Hope
Haiku 5/7/543 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
This is the most difficult type of poem for me to write. I've tried again and again, but I never like the results.
Yours is great, however. I like how you manage to say so much in just a few words.
Just one thing: aren't you supposed to use lowercase at the beginning of each line in haiku?
Good luck in the contest.
Have a lovely day,
MJ
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
  |
This is the most difficult type of poem for me to write. I've tried again and again, but I never like the results.
Yours is great, however. I like how you manage to say so much in just a few words.
Just one thing: aren't you supposed to use lowercase at the beginning of each line in haiku?
Good luck in the contest.
Have a lovely day,
MJ
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
-
Hi MJ. I wasn't aware of using lowercase beginnings in a haiku. Thanks for the tip!
I am so happy you gave me a sixer for this poem. It was my first time entering a contest on FS. I didn't fare well, however.
Have a wonderful week!
Jesse
-
I only know because of Gypsy. She's the haiku expert on FS. She even has a club.
Do you know her?
Anyway check some of her poems as I might be wrong.
I've entered quite a few competitions and only won once. There are lots of us here.
-
Yes, I know Gypsy. She is a friend of mine. I don't do clubs or anything like that I just learn on my own.
I agree there are lots of us here.
Jesse
-
I used to belong to some clubs and even created a flash fiction one myself, but then I realized it took too much time.
-
Yes, clubs take a lot of time away from living.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love that you present love as the ultimate destination of hope - what a lovely way of looking at it. All the catch words here are positive - hope, strength, rising, exploring ... love.
I very much enjoyed :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
 |
I love that you present love as the ultimate destination of hope - what a lovely way of looking at it. All the catch words here are positive - hope, strength, rising, exploring ... love.
I very much enjoyed :-)
Mike
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, Mike.
Yes, love is the ultimate destination of hope. This is the way I see it for all of us.
Thank you for your kind words and I am so glad you enjoyed this haiku.
Have a wonderful day!
Jesse
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Wonderful Haiku beautifully illustrated point and words so carefully chosen to express beauty and the majesty of the night sky. Well done and good luck in the competition this is fantastic. Kindest regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
|
Wonderful Haiku beautifully illustrated point and words so carefully chosen to express beauty and the majesty of the night sky. Well done and good luck in the competition this is fantastic. Kindest regards Meia :)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
-
Thanks for the lovely review, Meia.
Your kindness and good wishes are appreciated very much.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hi Jesse, what a beautiful haiku poem that is so meaningful and cries out for hope. You did a wonderful job my friend, with so few words. This is so lovely!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
|
Hi Jesse, what a beautiful haiku poem that is so meaningful and cries out for hope. You did a wonderful job my friend, with so few words. This is so lovely!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
-
Thank you, Debi.
Yes, my Haiku reaches out for hope!
Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. I tried the best I could with a few words to say how I felt inside.
Glad you found it meaningful.
Have a lovely day, my friend!
Jesse
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, I love this perfect-in-its-simplicity description of a rather complicated concept. I could imagine this being read to a child and having him "get it." It's easy to see why it's garnered and "All Time Best" seal! Go you, Jesse; great job!! xo
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
|
Oh, I love this perfect-in-its-simplicity description of a rather complicated concept. I could imagine this being read to a child and having him "get it." It's easy to see why it's garnered and "All Time Best" seal! Go you, Jesse; great job!! xo
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
-
Children know the secrets, those older folks are not aware of. What seems complicated to adults so many children "get."
Thanks for your kind comments.
Jesse
-
I couldn't agree more!
-
Blessed are the children!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
We need to live in a world of love... unfortunately In here, hate is growing but love is slowly disappearing. So is the rest of the world... it is hard to build universal love.
We should all try to love each other to make the world strong.
|
We need to live in a world of love... unfortunately In here, hate is growing but love is slowly disappearing. So is the rest of the world... it is hard to build universal love.
We should all try to love each other to make the world strong.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very nice 5-7-5 hairy.
Sparkling in your poem: hope and how hope permeates,
My favourite line: then rises up to explore, like a personification and a portrayal of the innate qualities of hope.
Best of luck on your entry.
|
A very nice 5-7-5 hairy.
Sparkling in your poem: hope and how hope permeates,
My favourite line: then rises up to explore, like a personification and a portrayal of the innate qualities of hope.
Best of luck on your entry.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
Comment from Janet Foor
Hope for a better tomorrow, a better outcome, a better day is what keeps us going when things get tough.
Excellent 5/7/5 poem Jesse. Your satori line of "universal love" is perfect.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
|
Hope for a better tomorrow, a better outcome, a better day is what keeps us going when things get tough.
Excellent 5/7/5 poem Jesse. Your satori line of "universal love" is perfect.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
-
I agree, Janet, hope for a better outcome is what keeps us going when things get tough.
I am happy you like and can relate to my satori line.
Thank you for your kindness.
Jesse
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Jesse, fantastic haiku - good format and your message is clear.
I especially liked:
Universal Love
(Wow. Well done, well said.)
Great photo choice. A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
p.s. Did you have your surgery yet?
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
|
Hi Jesse, fantastic haiku - good format and your message is clear.
I especially liked:
Universal Love
(Wow. Well done, well said.)
Great photo choice. A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
p.s. Did you have your surgery yet?
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
-
Thanks, LateBloomer, for your encouraging review. I appreciate you choosing what works best for you. Universal love is what we strive for every single day of our lives!
No, I haven't had surgery yet. It will be on the first of September, and I will be ready with bells on!
In other words, I have nervous and excited all at once!
It won't be long before I am out of the wheelchair and walking proud!
Thanks so much for the extra stars!
Jesse
Comment from LJbutterfly
As we all face our uncertain future, we hope for the best outcome for all our endeavors. I love the idea of hope rising. I know you have a surgery coming soon and hope you will be delighted after the healing process. I also hope you do well in the contest. Best wishes and blessings always.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
|
As we all face our uncertain future, we hope for the best outcome for all our endeavors. I love the idea of hope rising. I know you have a surgery coming soon and hope you will be delighted after the healing process. I also hope you do well in the contest. Best wishes and blessings always.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
-
Thank you for your sightful and thoughtful review.
Yes, my surgery is coming very soon and I thank you for your good wishes for my outcome and for the contest.
Jesse
