Living in the Moment
A rime couee for the Potlatch Club13 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely Rime Couee for the club, June. You set a lovely mood with the cup of tea and biscuits to end the day and the thought of coffee as she lay in the morn, listening to the birds outside. (sounds like me, except for the cat). Lovely read,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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This is a lovely Rime Couee for the club, June. You set a lovely mood with the cup of tea and biscuits to end the day and the thought of coffee as she lay in the morn, listening to the birds outside. (sounds like me, except for the cat). Lovely read,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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I am happy you enjoyed this rime couee! I liked the format and decded to write a lighthearted piece. It was fun and I do appreciate your positive feedback - as well as the generous stars!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet natured write about Ginger and how the two of you share a mutual admiration, I enjoyed the melody and the fine sentiments here, you left me with a smile, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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This is a sweet natured write about Ginger and how the two of you share a mutual admiration, I enjoyed the melody and the fine sentiments here, you left me with a smile, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I?m glad you enjoyed this lighthearted one. It?s important to embrace each day.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi June,
You followed the form well for this week's potlach club post.
The artwork and chosen words work well together.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Hi June,
You followed the form well for this week's potlach club post.
The artwork and chosen words work well together.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed this rime couee. It was a form I was not familiar with and I enjoyed the challenge. Just trying to live in the moment and embrace new things each day that come my way...thanks for dropping by!
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That?s the way we should all live. But sometimes it?s hard to do.
You?re welcome
June
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did great job with your club poem, June. The picture is
adorable, and your words are perfect for it. Great job with the
rhyme scheme, the smooth flow, and the fun story. I could see
everything you mentioned--love the ginger kitty.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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You did great job with your club poem, June. The picture is
adorable, and your words are perfect for it. Great job with the
rhyme scheme, the smooth flow, and the fun story. I could see
everything you mentioned--love the ginger kitty.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed this rime couee. It was a form I was not familiar with and I enjoyed the challenge. Just trying to live in the moment and embrace new things each day that come my way...thanks for dropping by!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done with your Rime Couee, June.
I love the picture. It even has the
Ginger cat in it. Living in the moment
is great if you can do that. Well done.
Nancy:) ๐?งก
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Well done with your Rime Couee, June.
I love the picture. It even has the
Ginger cat in it. Living in the moment
is great if you can do that. Well done.
Nancy:) ๐?งก
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed this rime couee. It was a form I was not familiar with and I enjoyed the challenge. Just trying to live in the moment and embrace new things each day that come my way...thanks for dropping by!
Comment from damommy
Great picture to go along with the great poem. You think much like I do. It's so nice to end the day that way with a furry companion by our side. Each new day is an adventure.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Great picture to go along with the great poem. You think much like I do. It's so nice to end the day that way with a furry companion by our side. Each new day is an adventure.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed this rime couee. It was a form I was not familiar with and I enjoyed the challenge. Just trying to live in the moment and embrace new things each day that come my way...thanks for dropping by!
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this poem. It is an excellent rhyming form and I love the thought of living in the moment. That is basically the way I live too. I'm delighted when it is time for bed and equally glad when it is time to get up again. I enjoy my evening tea and my morning coffee and I'm not sure what my day might bring, but I'm anxious to find our and hope it will be good. Since I love learning new things, I'm sure whatever I find out will be interesting.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this poem. It is an excellent rhyming form and I love the thought of living in the moment. That is basically the way I live too. I'm delighted when it is time for bed and equally glad when it is time to get up again. I enjoy my evening tea and my morning coffee and I'm not sure what my day might bring, but I'm anxious to find our and hope it will be good. Since I love learning new things, I'm sure whatever I find out will be interesting.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed this rime couee. It was a form I was not familiar with and I enjoyed the challenge. Just trying to live in the moment and embrace new things each day that come my way...thanks for dropping by!
Comment from karenina
Love the theme of the poem, the rhymes are perfect! Unless I'm counting wrong, I think in your first stanza you wrote 8/8/8/8/8/6
The second two stanzas scan as 8/8/6/8/8/6...
Easy edit! Change line three to read "with biscuits and hot tea!"
(or something along those lines?)
Love the name of this form...
I keep thinking it sounds like a fancy cocktail...
Karenina
Addendum: Nice job getting that first stanza to listen and obey! (added 8/28/22)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Love the theme of the poem, the rhymes are perfect! Unless I'm counting wrong, I think in your first stanza you wrote 8/8/8/8/8/6
The second two stanzas scan as 8/8/6/8/8/6...
Easy edit! Change line three to read "with biscuits and hot tea!"
(or something along those lines?)
Love the name of this form...
I keep thinking it sounds like a fancy cocktail...
Karenina
Addendum: Nice job getting that first stanza to listen and obey! (added 8/28/22)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading and catching that line with extra syllables! I?ve corrected it. Glad you enjoyed this one. I do like this format. Wanted to write some lighthearted?
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Love the our cap lilt to it! I added an addendum to my review--nice job on the reworked line!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Love the picture and how it fits with the poem. Lots of rules to follow in a rime couee. Well done. I picked up that Ginger was the cat without having to read it.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Love the picture and how it fits with the poem. Lots of rules to follow in a rime couee. Well done. I picked up that Ginger was the cat without having to read it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I'm glad you enjoyed this rime couee. It was a form I was not familiar with and I enjoyed the challenge. Just trying to live in the moment and embrace new things each day that come my way...thanks for dropping by!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The poem flows well. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The language is warm and comfortable feeling. The presentation is pleasing.
Suggestion:
The third line should have 6 syllables per the guideline and the one in verse one has 8. It could read "with biscuits and warm tea."
Thanks for sharing.
with biscuits and a cup of tea.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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The poem flows well. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The language is warm and comfortable feeling. The presentation is pleasing.
Suggestion:
The third line should have 6 syllables per the guideline and the one in verse one has 8. It could read "with biscuits and warm tea."
Thanks for sharing.
with biscuits and a cup of tea.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading and catching that line with extra syllables! I?ve corrected it. Glad you enjoyed this one. I do like this format. Wanted to write some lighthearted?
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You are welcome.