking in words and presentation.
Best regards,
Mary
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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You are brave, I could not volunteer in a rest home, they are too sad for me. It's very kind of you to do it. You are brave.
Gypsy (*=*) xoxoxo
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and a sad result that awaits too many of us. I got a taste of nursing home life after my accident, and to have that in my future makes me shudder
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and a sad result that awaits too many of us. I got a taste of nursing home life after my accident, and to have that in my future makes me shudder
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Hello, Mike, living in a resthome is one of my greatest fears. I plan to live into my 90s and I know it must be hard for my kids to keep me. I try to push those thoughts out. Who knows when I'll die.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Think big thoughts but relish small pleasures." -- Jackson Brown Jr.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think the worst things about rest homes is the loneliness. I know many residents never get visitors. I'm not sure why. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I found it sad.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I think the worst things about rest homes is the loneliness. I know many residents never get visitors. I'm not sure why. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I found it sad.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Yes, I imagine it would be very lonely.
Thank you very much Barbara. I'm grateful for your reviews.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem- 5/7/5 Senryu- nice picture presentation- reminds of The Creation of Adam painting of old - good word count and connection- like the flavor of the rhyme- clever message- ' cruel thing to do- make me fall in love with you' - good job
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I like your poem- 5/7/5 Senryu- nice picture presentation- reminds of The Creation of Adam painting of old - good word count and connection- like the flavor of the rhyme- clever message- ' cruel thing to do- make me fall in love with you' - good job
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You are an expert in Haiku or 5-7-5 poems and I have read many poems of yours I like. But in this one, I thought the word "love" was over used. Maybe try a different one in same meaning.
Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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You are an expert in Haiku or 5-7-5 poems and I have read many poems of yours I like. But in this one, I thought the word "love" was over used. Maybe try a different one in same meaning.
Well done.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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You are right, I'm working on a revision.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
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I like the new version a lot, especially the alliterations.
Comment from lyenochka
It's true! Some people always are drawn to what they can't have. And some people are attracted to people they know are not good for them. Great way to describe this phenomenon in your 5-7-5!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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It's true! Some people always are drawn to what they can't have. And some people are attracted to people they know are not good for them. Great way to describe this phenomenon in your 5-7-5!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I was not happy with this one so I rewrote it last night at 2 am.... my muse has no concept of time.
LoL
Thank you very much, Helen. It's always good to hear from you.
Marival ❤️
