Dog day of August
Boys bored with summer vacation24 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
This sounds like a typical summer for a bunch of boys. We spent our summers picking cherries, baling hay, and swimming at night. It was a good life. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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This sounds like a typical summer for a bunch of boys. We spent our summers picking cherries, baling hay, and swimming at night. It was a good life. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
You met the contest challenges perfectly with character development, grade levels, and from the point of view of a student/child. Your dialogue was believable with ample action tags so we could feel the boys' antsy-ness as they wanted some excitement before school starts. Best wishes in the contest!!
One comment:
reconed the house and backyard. (reconned) I think to differentiate from "re-coning" if that's a word. https://www.wordhippo.com/what-is/the-past-tense-of/recon.html
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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You met the contest challenges perfectly with character development, grade levels, and from the point of view of a student/child. Your dialogue was believable with ample action tags so we could feel the boys' antsy-ness as they wanted some excitement before school starts. Best wishes in the contest!!
One comment:
reconed the house and backyard. (reconned) I think to differentiate from "re-coning" if that's a word. https://www.wordhippo.com/what-is/the-past-tense-of/recon.html
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from estory
I think you did a good job with the language recreating the characters of schoolchildren. And the things like throwing apples at each other and thinking of spying on girls put us right in the middle of the scene between them and back in their time. We get all that anticipation and the thrill of success you feel at that age when you pull something off. estory
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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I think you did a good job with the language recreating the characters of schoolchildren. And the things like throwing apples at each other and thinking of spying on girls put us right in the middle of the scene between them and back in their time. We get all that anticipation and the thrill of success you feel at that age when you pull something off. estory
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from evilynne
That is a great story of boys having summer fun. It is well written and entertaining. The pictures are great. Darn it, now I want a plum! Best of luck in the contest. Evi
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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That is a great story of boys having summer fun. It is well written and entertaining. The pictures are great. Darn it, now I want a plum! Best of luck in the contest. Evi
Comment Written 03-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you!!
Comment from nomi338
Man oh man. I am now 79 years old, but this story took me all the way back to Detroit when I was about 13 years old, raiding cherry trees and barely escaping. Imagine my surprise when one day my wife of many years told of a time when her dad nearly caught some kids wo were stealing cherries off their two prized cherry trees. One of which, surprisingly belonged to my wife. When we figured it all out, she hit me. Not hard, but she hit me just the same. I called it a delayed reaction.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Man oh man. I am now 79 years old, but this story took me all the way back to Detroit when I was about 13 years old, raiding cherry trees and barely escaping. Imagine my surprise when one day my wife of many years told of a time when her dad nearly caught some kids wo were stealing cherries off their two prized cherry trees. One of which, surprisingly belonged to my wife. When we figured it all out, she hit me. Not hard, but she hit me just the same. I called it a delayed reaction.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Looks like you got best prize of them all!! Love taps are great!!
Thank you!!
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
That's a great story. It brought back many happy memories of sunny days hanging with my friends and scrumping apples from some farmer's orchards. We got chased by a combine harvester once! He didn't catch us. I never knew what his problem was. He let most of the apples go rotten on the floor.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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That's a great story. It brought back many happy memories of sunny days hanging with my friends and scrumping apples from some farmer's orchards. We got chased by a combine harvester once! He didn't catch us. I never knew what his problem was. He let most of the apples go rotten on the floor.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you!! Happy you made it!!
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi! I'm 65, this childhood
summer story sure reminds
me of my 17 year old summer
skinnydipping with my friends
in the neighborhood racquet
club outdoor pool in the
moonlight. It was about
11 p.m., and us girls were
drinking beer and having fun
swimming in our birthday
suits. None of our parents
found out, except a few of
our male teenaged neighbors.
Anyway, you've written this
superb story so well. My
best wishes for success
with your writing. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Hi! I'm 65, this childhood
summer story sure reminds
me of my 17 year old summer
skinnydipping with my friends
in the neighborhood racquet
club outdoor pool in the
moonlight. It was about
11 p.m., and us girls were
drinking beer and having fun
swimming in our birthday
suits. None of our parents
found out, except a few of
our male teenaged neighbors.
Anyway, you've written this
superb story so well. My
best wishes for success
with your writing. Blessings ~
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you! Lots of fun!!
Comment from BermyBye50
Gunner,
This is an excellent What I Did This Summer writing prompt entry. Your write and photos of the beach reminds me of summer vacation back home in Bermuda. My three brothers and I often begged the same question Pete asks in your opening line. Our summer vacation adventures were rarely ever planned and often random. Your talent and creativity is well reflected in your descriptive paragraphs and balanced use of dialogue. Well done.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Gunner,
This is an excellent What I Did This Summer writing prompt entry. Your write and photos of the beach reminds me of summer vacation back home in Bermuda. My three brothers and I often begged the same question Pete asks in your opening line. Our summer vacation adventures were rarely ever planned and often random. Your talent and creativity is well reflected in your descriptive paragraphs and balanced use of dialogue. Well done.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you!!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, so they stole plums. Well, it seems you wrote these boys as wanting to find trouble to get into, more than wanting to find something to do.
It was summer and they were students, so I think you accomplished what the contest wanted.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Hmm, so they stole plums. Well, it seems you wrote these boys as wanting to find trouble to get into, more than wanting to find something to do.
It was summer and they were students, so I think you accomplished what the contest wanted.
Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you!!
Comment from amahra
You did well capturing the immaturity of these boys in your dialogue and narration.
"We can sneak over to Rosemary's house and see if she's out back in her bikini. She's almost fifteen and looking cute." [This shows the naughtiness of the boys. Cute.]
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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You did well capturing the immaturity of these boys in your dialogue and narration.
"We can sneak over to Rosemary's house and see if she's out back in her bikini. She's almost fifteen and looking cute." [This shows the naughtiness of the boys. Cute.]
Comment Written 28-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
