My New Surround Sound
The Wrong Package contest entry8 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
You are SO bad...well, you know, so GOOD bad! This was great. I love the way you lured me in, held my interest and then satisfied my curiosity AND sense of Just Desserts! Excellent work, oh Talented One!! A wonderful read, for sure.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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You are SO bad...well, you know, so GOOD bad! This was great. I love the way you lured me in, held my interest and then satisfied my curiosity AND sense of Just Desserts! Excellent work, oh Talented One!! A wonderful read, for sure.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Hey, Rachelle, hello. Thank you so much for the great review. Yeah, if it doesn't keep the reader wanting more, I'm doing something wrong. Lol. I'm always trying to figure the most ridiculous outcomes for these story contests. That's how I roll. Ha. I appreciate the stars and kind comments, R. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Have yourself a great day and thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Gunner Lil
Outstanding. An easy read with great flow and pace.
An easy read with very good sensory description.
Loved the ending taking out the bad guys.
Good luck and thank you.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Outstanding. An easy read with great flow and pace.
An easy read with very good sensory description.
Loved the ending taking out the bad guys.
Good luck and thank you.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Gunner. I appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked my take on the contest.
Ron
Comment from Quoiky
Interesting read.
But, by the action you took upon yourself....'added an explosive detonator' doesn't that make you a little bit a part of the problem.
I mean, I don't necessarily disagree with what you did, but some innocent schmuck could have been hurt/
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Interesting read.
But, by the action you took upon yourself....'added an explosive detonator' doesn't that make you a little bit a part of the problem.
I mean, I don't necessarily disagree with what you did, but some innocent schmuck could have been hurt/
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Lol. Yeah, I was hoping they didn't have too many innocent schmucks friends hanging around. If they did, they probably weren't that innocent. Ha. He may have been part of the problem but perhaps saved a few people along the way.
Thank you so much for the review and the giant sixer, Quoiky. I'm glad you liked my take on the contest. Have yourself a wonderful day.
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Ron
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I don't know why, but this shouldn't have been a mystery post, yet it turned out that way. You kept my attention long enough to read the whole thing, even though, by the time I had time to review it, the payout was only two member cents.
Para 2, 2nd sentence: (styrofoam) should be (Styrofoam) Brand Name
Too cool. I love it. Your mystery kept me right to the last word and I could actually hear the driver asking that question.
Very clever post, good job.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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I don't know why, but this shouldn't have been a mystery post, yet it turned out that way. You kept my attention long enough to read the whole thing, even though, by the time I had time to review it, the payout was only two member cents.
Para 2, 2nd sentence: (styrofoam) should be (Styrofoam) Brand Name
Too cool. I love it. Your mystery kept me right to the last word and I could actually hear the driver asking that question.
Very clever post, good job.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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I was wondering why my spell check was telling me it was spelled incorrectly. I didn't know it was because that's a brand name. Learned something new.
Thank you for the awesome review, Gary. Yeah, you should have received a PM saying I wrote something. Who knows with this site? Lol. I appreciate the stars and help, friend. I'm glad you liked my little story. Have a great day, Gary.
Ron
Comment from tempeste
Ciao ! You now have 9 votes.
I love surprises and unexpected endings .
Your story was entertaining!
PS: I find it annoying to find somebody's mail in my box.
If it's a neighbours I'll stomp over and place in their box , if it's not on a our street I just bring it to the post office on my shopping day which is once a week.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Ciao ! You now have 9 votes.
I love surprises and unexpected endings .
Your story was entertaining!
PS: I find it annoying to find somebody's mail in my box.
If it's a neighbours I'll stomp over and place in their box , if it's not on a our street I just bring it to the post office on my shopping day which is once a week.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Tempeste. There are times we get mail that has the correct address on it but someone else's name. We just stuff whatever back in our box and the mailman picks it back up the next day. Yes, if it's just someone close by, I'll run it over there.
I really appreciate the generous stars and support, T.
Thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Wendy G
Great story- you have an excellent imagination, and this should do well in the contest - sending best wishes.
Wendy
Typos: "whole new level of excellence ), not "if".
and "It was supposed to have gone"
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Great story- you have an excellent imagination, and this should do well in the contest - sending best wishes.
Wendy
Typos: "whole new level of excellence ), not "if".
and "It was supposed to have gone"
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Hey, Wendy, hi. Thank you so much for the great review and for spotting the goofs. I wrote this after being up all night working and was pretty tired but saw the deadline was only a few hours away. I really appreciate the help, Wendy. Thank you again.
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Ron
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Very welcome. You had my vote too.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, I see a few problems with this story. First of all, there are several typos the first one is where you say my my twice. Then instead of take you should have said taken and the list goes on from there. Plus, I don't see the humor in blowing someone's house up.
You led up to the finish line right but by the time I read this, I could do nothing but shake my head.
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Well, I see a few problems with this story. First of all, there are several typos the first one is where you say my my twice. Then instead of take you should have said taken and the list goes on from there. Plus, I don't see the humor in blowing someone's house up.
You led up to the finish line right but by the time I read this, I could do nothing but shake my head.
Jesse
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thanks for the review, Jesse. Yeah, I wrote this after being up working all night and tired. Then to top it off, this new editor we have didn't show that there was any mistakes when I spell checked it. Then when I realized that there was mistakes, the editor wouldn't let me change them. It wasn't until after I turned my computer off for a few hours that it did finally let me.
Plus, I wasn't being humorous. I figured if a box full of suicide vests were sent to my home, I'd actually save many lives by just blowing up the terrorist's house, seeing as how that's what they were going to use them for anyhow.
I fixed the mistakes, Jesse. I appreciate the help. Thanks again.
Ron
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Did this really happen to you?
I don't see the plausibility of suicide vests showing up at the wrong address.
Jesse
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Hey,. Jesse, hi. No, this is just a Wrong Package contest entry. I wouldn't have enough brains to figure out how to wire up anything like that. Lol. Nor would I do it even if I did. Plus, I'm fairly certain no one could get away with sending bomb vests through our postal service...I would hope.
Thanks again, J.
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I understand, Ron. It is a clever idea but one which would probably never happen. Good luck with the contest.
Jesse
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Nice poem for the contest entry. You work your way methodically to a twist and surprise ending that makes this a surreal tragedy, in a way. Well done and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Nice poem for the contest entry. You work your way methodically to a twist and surprise ending that makes this a surreal tragedy, in a way. Well done and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Theodore. I appreciate the stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
