The Walkers
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Arriving in China"The Final Gabriel Hope Journey
7 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like this tough, complicated story, the spiritual effect and adventure stand of development is interesting, somehow it appears true, spiritual impacts are great; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I like this tough, complicated story, the spiritual effect and adventure stand of development is interesting, somehow it appears true, spiritual impacts are great; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from lyenochka
You've got a fabulous imagination, Mike! I couldn't follow what was going on but you seem to have created a spiritual fantasy book. There are spiritual battles going on all the time and who knows how the archangels Michael and Gabriel are flighting those battles. Great idea to do this!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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You've got a fabulous imagination, Mike! I couldn't follow what was going on but you seem to have created a spiritual fantasy book. There are spiritual battles going on all the time and who knows how the archangels Michael and Gabriel are flighting those battles. Great idea to do this!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Another great chapter in the Gabriel Hope story, Mike. The notes made me feel as though our small group of defenders could be outnumbered by the enemy. Wow, what a dreadful army of demons.
But we know better. LOL Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Another great chapter in the Gabriel Hope story, Mike. The notes made me feel as though our small group of defenders could be outnumbered by the enemy. Wow, what a dreadful army of demons.
But we know better. LOL Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hi, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
This saga is very complicated and must take a lot of imagination and time to create. It sort of reminds me of Pilgrim's Progress. You are doing a good job with it and now with the spiritual being around good will win over evil.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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This saga is very complicated and must take a lot of imagination and time to create. It sort of reminds me of Pilgrim's Progress. You are doing a good job with it and now with the spiritual being around good will win over evil.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from lancellot
I like the chapter. I like the story and concept. I do think more editing is needed. Things seemed to change nearer the end. Perhaps moving too fast. That happens.
notes:
"Not if we get my Tallit around her wound. Gabriel and I will raise her off the ground while you wrap this around her."
- I recommend separating the paragraph here. Too many different actor is follow section.-
Michael tosses Cris his garment, t
he reaches for the light. His eyes change from the riveting blue to a nasty tone of red. In the light penetrating beneath the door, I see his proper form
- this part seems odd. Did she see a shadow of him, or a refection? He is hold a light already.
An hour later, the Master comes out to an attendant dressed in black at the end of the hall.
-An hour later, the Master come out dressed in black, and speaks to an attendant at the end of the hall, "Put
He stands then asks Michael, "How long until she {wakes up."}
-He stands then asks Michael, "How long until she wakes up?"
"Can we travel with her, Michael?
- Didn't they just travel with her? I would change this up.
"Hello, my friends, and {rise," Michael} smiles at his troops.
-"Hello, my friends, and rise." Michael smiles at his troops.
"Yes, {General," He} walks over to Cal, takes her hand, and concentrates.
-"Yes, General." He walks over to Cal, takes her hand, and concentrates.
"No, sir, I have {not," Patrick} reaches out his hand,
-"No, sir, I have not." Patrick reaches out his hand,
{"Hi," Cris} smiles. "It's always a little strange meeting Angels."
-"Hi." Cris smiles. "It's always a little strange meeting Angels."
"General," Joshua walks to them.
-"General." Joshua walks to them.
Cris sighs, "Well, that's a relief."
-Cris sighs. "Well, that's a relief."
"Thank you, {Joshua," he turns} to Gabe and Cris.
-"Thank you, Joshua." He turns to Gabe and Cris.
Gabe smiles, then slaps Cris on the {back, "That's} a good idea
-Gabe smiles, then slaps Cris on the back. "That's a good idea
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I like the chapter. I like the story and concept. I do think more editing is needed. Things seemed to change nearer the end. Perhaps moving too fast. That happens.
notes:
"Not if we get my Tallit around her wound. Gabriel and I will raise her off the ground while you wrap this around her."
- I recommend separating the paragraph here. Too many different actor is follow section.-
Michael tosses Cris his garment, t
he reaches for the light. His eyes change from the riveting blue to a nasty tone of red. In the light penetrating beneath the door, I see his proper form
- this part seems odd. Did she see a shadow of him, or a refection? He is hold a light already.
An hour later, the Master comes out to an attendant dressed in black at the end of the hall.
-An hour later, the Master come out dressed in black, and speaks to an attendant at the end of the hall, "Put
He stands then asks Michael, "How long until she {wakes up."}
-He stands then asks Michael, "How long until she wakes up?"
"Can we travel with her, Michael?
- Didn't they just travel with her? I would change this up.
"Hello, my friends, and {rise," Michael} smiles at his troops.
-"Hello, my friends, and rise." Michael smiles at his troops.
"Yes, {General," He} walks over to Cal, takes her hand, and concentrates.
-"Yes, General." He walks over to Cal, takes her hand, and concentrates.
"No, sir, I have {not," Patrick} reaches out his hand,
-"No, sir, I have not." Patrick reaches out his hand,
{"Hi," Cris} smiles. "It's always a little strange meeting Angels."
-"Hi." Cris smiles. "It's always a little strange meeting Angels."
"General," Joshua walks to them.
-"General." Joshua walks to them.
Cris sighs, "Well, that's a relief."
-Cris sighs. "Well, that's a relief."
"Thank you, {Joshua," he turns} to Gabe and Cris.
-"Thank you, Joshua." He turns to Gabe and Cris.
Gabe smiles, then slaps Cris on the {back, "That's} a good idea
-Gabe smiles, then slaps Cris on the back. "That's a good idea
Comment Written 09-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for taking the time to give me a great edit and sound advice. It is deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Julie G1
I thought this was great. Intriguing, a battle ahead, a mystery. Good elements, well written. It would be interesting to read the entire novel. Good imagination. I hope you keep on writing.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I thought this was great. Intriguing, a battle ahead, a mystery. Good elements, well written. It would be interesting to read the entire novel. Good imagination. I hope you keep on writing.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hi, Julie. Thank you for your kind words and shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
So the Lord's armies are arrayed against the hordes of Lucifer and his wicked forces! Can they overcome them, absolutely, nothing can f defeat the great king, although they'll give a great deal of curry whil they can, and they are a tough opponent, well done, Mike, great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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So the Lord's armies are arrayed against the hordes of Lucifer and his wicked forces! Can they overcome them, absolutely, nothing can f defeat the great king, although they'll give a great deal of curry whil they can, and they are a tough opponent, well done, Mike, great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Most welcome
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Most welcome
