Mass For The Laborers
This is a free form poem14 total reviews
Comment from leather
The picture chosen for this poem brought about several thoughts; firstly, what a lavish and ornate setting for people to close their eyes and pray, and secondly, whatever happened to that vow of poverty?
Then, on the other hand, the poem seems to simmer down the picture's over-the-top opulence with a tribute to the ordinary, hard-working man.
Together, the picture and poem make a strangely compatible pairing.
It was wonderfully done.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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The picture chosen for this poem brought about several thoughts; firstly, what a lavish and ornate setting for people to close their eyes and pray, and secondly, whatever happened to that vow of poverty?
Then, on the other hand, the poem seems to simmer down the picture's over-the-top opulence with a tribute to the ordinary, hard-working man.
Together, the picture and poem make a strangely compatible pairing.
It was wonderfully done.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, leather,
for the 6 star review, I really
appreciate it. If I'm recalling
correctly, I think this church
is in New York. Some churches are architectural
marvels. Thank you so much
for taking the time to read
and review this poem. It
didn't place in the contest,
but I'm ok with that, win some, lose some. May you
have a bright and creative
week. Blessings ~
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Thanks for the follow-up on the contest. I look forward to more of your work.
Thank you, also, for the good wishes for the week and blessings.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Very nice tribute to "working men/folk" It takes a strong back to make a strong country.
This post would benefit greatly by increasing the font size. I would suggest at least a 16 perhaps even an 18.
Stanza 3, 2nd sentence (workboots) should be (work boots)
Nicely said.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Very nice tribute to "working men/folk" It takes a strong back to make a strong country.
This post would benefit greatly by increasing the font size. I would suggest at least a 16 perhaps even an 18.
Stanza 3, 2nd sentence (workboots) should be (work boots)
Nicely said.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Gary. I revised this poem about 5 times over
the past few months, lol! Thank you for flagging the
mistakes. I hope your late
summer Sunday is a good
one. Many blessings ~
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Mass for the Laborers, reminds those who may have forgotten that the labor force is the power that makes things happen.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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This poem, Mass for the Laborers, reminds those who may have forgotten that the labor force is the power that makes things happen.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Bill.
Yes, a lot of parents still think
trade school is,"beneath their
kids," when many graduates
of trade schools make more
annual income than 4 year
college degree graduates do.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poem, Mystery Author.
I liked the way you formatted the lines. Your words
were carefully chosen and highlight the workers well.
I could see them as I read. Yes, those high falutin' ones
wouldn't have a clue if they had to work for a living. I liked
the description of the worker at home then at church. The
image is beautiful.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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You did a great job with your poem, Mystery Author.
I liked the way you formatted the lines. Your words
were carefully chosen and highlight the workers well.
I could see them as I read. Yes, those high falutin' ones
wouldn't have a clue if they had to work for a living. I liked
the description of the worker at home then at church. The
image is beautiful.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Jan. The 5 star
review is much appreciated.
Happy Sunday to you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I learned about the heart of the people of New York here, their labours have not gone unnoticed by you and you brought to life their spirit and soul in this well written free-write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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I learned about the heart of the people of New York here, their labours have not gone unnoticed by you and you brought to life their spirit and soul in this well written free-write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Dolly.
I used to be a blue collar
worker in my younger years.
If it wasn't for laborers, we
wouldn't have as much as we
do now. Blessings
Comment from royowen
Although we are Australians, but have been to New York on four seperate occasions when we visited our elder daughter in NY, when she lived with husband and kids, although they lived in Upper East Manhattan, there's a lot of professional
out of towners there. I was born in a very working class city in England of a working class family. Beautifully written my friend, blessings and good luck, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Although we are Australians, but have been to New York on four seperate occasions when we visited our elder daughter in NY, when she lived with husband and kids, although they lived in Upper East Manhattan, there's a lot of professional
out of towners there. I was born in a very working class city in England of a working class family. Beautifully written my friend, blessings and good luck, Roy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Roy.
The working poor and working class have always
been a source of inspiration
for me. New York City is quite the busy city. Did you
visit there while the WTC
twin towers were standing?
Thank you for the 5 stars.
Have a lovely weekend, and
many blessings. ~
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No, it was between 2010-2014, but really confined to Manhattan.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the "You Choose writing prompt Contest". You grasped the feeling and imagery of the american working class in new york... the same happens in other states.
Nice presentation. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental picture and life style. I am from Spain and the same happens in rural and farm areas.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Excellent entry for the "You Choose writing prompt Contest". You grasped the feeling and imagery of the american working class in new york... the same happens in other states.
Nice presentation. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental picture and life style. I am from Spain and the same happens in rural and farm areas.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks, Gypsy Blue Rose. You're quite correct,
there are working poor and
working class people all
over the world. Spain is a
beauteous country. May you
have a wondrous weekend.
Many blessings to you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Give me your tired masses, people that is. NHC had been the port of entry for many WILLING to take an oath to this country which describes the people you write of in the five boroughs. Today, open borders. Take whatever comes our way. Uncle Sam can't pay UNLESS he takes from someone else, without invitation. Government has cart blanc and because our appetite to lift all kinds is empathetic it is as dumb as eating a can of beans with a "best used date" of 1953.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Give me your tired masses, people that is. NHC had been the port of entry for many WILLING to take an oath to this country which describes the people you write of in the five boroughs. Today, open borders. Take whatever comes our way. Uncle Sam can't pay UNLESS he takes from someone else, without invitation. Government has cart blanc and because our appetite to lift all kinds is empathetic it is as dumb as eating a can of beans with a "best used date" of 1953.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Tom, I really
appreciate your 5 star review Your comments are always
welcome. May you have a
tranquil and happy weekend.
Many blessings to you. ~
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I guess spell check, checkmated my NYC into NHC for whatever reason.
Comment from jaded831
I can relate, I also grew up in the heart of Brooklyn. I especially like the line, the Lord loves His hard workers under the merciless sun. That line reminds us we are equal, and what matters is what you do in life.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I can relate, I also grew up in the heart of Brooklyn. I especially like the line, the Lord loves His hard workers under the merciless sun. That line reminds us we are equal, and what matters is what you do in life.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Hello fellow native New
Yorker, my father grew up
in Brooklyn. He was born
shortly before the Great
Depression started. The
blue collar workers are the
backbone of the U S. I miss
New York a lot. I had my
NY glory days living on my
long ago Long Island. I heard
a large number of people
moved out of NY because of
the high taxes. Thank you
so much for the 5 stars and
liking my tribute to the
working man/woman.
Many blessings to you. ~
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is a very effective piece, evoking the quiet strength of the working man and mettle required to just get on with life, looked down upon by the idiots. Beautifully written.
Mike
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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This is a very effective piece, evoking the quiet strength of the working man and mettle required to just get on with life, looked down upon by the idiots. Beautifully written.
Mike
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Mike. Blue collar
workers are the backbone of
the U.S. I really appreciate
you visiting my page and
supporting this poem. Many
blessings to you. ~
