Summer Rain
Boys love to play in the rain.26 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A fun piece showing how boys like rain. Some Notes:
-The second stanza depicts an impending storm is building up as desired in the first stanza's "hope the afternoon would blacken."
-In Stanza Three the "showers came" and the rain turned into a "wondrous treat."
-However, the boys did not mind the rain as the fourth stanza demonstrates. They're having a grand time playing in the downpour.
-Strong rhymes include shade/played, street/treat, and care/hair.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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A fun piece showing how boys like rain. Some Notes:
-The second stanza depicts an impending storm is building up as desired in the first stanza's "hope the afternoon would blacken."
-In Stanza Three the "showers came" and the rain turned into a "wondrous treat."
-However, the boys did not mind the rain as the fourth stanza demonstrates. They're having a grand time playing in the downpour.
-Strong rhymes include shade/played, street/treat, and care/hair.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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I truly appreciate your taking the time to share my poem and comment at length, Brett. Many thanks! Rod
Comment from Laurie Holding
This painted a beautiful picture, and your accompanying art was perfect for it. It's difficult to keep with a rhyme scheme like this one without sounding trite, Seussian, but you've managed it like a pro here, and should be proud of this one.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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This painted a beautiful picture, and your accompanying art was perfect for it. It's difficult to keep with a rhyme scheme like this one without sounding trite, Seussian, but you've managed it like a pro here, and should be proud of this one.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Laurie, for sharing my poem and your high praise of my rhyme pattern. Rod
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
We never had an umbrella. And those kids do not need one as soaked as they are getting. That is a great picture of those kids playing in the rain. It would be fun. Kids love to get dirty or wet. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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We never had an umbrella. And those kids do not need one as soaked as they are getting. That is a great picture of those kids playing in the rain. It would be fun. Kids love to get dirty or wet. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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The fun is what we remember most. Thank you for sharing my poem, Carolyn.
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You are welcome.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Nothing like a good romp in the rain. Kids just don't play in the rain anymore, or we don't let them. I know my grandkids don't anyway. They have their faces buried in a screen of some kind. I still love a walk in the rain, even at 73. It's refreshing.
Nice story, wet but nice.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Nothing like a good romp in the rain. Kids just don't play in the rain anymore, or we don't let them. I know my grandkids don't anyway. They have their faces buried in a screen of some kind. I still love a walk in the rain, even at 73. It's refreshing.
Nice story, wet but nice.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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I just told another reviewer the same thing about kids today, Gary. Our generation certainly had more fun OUTDOORS than the current generation. You also don?t see sandlot baseball anymore or even kids throwing a football on the front lawn. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Summer Rain, takes the readers back to those glorious days when rain and puddles were the stuff of great fun and not the hinderance to progress in our work lives.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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This poem, Summer Rain, takes the readers back to those glorious days when rain and puddles were the stuff of great fun and not the hinderance to progress in our work lives.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Bill, for sharing my nostalgic view of yesteryear.
Comment from Wendy G
A fine poem with rhyme, celebrating the fun and carefree nature of childhood, and the pleasure of summer storms to cool the atmosphere. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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A fine poem with rhyme, celebrating the fun and carefree nature of childhood, and the pleasure of summer storms to cool the atmosphere. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much, Wendy, for sharing and praising my poem. Ironically, this summer I did not see one child playin the rain.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, this fits the bill for a you-choose contest entry. The rhymes are there and the boys get wet without a care.
I used to love to splash in the rain but boys grow up to become men and no longer play those games. I love the picture it suits the theme well.
Thanks for the lighthearted play!
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Well, this fits the bill for a you-choose contest entry. The rhymes are there and the boys get wet without a care.
I used to love to splash in the rain but boys grow up to become men and no longer play those games. I love the picture it suits the theme well.
Thanks for the lighthearted play!
Jesse
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Jesse, for sharing my poem. I am surprised at how many of my reviewers?men AND women?splashed in the rain when they were young.
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It's not that surprising really when you think of it. Boys and girls both love the rain! I ran alongside several girls when I was young.
Good luck with the contest.
Jesse
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Perfection in the areas of rhymes AND meter! I love poems that don't feel like square pegs were hammered into round holes to make everything "work." [because it really DOESN'T "work."]
So kudos to you for that, and then, additionally, for such excellent content, too. I remember summer days like that, so this took me back to joyful times.
Wonderful entry. I hope it wins.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Perfection in the areas of rhymes AND meter! I love poems that don't feel like square pegs were hammered into round holes to make everything "work." [because it really DOESN'T "work."]
So kudos to you for that, and then, additionally, for such excellent content, too. I remember summer days like that, so this took me back to joyful times.
Wonderful entry. I hope it wins.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I truly appreciate all the kudos, Rachelle, and the endorsement. Many thanks!
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My absolute pleasure.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the fun in the rain here, the well chosen words, the rhymes and the rhythm of the downpour that ran through your poem, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I loved the fun in the rain here, the well chosen words, the rhymes and the rhythm of the downpour that ran through your poem, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Dolly, for your wonderful praise and those six bright stars. I am so pleased you enjoyed all those aspects of the poem.
Comment from leather
I would give this six stars if I could, but I'm out of them. I enjoyed this poem a lot. It read smoothly, and the rhymes seemed effortless.
You chose a great illustration, too.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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I would give this six stars if I could, but I'm out of them. I enjoyed this poem a lot. It read smoothly, and the rhymes seemed effortless.
You chose a great illustration, too.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you, leather, for your kind praise of my poem and that virtual six-star rating. I am delighted you enjoyed it so much.
