Cutting
Some things last too long.4 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a 5-7-5 contest entry with a poignant message. The syllable count is on point. The text needs to be larger under the graphic to appear more prominent. The word soul is overused in poems. I would replace it with a word less commonly used like psyche. At first, I didn't get the visual but in rereading the poem I realized it referred to the bleeding stripes. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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This is a 5-7-5 contest entry with a poignant message. The syllable count is on point. The text needs to be larger under the graphic to appear more prominent. The word soul is overused in poems. I would replace it with a word less commonly used like psyche. At first, I didn't get the visual but in rereading the poem I realized it referred to the bleeding stripes. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thanks for your comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Another 5-7-5 contest. It seems like there are an awful lot of those on this site. It is okay with me, I enjoy reading them, and they are easy to do reviews on. I like the message you are sending in this poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Another 5-7-5 contest. It seems like there are an awful lot of those on this site. It is okay with me, I enjoy reading them, and they are easy to do reviews on. I like the message you are sending in this poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Your comments are appreciated.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with a marvelous first line that sets the tone for the poem.
Words can cause harm in many ways, some that never go away.
Well said.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with a marvelous first line that sets the tone for the poem.
Words can cause harm in many ways, some that never go away.
Well said.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from jessizero
This 5-7-5 poem was painful to read, and I mean that in the best way possible. It evoked a strong response, which is what every writer needs to do. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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This 5-7-5 poem was painful to read, and I mean that in the best way possible. It evoked a strong response, which is what every writer needs to do. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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You made my day with your review.
