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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Assets and Location"A demon requires fiscal advice
3 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
LOL! Fun! I love the way you give your demons such human characteristics while keeping them from human limitations. You never know what a demon is going to do next. Loving it!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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LOL! Fun! I love the way you give your demons such human characteristics while keeping them from human limitations. You never know what a demon is going to do next. Loving it!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2022
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Thanks. I guess I'll have to write another chapter then
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You get right at it and don't you stop until you have a good long story. Don't make me come to Portugal! Lol!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I like how Julius reacts to the questions about a name. Just shows the personality of this demon so well. This was very enjoyable. The dialogue between them was great. The story interesting. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I like how Julius reacts to the questions about a name. Just shows the personality of this demon so well. This was very enjoyable. The dialogue between them was great. The story interesting. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from leather
I can't give six-star ratings right now, so you get a five.
I enjoyed reading this nice mix of dialogue and commentary.
There is only one line that gave me pause, and that is: "The huge creature dropped the trunk into the stream. One end appeared open." My question: The end of what appears open--the trunk or the stream?
Other than that, I felt like I was reading a quality piece of work. Great work.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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I can't give six-star ratings right now, so you get a five.
I enjoyed reading this nice mix of dialogue and commentary.
There is only one line that gave me pause, and that is: "The huge creature dropped the trunk into the stream. One end appeared open." My question: The end of what appears open--the trunk or the stream?
Other than that, I felt like I was reading a quality piece of work. Great work.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Thank you. I'll take a moral 6
