Follow That Flock
Do you ever wish you could just take off somewhere?20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
If only we could fly with the geese and enjoy the views and I could identify with your words here, a well metered and rhymes poem for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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If only we could fly with the geese and enjoy the views and I could identify with your words here, a well metered and rhymes poem for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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I am delighted you enjoyed my poem and could identify with the Speaker, Dolly. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
In the poem Follow That Flock, the poet laments that he cannot travel south with the geese in the winter to the Everglades of Florida and share their fun. I live in Broward County, Florida, one mile east of the Everglades. So, don't worry. I'm here to greet them when they arrive. There's plenty of room, as the herons are thin and don't take up much space. The geese will need to watch out for the pythons!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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In the poem Follow That Flock, the poet laments that he cannot travel south with the geese in the winter to the Everglades of Florida and share their fun. I live in Broward County, Florida, one mile east of the Everglades. So, don't worry. I'm here to greet them when they arrive. There's plenty of room, as the herons are thin and don't take up much space. The geese will need to watch out for the pythons!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Wow! I can?t imagine what it would be like living that close to the Everglades. Exciting for sure. Many thanks, Thomas, for sharing my poem.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Very well done, but I need ask what kind of geese have you? Like in the picture? They look like ours here in Western North Carolina but ours never leave. They have taken permanent residence on our golf course.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Very well done, but I need ask what kind of geese have you? Like in the picture? They look like ours here in Western North Carolina but ours never leave. They have taken permanent residence on our golf course.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Thank you for sharing and praising my poem, Tom. We have many Canadian geese (like those in the picture) where I live. Like you, many choose to stay all year round, but I love to see the huge flights that often fly overhead.
Comment from Marienkiefer
A noticeable storytelling quality in this poem.
Sparkling in your poem:
-Theme that some may be bound by duty while others are free as birds.
-Shared introspect
-A wistful poem
-My favourite lines: the first stanza.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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A noticeable storytelling quality in this poem.
Sparkling in your poem:
-Theme that some may be bound by duty while others are free as birds.
-Shared introspect
-A wistful poem
-My favourite lines: the first stanza.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Marien, thank you so much for your wonderful, insightful review. You have understood and paraphrased my theme beautifully.
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Comment from Liz Westfall
Ah, to be a bird. To be able to fly at will and so freely. You know life is not over. You write your destiny as much as anyone. If you want to travel before you kick it, you'll find a way!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Ah, to be a bird. To be able to fly at will and so freely. You know life is not over. You write your destiny as much as anyone. If you want to travel before you kick it, you'll find a way!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Liz, for sharing my poem. Yes, I do have my bucket list of places I would like to visit. But I do envy those geese who can fly there NOW.
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Don't we all
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the rhyming poem contest. The rhyme scheme was consistent throughout. the text was large and easy to read. Your message is stated clearly. The visual fits perfectly. The text appears a bit faint. It may be better to make it bold so it will be more pronounced. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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This is a good entry to the rhyming poem contest. The rhyme scheme was consistent throughout. the text was large and easy to read. Your message is stated clearly. The visual fits perfectly. The text appears a bit faint. It may be better to make it bold so it will be more pronounced. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Sandra, for sharing and praising my poem. I also appreciate that excellent suggestion about making the text more bold.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Anne Johnston
What a great entry for this contest. I can sympathize with you. When my husband was alive we loved to travel in the fall and I miss that so much. All of our travels have been curtailed the last three years, so this poem resonates with us all.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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What a great entry for this contest. I can sympathize with you. When my husband was alive we loved to travel in the fall and I miss that so much. All of our travels have been curtailed the last three years, so this poem resonates with us all.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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I am so pleased my poem resonates with you, Anne. Because my wife and I are caretakers for her 101 year-old mother, we don?t travel either.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Marietta Geckos
I love your phrase of being yoked to farming chores... The imagery is beautiful. I'm very familiar with Maryland Virginia and Delaware in the east there... You took the reader to another place... Very well done.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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I love your phrase of being yoked to farming chores... The imagery is beautiful. I'm very familiar with Maryland Virginia and Delaware in the east there... You took the reader to another place... Very well done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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I am so pleased I could take you to another place, Marietta. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from lancellot
This is very good. I has the nature feel that older FanStory members really seems to like and prefer. I would look at some o f the coma placements again. But, I like what you have. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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This is very good. I has the nature feel that older FanStory members really seems to like and prefer. I would look at some o f the coma placements again. But, I like what you have. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much for sharing and praising my poem, lancellot. I shall look over those comma placements.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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I am very pleased you found my poem interesting and entertaining, Raul. Thanks for sharing.
