Good Night, Baby Love
I forgot Mom's lullabies but not the sound of her voice.9 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Beddy-Bye Lullaby. contest. It's an adorable song to put the baby to sleep.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist."-- Picasso
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Excellent entry for the Beddy-Bye Lullaby. contest. It's an adorable song to put the baby to sleep.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist."-- Picasso
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
I saw this when I checked out your profile, but didn't realize that it was a blind contest until now. How sweet that you still remember your mother's voice as I do mine, but I still remember the lullaby but can't pronounce the title. because I think the title was Spanish. However this was lovely and so happy I read it. Best of luck in the contest as you have my vote.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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I saw this when I checked out your profile, but didn't realize that it was a blind contest until now. How sweet that you still remember your mother's voice as I do mine, but I still remember the lullaby but can't pronounce the title. because I think the title was Spanish. However this was lovely and so happy I read it. Best of luck in the contest as you have my vote.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. And thank you for taking the time to check out my profile. I wondered if anyone ever explored that part of the site. I get a thrill when a comment is made for one of the early entries I put on here. Thank you.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very precious and very sweet contest entry for the Beddy-Bye Lullaby contest. You used such sweet words and adorable picture of the little baby! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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This is a very precious and very sweet contest entry for the Beddy-Bye Lullaby contest. You used such sweet words and adorable picture of the little baby! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Bill Schott
This children's story, or poem rather, Good Night, Baby Love, becomes a nice song to sing which will hopefully send the little dumpling into sleepy world.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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This children's story, or poem rather, Good Night, Baby Love, becomes a nice song to sing which will hopefully send the little dumpling into sleepy world.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Such a wonderful lullaby. I love the song and I can see singing this when a child goes to sleep, especially a baby. I hope you do well in the contest. This surely deserves a winning.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Such a wonderful lullaby. I love the song and I can see singing this when a child goes to sleep, especially a baby. I hope you do well in the contest. This surely deserves a winning.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Beautifully stated lullaby. The rhyme scheme is good. I'm sure it brings back pleasant memories. For me the font size could be a bit larger. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
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Beautifully stated lullaby. The rhyme scheme is good. I'm sure it brings back pleasant memories. For me the font size could be a bit larger. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
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Thank you for this kind review. I will start using larger font sizes. Thank you.
Comment from jessizero
I read your poem and liked it. Then I read your author's notes and re-read it to the tune of "Love Me Tender" in my head. Awesome! Thanks for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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I read your poem and liked it. Then I read your author's notes and re-read it to the tune of "Love Me Tender" in my head. Awesome! Thanks for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from papa55mike
I'm proud to announce the birth of my second great-grandchild, Alaina. I'm going to share this piece with her Mother on Facebook. What a wonderfully written lullaby. Best of luck with your writing!
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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I'm proud to announce the birth of my second great-grandchild, Alaina. I'm going to share this piece with her Mother on Facebook. What a wonderfully written lullaby. Best of luck with your writing!
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your generous rating and kind review. It is especially uplifting to hear that your loved ones might fall asleep hearing this. I did make one change in the wording of the last line. Would you mind letting me know which way you like the best? Thank you.
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I like the new one.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
OooOOoooo.... How sweet! This poem just made me all warm and gooey inside! I really, really liked it. It has the feeling I WANT my grandgirl poems to have. I'm a little jelly of that. *smile*
But - to be a horrid negative Nellie - my starring role on this site - I must tell you I found your ending to be a bit weak - when compared to the rest of this brilliant post. (sorry!)
Not only because it seems a weaker ending - but because the poem is also about HEARING mommy, right?
So fall asleep my little child,
Enjoy the dreams you see.
I wonder if you'd consider bringing the ending back to the beginning - that big 'circle' is always a perfect format. Plus, it wouldn't really require a definite rhyme with 'eternity' because you'd rhyme with the top stuff again AND you could also use a near rhyme that makes the ear happy anyway. EX:
So fall asleep my little child,
and listen, while Mom sings.
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You may be able to do much better than that - AND you are certainly entitled to ignore every word I say! hahaha Thanks so much and good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
OooOOoooo.... How sweet! This poem just made me all warm and gooey inside! I really, really liked it. It has the feeling I WANT my grandgirl poems to have. I'm a little jelly of that. *smile*
But - to be a horrid negative Nellie - my starring role on this site - I must tell you I found your ending to be a bit weak - when compared to the rest of this brilliant post. (sorry!)
Not only because it seems a weaker ending - but because the poem is also about HEARING mommy, right?
So fall asleep my little child,
Enjoy the dreams you see.
I wonder if you'd consider bringing the ending back to the beginning - that big 'circle' is always a perfect format. Plus, it wouldn't really require a definite rhyme with 'eternity' because you'd rhyme with the top stuff again AND you could also use a near rhyme that makes the ear happy anyway. EX:
So fall asleep my little child,
and listen, while Mom sings.
*
You may be able to do much better than that - AND you are certainly entitled to ignore every word I say! hahaha Thanks so much and good luck!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Very good advice. I am changing it now and would love to hear what you think of the revision.
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Yay! Oh- can you avoid reusing 'sleep' in those two lines? 'sleep' x2
