When Warm Winds Blow
strange things happen...15 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
There were definitely strange things happening in this little town this night, when the warm winds began to blow. You created some great imagery and emotion in this story, G. And you left me wanting to know more. :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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There were definitely strange things happening in this little town this night, when the warm winds began to blow. You created some great imagery and emotion in this story, G. And you left me wanting to know more. :)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks Judy. Hope you are well. G
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You're most welcome, G. I was away for a week without much time to spend on a computer. I'm good. :)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Excellent story. Great work.
Your word choices and phrasing were superb. You painted an effective picture.
I hope this is a continuing story, or book. I'd like to read more.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Excellent story. Great work.
Your word choices and phrasing were superb. You painted an effective picture.
I hope this is a continuing story, or book. I'd like to read more.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks for the great response, Wayne. G
Comment from Jay Squires
When I read something this good, I start scrolling up and down to see what contest it had been entered in. You maintained some exceptional tension throughout the wolf scene and developed some cogent images to support the eerie setting. I only questioned one image, below, but it might be easily overridden.
he cleared his throat and spat. It sizzled as it hit the ground. [It's an impactful image, but I don't know about its accuracy. I experience 110 F summers yearly, and I don't know that I've ever heard spit sizzle.]
You've done a marvelous job with the story, G.
Jay
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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When I read something this good, I start scrolling up and down to see what contest it had been entered in. You maintained some exceptional tension throughout the wolf scene and developed some cogent images to support the eerie setting. I only questioned one image, below, but it might be easily overridden.
he cleared his throat and spat. It sizzled as it hit the ground. [It's an impactful image, but I don't know about its accuracy. I experience 110 F summers yearly, and I don't know that I've ever heard spit sizzle.]
You've done a marvelous job with the story, G.
Jay
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Yep. The spit thing is there to accentuate the heightened, unnatural of the temperature. It may be a little too much. lol Many thanks Jay.
G
Comment from Shirley McLain
Is this the beginning of a story? I would like to read more. You did an excellent job filling me with tension about the wolf. It had a little bit of the supernatural feel to it, but I couldn't decide if it was. it was a strange occurrence. :) Shirley
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Is this the beginning of a story? I would like to read more. You did an excellent job filling me with tension about the wolf. It had a little bit of the supernatural feel to it, but I couldn't decide if it was. it was a strange occurrence. :) Shirley
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks Shirley. The not sure aspect was intentional whether it's just very hot or something more is at play. G
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Good beginning, but not the beginning of something good, eh? I think instead of having the sheriff think the wolf is a dog at first, you should just say the sheriff was confronted by the largest, four-legged creature he had ever seen, and then go on to describe the long snout, hot yellow eyes and glistening jet fur of the wolf. Anyway, got my attention.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Good beginning, but not the beginning of something good, eh? I think instead of having the sheriff think the wolf is a dog at first, you should just say the sheriff was confronted by the largest, four-legged creature he had ever seen, and then go on to describe the long snout, hot yellow eyes and glistening jet fur of the wolf. Anyway, got my attention.
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Any particular reason for the four star other than wanting to rewrite a description which doesn't fit?
Comment from aryr
Wow, this was amazing, G. If ever you had me on my tippy toes, you did with this one. Cooper was truly befuddled and confused as he opened the door to his office. He realized that as the storm raged outside, it was just the beginning. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Wow, this was amazing, G. If ever you had me on my tippy toes, you did with this one. Cooper was truly befuddled and confused as he opened the door to his office. He realized that as the storm raged outside, it was just the beginning. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks for the great response. G
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Most welcome, G
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This should be a prologue or at least a continuing story G. Well written and chilling to say the least. I found it to be intriguing and left me with many questions. The beginning of what? Was it a forest fire or a visit from the pits of Hell.
Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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This should be a prologue or at least a continuing story G. Well written and chilling to say the least. I found it to be intriguing and left me with many questions. The beginning of what? Was it a forest fire or a visit from the pits of Hell.
Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Much appreciated as always, Nancy. G
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
Really liked this. Your style is easy to read but hard to put down.
I feel like Oliver - please can I have some more??
I hope this is just the beginning of a bigger story. It certainly could/should be.
I expect that the names Wayne and Cooper are doffing a cap to John and Gary of western film fame.
Nice one.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Really liked this. Your style is easy to read but hard to put down.
I feel like Oliver - please can I have some more??
I hope this is just the beginning of a bigger story. It certainly could/should be.
I expect that the names Wayne and Cooper are doffing a cap to John and Gary of western film fame.
Nice one.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks for the astute observations, Malcolm. G
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This fictionalized story had a lot of descriptions yet the plot seemed less of the focus and more of a distraction. Cooper wandering around and through the small town appeared distraught but the author gave no clear reason why. I suppose this is how the author wanted to leave it. Us wondering and not knowing about the upcoming storm.
Thanks for allowing me to be honest.
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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This fictionalized story had a lot of descriptions yet the plot seemed less of the focus and more of a distraction. Cooper wandering around and through the small town appeared distraught but the author gave no clear reason why. I suppose this is how the author wanted to leave it. Us wondering and not knowing about the upcoming storm.
Thanks for allowing me to be honest.
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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There are important elements in regard to plot in here which may not seem apparent right off. It's more about setting the scene up for the plot to develop later on. It's a different way of looking at the structure.
Always appreciate honesty in a review, Jesse.
Many thanks
G
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So, the plot develops later on in another story. I guess I see how you set up the scene.
I still have a lot to learn.
Jesse
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The scene that you describe as Cooper walks down the main street had me thinking of the quiet buildup before a cyclone. You create an eerie mood on the street with rhe wolf and the whistle. Great write G.
Cheers
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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The scene that you describe as Cooper walks down the main street had me thinking of the quiet buildup before a cyclone. You create an eerie mood on the street with rhe wolf and the whistle. Great write G.
Cheers
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Many thanks for your thoughts on this one. Always appreciated. G
