The Broker
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Financial Advice"A demon requires fiscal advice
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Comment from prettybluebirds
This story has a lot of potentials. There are several ways you could go with the novel. I found it rather amusing and exciting too. I intend to watch and see where you are going with this one. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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This story has a lot of potentials. There are several ways you could go with the novel. I found it rather amusing and exciting too. I intend to watch and see where you are going with this one. Nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you. I have in mind more of a short story, but we shall see. I'm glad it amused you
Comment from lancellot
Very good and very interesting. It has the fable feel to is.
notes:
He shook his head and looked around. What was he thinking, wondered Julius. Perhaps he thought he was in the wrong place. Yes, let him lurch on, looking for a stream that wasn't there. Oh please let him move on.
=He shook his head and looked around.
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What was he thinking, wondered Julius. Perhaps he thought he was in the wrong place. Yes, let him lurch on, looking for a stream that wasn't there. Oh please let him move on.
Marduk finally noticed Julius. He didn't look pleased. He started to heave himself towards the cave, slow but as inevitable as continental drift.
-Marduk finally noticed Julius. He frowned, then started to heave himself towards the cave, slow but as inevitable as continental drift.
{That �¢?"} that... just goes to show how weak he is.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Very good and very interesting. It has the fable feel to is.
notes:
He shook his head and looked around. What was he thinking, wondered Julius. Perhaps he thought he was in the wrong place. Yes, let him lurch on, looking for a stream that wasn't there. Oh please let him move on.
=He shook his head and looked around.
-separate paragraph here-
What was he thinking, wondered Julius. Perhaps he thought he was in the wrong place. Yes, let him lurch on, looking for a stream that wasn't there. Oh please let him move on.
Marduk finally noticed Julius. He didn't look pleased. He started to heave himself towards the cave, slow but as inevitable as continental drift.
-Marduk finally noticed Julius. He frowned, then started to heave himself towards the cave, slow but as inevitable as continental drift.
{That �¢?"} that... just goes to show how weak he is.
- edit
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you. Glad you it interested you