Dribbles And Drabbles
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Breathe"A Collection Of Mini Stories
11 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Brett,
Sadly society is still on a downturn and these drills are set to become a fact of life.
You have highlighted a surging problem and the potential mental health issues for children, teachers and students.
You have showed just how much can be relayed in aj few well chosen words.
Congrats on your win.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Hi Brett,
Sadly society is still on a downturn and these drills are set to become a fact of life.
You have highlighted a surging problem and the potential mental health issues for children, teachers and students.
You have showed just how much can be relayed in aj few well chosen words.
Congrats on your win.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Appreciate your comments, the review, and the sixer.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Congratulations on winning the flash fiction contest. The nervous door handle jiggling led me to think a crazed shooter was in the hallway. I was glad to find out in the end, the story was about a drill. Great storytelling.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Congratulations on winning the flash fiction contest. The nervous door handle jiggling led me to think a crazed shooter was in the hallway. I was glad to find out in the end, the story was about a drill. Great storytelling.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Thanks and appreciate the review.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
I have done this drill too many times to count over the past 28 years. I am so glad to be retired. Your title is good. The story is accurate to the true drill. Your visual fits well. However, your font size needs to be larger for older eyes. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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I have done this drill too many times to count over the past 28 years. I am so glad to be retired. Your title is good. The story is accurate to the true drill. Your visual fits well. However, your font size needs to be larger for older eyes. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
Your flash is well told - but there is an element of sadness that that is the reality in today's world for many children. No freedom to be children because of the fear of guns and attacks. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Your flash is well told - but there is an element of sadness that that is the reality in today's world for many children. No freedom to be children because of the fear of guns and attacks. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
That would be a frightening experience. In my day we would hide beneath the desk believing if an A-bomb exploded all would be well, do tell.
I am glad that never occurred either.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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That would be a frightening experience. In my day we would hide beneath the desk believing if an A-bomb exploded all would be well, do tell.
I am glad that never occurred either.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from jessizero
I was worried while reading this story. I could almost feel the silence and whispers. I was relieved at the end of this story. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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I was worried while reading this story. I could almost feel the silence and whispers. I was relieved at the end of this story. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from lancellot
Modern day, I don't know about that but we are certainly made to believe things were different in the past.
I murmured, "Someone has to halt this insanity!"
This is line is some many think, I believe. I like that there is no answer to it. Because there isn't one were humans exist.
A topic that will attract many voters. Good idea.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Modern day, I don't know about that but we are certainly made to believe things were different in the past.
I murmured, "Someone has to halt this insanity!"
This is line is some many think, I believe. I like that there is no answer to it. Because there isn't one were humans exist.
A topic that will attract many voters. Good idea.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry,
Mystery Author. You drew readers in from the
start. It was intense not knowing what was
happening. Then, we found out it was a drill.
Your words were descriptive and flowed well.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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You did a good job with your contest entry,
Mystery Author. You drew readers in from the
start. It was intense not knowing what was
happening. Then, we found out it was a drill.
Your words were descriptive and flowed well.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Breathe, has the required word count and builds the sense of anxiety that turns out to be more directed to the necessity of practicing for a shooter, instead of the worst-case scenario.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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This one-hundred-word story, Breathe, has the required word count and builds the sense of anxiety that turns out to be more directed to the necessity of practicing for a shooter, instead of the worst-case scenario.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha good one funny and scary in the same time. I thought there was a hostile attack on the school, but I guess was just a rehearsal. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Ha, ha, ha good one funny and scary in the same time. I thought there was a hostile attack on the school, but I guess was just a rehearsal. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this piece. Appreciate the review.