Do You Believe In Monsters?
Viewing comments for Prologue "Do You Believe In Monsters?"Living with a madman.
15 total reviews
Comment from Thesis
Your story was both very sad and informing. I agree, Monsters do exist. unfortunately, at that time, it was easier to get away with the type of behavior he exhibited. you wrote from the heart and I could feel the pain.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Your story was both very sad and informing. I agree, Monsters do exist. unfortunately, at that time, it was easier to get away with the type of behavior he exhibited. you wrote from the heart and I could feel the pain.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the review. I?m glad it was a long time ago.
Comment from Michelle Oden
It's hard to right about truth and trauma. This is great. Stories like these need to be shared so people know they are not alone. Beautifully written. Thank you.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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It's hard to right about truth and trauma. This is great. Stories like these need to be shared so people know they are not alone. Beautifully written. Thank you.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the awesome rating and for taking your time to read about my past. There can be great healing in writing.......
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was well written. Dean Paul is I think in many ways the typical man on steroids of that day as you start the story. And we learn more and it becomes difficult. Sorry you went through that. Your writing is solid. The portrait you draw here is difficult to read but it is detailed and emotional. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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I thought this was well written. Dean Paul is I think in many ways the typical man on steroids of that day as you start the story. And we learn more and it becomes difficult. Sorry you went through that. Your writing is solid. The portrait you draw here is difficult to read but it is detailed and emotional. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thank you. It id helpful to write about these things.
Comment from LJbutterfly
These are horrible childhood memories, but I'm glad, based on your author notes, you survived and later thrived. Thank you for sharing this story, and I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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These are horrible childhood memories, but I'm glad, based on your author notes, you survived and later thrived. Thank you for sharing this story, and I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and great rating!
Comment from Lisa Tepp
Wow--loved this! I agree that monsters do not have antennae on their heads, but they do almost always have hideous faces. How can something that causes such terror not have a hideous face? Your descriptive story of your stepfather and his imprint on you was fantastic! If I find one thing that seemed off, (I am big on spelling and grammar--to a fault), it is your sentence, "My real father had run off with his secretary a year before, and had "conveniently" forgot that he had kids." Forgot should probably be "forgotten". There's my only "criticism"--which is tiny in comparison to the strength of this story! Nice job!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Wow--loved this! I agree that monsters do not have antennae on their heads, but they do almost always have hideous faces. How can something that causes such terror not have a hideous face? Your descriptive story of your stepfather and his imprint on you was fantastic! If I find one thing that seemed off, (I am big on spelling and grammar--to a fault), it is your sentence, "My real father had run off with his secretary a year before, and had "conveniently" forgot that he had kids." Forgot should probably be "forgotten". There's my only "criticism"--which is tiny in comparison to the strength of this story! Nice job!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thanks. Good catch! I fixed it. I appreciate the review and assistance!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Yay! for the USMC. I enlisted at 17 1/2. My dad was a monster, he just left. (We reunited, but it was too little, too late.)
Very nicely written. I wanted so badly to walk into your house and put a K-bar in his neck.
a few catches -
my tuesday ritual - (Tuesday) capitalize
mom sent me out to work - (Mom) needs capitalized when not used as possessive.
in my driveway again!". - oops
Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Yay! for the USMC. I enlisted at 17 1/2. My dad was a monster, he just left. (We reunited, but it was too little, too late.)
Very nicely written. I wanted so badly to walk into your house and put a K-bar in his neck.
a few catches -
my tuesday ritual - (Tuesday) capitalize
mom sent me out to work - (Mom) needs capitalized when not used as possessive.
in my driveway again!". - oops
Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the assistance and the awesome review Absolutely loved the corps. We will always be brothers! Semper Fi
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Yes, I believe in monsters. You lived with one for six years. I lived with one for eighteen, who eventually killed my mother. I am not trying to compare monsters... I am telling you that you are not the Lone Ranger. There are several people on FanStory who have gone through similar childhoods. I used to think I was one of very few that had my childhood stolen and was living with the scars of abuse... not true. We are legion.
Peace, Thomas Blanks
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Yes, I believe in monsters. You lived with one for six years. I lived with one for eighteen, who eventually killed my mother. I am not trying to compare monsters... I am telling you that you are not the Lone Ranger. There are several people on FanStory who have gone through similar childhoods. I used to think I was one of very few that had my childhood stolen and was living with the scars of abuse... not true. We are legion.
Peace, Thomas Blanks
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Yes. It is interesting to find out that so many people had similar experiences. Strange, when you are going through it you feel very alone. He would have killed my mom if we stayed. He took her out on a dirt road one night and tried to strangle her. There were just too many incidents to list them all. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What a sad life to love and worse to b unable to shed it. My life wasa lil similar but without the beating. Verbally bruised our minds I suspect as badly as that belt bruised your butts.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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What a sad life to love and worse to b unable to shed it. My life wasa lil similar but without the beating. Verbally bruised our minds I suspect as badly as that belt bruised your butts.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thanks for your review. I have put it behind me. I feel that writing about it is the final nail in the monsters coffin.
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That makes my day.
Comment from joann r romei
This was very intense, I could feel the terror this miserable person did to innocent human beings, I really hope he rots, probably had mental illness. I'm glad your Mom left. I pray you receive the healing you deserve.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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This was very intense, I could feel the terror this miserable person did to innocent human beings, I really hope he rots, probably had mental illness. I'm glad your Mom left. I pray you receive the healing you deserve.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you! I still dream about those times, some forty years later. All in all, we children have turned out pretty decent. Thank you for the awesome rating!
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I'm not surprised you all turned out well, u had a loving mother and siblings that stuck together
Comment from Bill Schott
This was a very descriptive and sincerely vilifying character sketch of Dean Paul. He was definitely someone I would have volunteered to run over with a car. I wonder how the other children felt about your step-father. Did he disappear mysteriously one day, or did he receive sainthood?
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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This was a very descriptive and sincerely vilifying character sketch of Dean Paul. He was definitely someone I would have volunteered to run over with a car. I wonder how the other children felt about your step-father. Did he disappear mysteriously one day, or did he receive sainthood?
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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We have all exhibited different levels of trauma throughout our lives. Five out of six have nothing to do with him. One says she deserved to be punched in the face and have her nose broke. Sad really.
