NightHawk
like a nightmare, almost...27 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What an eerie and scary nightmare you have
depicted, Thomas. Your poem was well-presented.
The image plus your well thought out word paired
perfectly. Your lines read smoothly with great, but
scary, imagery.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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What an eerie and scary nightmare you have
depicted, Thomas. Your poem was well-presented.
The image plus your well thought out word paired
perfectly. Your lines read smoothly with great, but
scary, imagery.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
Comment from Jennifer Keeley
This was great! You had so much detail and the second stanza with the bolded and red wording was an excellent idea. Nice use of descriptive words. When I saw the picture it made me think of
The Raven. You followed the contest rules (write 3 to 5 stanzas)
and definitely caught the attention of the reader.
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This was great! You had so much detail and the second stanza with the bolded and red wording was an excellent idea. Nice use of descriptive words. When I saw the picture it made me think of
The Raven. You followed the contest rules (write 3 to 5 stanzas)
and definitely caught the attention of the reader.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
Comment from amahra
This is a poem that makes you think beyond each line. I love the artwork you chose for your writing. I also love the haunting words describing the hunt. Best wishes in the contest. I believe this is worthy.
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This is a poem that makes you think beyond each line. I love the artwork you chose for your writing. I also love the haunting words describing the hunt. Best wishes in the contest. I believe this is worthy.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
BEEP, BEEP, BEEP, is the song of the nighthawk? I really don't know, i don't think I have ever seen or heard one.
This post would benefit greatly by increasing the font size. I would suggest at least a 16 perhaps even an 18.
Nicely done, met all requirements of the prompt perfectly.
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BEEP, BEEP, BEEP, is the song of the nighthawk? I really don't know, i don't think I have ever seen or heard one.
This post would benefit greatly by increasing the font size. I would suggest at least a 16 perhaps even an 18.
Nicely done, met all requirements of the prompt perfectly.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Nighthawk, is one that reveals the torture of that relentless nagging and pounding of that inner creature which makes sleep its enemy.
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This poem, Nighthawk, is one that reveals the torture of that relentless nagging and pounding of that inner creature which makes sleep its enemy.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
Comment from Pearl Edwards
That is a great description of a disturbed night where sleep doesn't come - as the night hawk keeps tapping. Very clever, and a very good poem. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
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That is a great description of a disturbed night where sleep doesn't come - as the night hawk keeps tapping. Very clever, and a very good poem. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
Comment from Wendy G
A different poem well expressing your dislike of birds in general and the nighthawk in particular as it disturbs your rest so effectively but so annoyingly. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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A different poem well expressing your dislike of birds in general and the nighthawk in particular as it disturbs your rest so effectively but so annoyingly. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
Comment from karenina
As an insomniac, tapping out this review on my Kindle, in bed, wide awake, at 2:35 AM....
I can only say how I relate to this excellent free verse.
My temporal lobes are throbbing...
I'm dreading the alarm that will inevitably deprive me of adequate REM sleep.
On the other hand, I found this great poem to read in lieu of sleep!
Ambien anyone?
Karenina
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As an insomniac, tapping out this review on my Kindle, in bed, wide awake, at 2:35 AM....
I can only say how I relate to this excellent free verse.
My temporal lobes are throbbing...
I'm dreading the alarm that will inevitably deprive me of adequate REM sleep.
On the other hand, I found this great poem to read in lieu of sleep!
Ambien anyone?
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
You've given the reader the agonizing feeling of sleep deprivation, brought on by repetitive thoughts. I especially liked the clever way you used the words "BEEP. BEEP. BEEP. look what I did," to demonstrate your thought process. Best wishes in the contest.
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You've given the reader the agonizing feeling of sleep deprivation, brought on by repetitive thoughts. I especially liked the clever way you used the words "BEEP. BEEP. BEEP. look what I did," to demonstrate your thought process. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A friend of mine hates birds and thinks they are creepy and your poem reminded me of her. I feel the opposite and I think birds are clever and magical. But hear there is a fear of those night hawks, love Dolly x
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A friend of mine hates birds and thinks they are creepy and your poem reminded me of her. I feel the opposite and I think birds are clever and magical. But hear there is a fear of those night hawks, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
