Taking Flight and Leaving Home
Gaining independence... (694 words)10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This essay, Taking Flight and Leaving Home, gives voice to the albatross as we learn a lot about how they leave their birth home and the many extraordinary goals they achieve in their travels. Super.
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This essay, Taking Flight and Leaving Home, gives voice to the albatross as we learn a lot about how they leave their birth home and the many extraordinary goals they achieve in their travels. Super.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Love how you did this from the "bird's eye view!" You also gave lots of good information about the life of the albatross as well as of this place. Best wishes in the contest!
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Love how you did this from the "bird's eye view!" You also gave lots of good information about the life of the albatross as well as of this place. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Sense of Place Short Story writing prompt Contest. You grasped the short story form well. Nice picture. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery. Good character development of Royal Albatross and its life.
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Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Excellent entry for the Sense of Place Short Story writing prompt Contest. You grasped the short story form well. Nice picture. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery. Good character development of Royal Albatross and its life.
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Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Majestic in flight; disastrous in landings, at least if an albatros is also known as Gooney birds. Wake Island had a colony and I recall them falling from the sky and simply hadn't a clue how getting down was supposed to be done. I also wonder why they followed our ships for hours and hours without flapping a wing.
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Majestic in flight; disastrous in landings, at least if an albatros is also known as Gooney birds. Wake Island had a colony and I recall them falling from the sky and simply hadn't a clue how getting down was supposed to be done. I also wonder why they followed our ships for hours and hours without flapping a wing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Very creative, telling your story about a sense of place from the bird's point of view, and you have accomplished this very vividly. How delightful that the bells are run for the return of the first albatross. What a delightful welcome, and such a caring community. Fine writing - makes me want to visit! Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Very creative, telling your story about a sense of place from the bird's point of view, and you have accomplished this very vividly. How delightful that the bells are run for the return of the first albatross. What a delightful welcome, and such a caring community. Fine writing - makes me want to visit! Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thanks for this super review, Wendy - much appreciated. I like to imagine I can fly, a whole lot easier than all the current airport hassle when flying somewhere.... no luggage to lose for starters.
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You have my vote. A standout piece.
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Thanks very much for your support.
Comment from Thesis
I enjoyed this story as told through the eyes and mind of a Royal Albatross. It is packed with the habits and mating cycle of the bird and makes important points about the effect of climate change and it's effects on the viability of the species. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
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I enjoyed this story as told through the eyes and mind of a Royal Albatross. It is packed with the habits and mating cycle of the bird and makes important points about the effect of climate change and it's effects on the viability of the species. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
Comment from papa55mike
I have always been amazed at the images of New Zealand with the towering waterfalls, sheer cliffs, and amazing wildlife. It floored me that it takes eight months until their first flight. What a wonderfully written piece.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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I have always been amazed at the images of New Zealand with the towering waterfalls, sheer cliffs, and amazing wildlife. It floored me that it takes eight months until their first flight. What a wonderfully written piece.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
Comment from royowen
I've often been fascinated by this magnificent bird, the subject of myth magic to the seafaring community, an extraordinary creature, but this is more than i ever knew about them, but knew enough to be fascinated by them, thanks for sharing well done, blessings Roy
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I've often been fascinated by this magnificent bird, the subject of myth magic to the seafaring community, an extraordinary creature, but this is more than i ever knew about them, but knew enough to be fascinated by them, thanks for sharing well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
Comment from Sanku
It was when I read S.T Coleridge's 'Rime of the Ancient Mariner' that I first heard of these birds.is it true that they can fly for long time without touching land? Thank you for telling us about this fascinating bird.
And I think they mate for life? (no divorces!)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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It was when I read S.T Coleridge's 'Rime of the Ancient Mariner' that I first heard of these birds.is it true that they can fly for long time without touching land? Thank you for telling us about this fascinating bird.
And I think they mate for life? (no divorces!)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thanks for your review. They can go flying for several years without landfall - they land on the sea to eat then need a good-strength wind to take off gain. Yes, they have lifelong partners, but might divorce if they don't reproduce, then find another partner to try again.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love that this is told from the albatross perspective, and who has better than a bird's eye view to describe a place and all its rich beauty and inhabitants. I both enjoyed and learned, and it was a great read :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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I love that this is told from the albatross perspective, and who has better than a bird's eye view to describe a place and all its rich beauty and inhabitants. I both enjoyed and learned, and it was a great read :-)
Mike
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much for this lovely sparkling review! I wish I could fly - I often imagine I am a bird or a drone.
