Vitamin Sea
Caressed by tropical waves of turquoise blue waters9 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Man.... If I can get my doc to prescribe "Vitamin Sea"-- do you think my insurance would cover the trip???
Bermuda! The cure for what aims me!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Man.... If I can get my doc to prescribe "Vitamin Sea"-- do you think my insurance would cover the trip???
Bermuda! The cure for what aims me!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Karenina,
I love you review. And yes, your doctor will write you a script and your insurance will cover the cost if you ask them nicely. Tell them is a case of Doctor's orders. :-)
Eugene
Eugene
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Wow. GREAT! I'll just tell him to contact you...
I'm sure you'd be happy to advocate for Vitamin SEA!
Comment from Bill Schott
This under-ten-word poem, Vitamin Sea, uses nine of the required word count and makes a play on words to elevate the value of this scene and the waters there. Nice.
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This under-ten-word poem, Vitamin Sea, uses nine of the required word count and makes a play on words to elevate the value of this scene and the waters there. Nice.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
Comment from Dr. Von
I like that the poem is under 10 words. I appreciate the use of metaphor to help the reader see the sea and feel invited to partake of a healthy benefit. The writer paints a beautiful picture.
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I like that the poem is under 10 words. I appreciate the use of metaphor to help the reader see the sea and feel invited to partake of a healthy benefit. The writer paints a beautiful picture.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the play on words here and the sea can provide us with lots of minerals to sooth our skin, much enjoyed, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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I loved the play on words here and the sea can provide us with lots of minerals to sooth our skin, much enjoyed, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Love the witty title. This is a good entry to the "under ten competition". The text is large enough, but it is too faint in that shade of blue. You need to make it bold or pick a richer hue of blue. Good luck in the contest.
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Love the witty title. This is a good entry to the "under ten competition". The text is large enough, but it is too faint in that shade of blue. You need to make it bold or pick a richer hue of blue. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
Isn't it amazing how just seeing the ocean, hearing the waves and feeling the salty water can change your mood. I live one mile from the Atlantic and when things get to be too much I walk over and just sit. It is better than meditation. It helps you realize how small we are and how if we sit for just a few minute we feel a weight lifted off of our shoulders. This was powerful in its concise way. Thank you for posting.
Gretchen
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Isn't it amazing how just seeing the ocean, hearing the waves and feeling the salty water can change your mood. I live one mile from the Atlantic and when things get to be too much I walk over and just sit. It is better than meditation. It helps you realize how small we are and how if we sit for just a few minute we feel a weight lifted off of our shoulders. This was powerful in its concise way. Thank you for posting.
Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
Comment from leather
You used a lovely picture for your poem. Everything was spelled correctly and was under the word limit; however, it seemed to lack clarity. How does meditation give a dose of sea vitamins? Does the poem address meditation inside or outside of the water? I'm left a little unsure about these things. I do think it is very close to a five-star rating.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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You used a lovely picture for your poem. Everything was spelled correctly and was under the word limit; however, it seemed to lack clarity. How does meditation give a dose of sea vitamins? Does the poem address meditation inside or outside of the water? I'm left a little unsure about these things. I do think it is very close to a five-star rating.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Leather,
Thank you for your review. The first line is referring to the person subject of the poem meditating while floating on the water. As noted in my notes the phrase "vitamin sea" is metaphor for the benefits of swimming in the ocean. The salt water provides a health benefit akin to a vitamin you ingest. The title and last line of the poems both highlight this benefit. It is the underlying message of the poem.
All the best,
Eugene
P.S. I've updated the accompanying note to clarify the metaphor used.
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Yes! I think that does clarify things.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent entry fort the ten or less contest
with an excellent theme.
Sometimes, nature is the best medicine for relaxing
and reducing stress.
Well done.
Good luck in the voting.
Robert
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This is an excellent entry fort the ten or less contest
with an excellent theme.
Sometimes, nature is the best medicine for relaxing
and reducing stress.
Well done.
Good luck in the voting.
Robert
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, I loved your metaphor of "vitamin sea". As a big nautical lover, you really appeased me with this poem. And what a beautiful picture of the sea - I would love to dive in it right now (lol).
Excellent imagery, visuals and presentation. Good luck in the contest.
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Oh, I loved your metaphor of "vitamin sea". As a big nautical lover, you really appeased me with this poem. And what a beautiful picture of the sea - I would love to dive in it right now (lol).
Excellent imagery, visuals and presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022