My Husband's Need
And my attempts to avoid giving in41 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Mystery Author, when he begs and pleads, he knows
you're gonna give in sooner or later, right? You did a great
job with the rhyming contest prompt. Your entry had smooth
flow, good rhymes, and a fun story. You led readers on one
way, then switched gears right at the end. Oh, what one will
do when told no. Ice cream wins every time and that other thing
you hinted about. . . you know.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Well, Mystery Author, when he begs and pleads, he knows
you're gonna give in sooner or later, right? You did a great
job with the rhyming contest prompt. Your entry had smooth
flow, good rhymes, and a fun story. You led readers on one
way, then switched gears right at the end. Oh, what one will
do when told no. Ice cream wins every time and that other thing
you hinted about. . . you know.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Jan, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
He still knows how to beg for that other thing too tho! Sorry, TMI. haha!
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
My Husband's Need is a four-stanza poem with an aa, bb rhyme scheme. the poet uses double entendre to misdirect the reader into thinking the poem is about one thing and cleverly reveals the true topic in the last line.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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My Husband's Need is a four-stanza poem with an aa, bb rhyme scheme. the poet uses double entendre to misdirect the reader into thinking the poem is about one thing and cleverly reveals the true topic in the last line.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Tom Lol, thank you for such a kind review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from lancellot
Since this is FanStory and since no terminology was sexually explicit. the reader was waiting for the twist or misdirection at the end. And there it was with Ice Cream. Though, the suspension of disbelief is heavily required. your rhyme scheme was solid.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Since this is FanStory and since no terminology was sexually explicit. the reader was waiting for the twist or misdirection at the end. And there it was with Ice Cream. Though, the suspension of disbelief is heavily required. your rhyme scheme was solid.
Good luck.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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So do you think it probably wasn't necessary then to add that warning?
I was thinking because of being suggestive, but I so rarely need to change any warnings, that I do appreciate any advice that you can give me. I do know that we have a few younger writers on this site, and yet guessing that nothing would most likely grab my fourteen year old grandson faster than a warning of explicit nature. Lol! And as much as I knew that most would know that many of us women wouldn't presume to write about our husband's needs, they did enjoy the taunting until they got there. I've not seen too many movies that I couldn't figure out how it would end, but I still enjoy the movie. Thanks my dear friend for your kind review and comments.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words made me smile throughout this poem. I found these
words to be creative, funny, interesting and descriptive. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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The author's words made me smile throughout this poem. I found these
words to be creative, funny, interesting and descriptive. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Maria, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Boogienights
This is fantastic, you really had me going until the end. Incredibly clever is this poem, I wish I wrote it. Well written and easy to read, thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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This is fantastic, you really had me going until the end. Incredibly clever is this poem, I wish I wrote it. Well written and easy to read, thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Sharon, that is so very kind of you. Your kind words mean so much because I admire your work so very much. Thank you so much for the lovely review and words, and most certainly the gift of six stars. Thanks again my friend.
Comment from nomi338
Whew! I held my breath the whole time I was reading this clever, almost naughty rhyme. In the end it seems, the naughty thoughts were mine. Shame on you for being such a weakling. I know you could not help yourself, for being such an easy touch. That is just another reason why he adores you so much.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Whew! I held my breath the whole time I was reading this clever, almost naughty rhyme. In the end it seems, the naughty thoughts were mine. Shame on you for being such a weakling. I know you could not help yourself, for being such an easy touch. That is just another reason why he adores you so much.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much Nomi! I hope you had as much fun reading my silly poem as I did writing it. I think when you find out who I am you will be surprised that I would write such explicit material. Hehe! I certainly appreciate your kind words and the gift of six stars.. Thank you so much my friend.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I thought you a very wicked person to deprive your love. You have saved the best for last. Perfect ending! Yours was the first post of the morning. Thanks for the first-morning chuckle with my coffee. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I thought you a very wicked person to deprive your love. You have saved the best for last. Perfect ending! Yours was the first post of the morning. Thanks for the first-morning chuckle with my coffee. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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John, Lol, thank you for such a kind review and comments.
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
And you gave me a huge smile in return! I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Paul McFarland
I'm sure you had everyone going, right up until the last line. Nicely done, and the rhyme and meter are very good. I am also an ice cream lover.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I'm sure you had everyone going, right up until the last line. Nicely done, and the rhyme and meter are very good. I am also an ice cream lover.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Paul, Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.And I loved your fun fun remarks! You gave me a smile!
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from jaded831
Great build up, tastefully written, and fun to read. We need all the fun we can get these days. We all love what we can't have, my weakness is pasta. I could eat it every night, but don't, only once in a while.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Great build up, tastefully written, and fun to read. We need all the fun we can get these days. We all love what we can't have, my weakness is pasta. I could eat it every night, but don't, only once in a while.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Lol, thank you for such a lovely review and comments.And I loved your fun fun remarks! You gave me a smile! As I too could do the pasta even before ice cream. (and for sure before the other thing) haha!
This was kind of provocative for me, even if mostly suggestive but lots of fun.
I thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Wendy G
Love the humour in this, and I also love the twist at the end! Your poem is crafted with skill and care - and of course the rhyme and rhythm are excellent. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Love the humour in this, and I also love the twist at the end! Your poem is crafted with skill and care - and of course the rhyme and rhythm are excellent. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Wow, thank you Wendy for such a lovely review, fun comments and your very gracious six stars. It was fun to write and I love to see others smile too. Thank you so much my dear friend!
