A Moment in Time...
A mysterious beauty.7 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
This is a very well-written story. Where is the pen when needed.
I enjoyed the story. Well written, engaging readers and successfully draws readers into the scene with you,
One moment can last a lifetime....
A wonderful win for you today, however. Congratulations.
Very nice story.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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This is a very well-written story. Where is the pen when needed.
I enjoyed the story. Well written, engaging readers and successfully draws readers into the scene with you,
One moment can last a lifetime....
A wonderful win for you today, however. Congratulations.
Very nice story.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you! These are my first experiences getting support from my peers. It feels good!
Comment from Terry Broxson
No wonder you won the contest, this is an excellent story. I remember something similar in 1968. I was about to graduate college. A beautiful young girl a year behind me was checking her grades. I think I made her feel better about her first "B" I should have asked to go get a coke, but I didn't. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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No wonder you won the contest, this is an excellent story. I remember something similar in 1968. I was about to graduate college. A beautiful young girl a year behind me was checking her grades. I think I made her feel better about her first "B" I should have asked to go get a coke, but I didn't. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you! Seems like everyone has a 'what if' story hiding in the closet.
Comment from PENofFIRE
The what-ifs can drive us crazy if we allow them to. It just wasn't meant to be and the life you're living is reality. You did a great job with just 100 words. Loved that it was a true story and a good one at that. Best wishes with this contest entry.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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The what-ifs can drive us crazy if we allow them to. It just wasn't meant to be and the life you're living is reality. You did a great job with just 100 words. Loved that it was a true story and a good one at that. Best wishes with this contest entry.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you some much!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You told an interesting story with a twist at the end,
Mystery Author. I understand the term AWOL. I could
see how it affected the outcome of this story. You left
readers wondering the what ifs. The image was supporting.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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You told an interesting story with a twist at the end,
Mystery Author. I understand the term AWOL. I could
see how it affected the outcome of this story. You left
readers wondering the what ifs. The image was supporting.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you Jan!
Comment from Susan Newell
This is perfectly written with engaging descriptive language -- not an easy task, particularly with only one hundred words. This stands head and shoulders above the rest and reminds us all of those momentary contacts that disappeared as suddenly as they appeared.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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This is perfectly written with engaging descriptive language -- not an easy task, particularly with only one hundred words. This stands head and shoulders above the rest and reminds us all of those momentary contacts that disappeared as suddenly as they appeared.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you. Your words are so very kind. Do you think she still thinks about the blue eyed American stranger that she shared a kiss with that one moment that no words were spoken? Memories are fun!
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If I were she, without a doubt! Kissing a stranger is not an everyday occurrence. Do you still think about going back to find her?
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No. I?m married to a good woman and I know that I married up. It was just one of those poignant memories that is stuck in my head. If I would have known at that young age that she was my only random stranger kiss in life, maybe I would have taken an AWOL and risked getting rank busted down in rank 🤤
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Comment from jessizero
Wow. This was quite a story. What's even more amazing is that it was true. I don't blame you for not following her, but I am sure you must wonder what could have happened. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Wow. This was quite a story. What's even more amazing is that it was true. I don't blame you for not following her, but I am sure you must wonder what could have happened. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you This happened a long time ago and is the only time a random woman has ever kissed me. Thousands of pizzas and beers later has probably eliminated the chance of another such situation. LOL
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this story!!
It is fresh, clever, and creative.
I also love that it actually happened to you. Before reading the author notes, I was thinking why would he not get off the bus with her.
I love that you chose 100 words to paint a picture of " a moment in time."
Those are my favorite stories to read because they are so present and your memory of them is crystal clear.
Well done!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I love this story!!
It is fresh, clever, and creative.
I also love that it actually happened to you. Before reading the author notes, I was thinking why would he not get off the bus with her.
I love that you chose 100 words to paint a picture of " a moment in time."
Those are my favorite stories to read because they are so present and your memory of them is crystal clear.
Well done!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you. Once in a life moment. Still poignant in my mind. Makes me wonder if it is the same for her? Thanks for the review!
