Morning Display
A Contest Entry24 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Troso
Wow, what an incredibly meaningful poem. Your syllable usage was excellent, and "veiled threat on display" made think like not many poems have been able to do before.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Wow, what an incredibly meaningful poem. Your syllable usage was excellent, and "veiled threat on display" made think like not many poems have been able to do before.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line says it all! I really liked the last line - it was mysterious and became thought provoking for me! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes very well with these words.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line says it all! I really liked the last line - it was mysterious and became thought provoking for me! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes very well with these words.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest! Nice work!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest! Nice work!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading!
Comment from amahra
I just love Haiku contests. It always brings out the very best poets on this site. I love this one you've written and find it a great contest entry.
Best wishes in the contest. I will be voting.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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I just love Haiku contests. It always brings out the very best poets on this site. I love this one you've written and find it a great contest entry.
Best wishes in the contest. I will be voting.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, this is a remarkable write - smooth with just a marginal touch of caustic humor, causing me more than a moment's chuckle - thank you. I just could not do less than Six Stars. We all need more laughter - every where - thank you again. Best wishes in the contest with this jewel...
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In my opinion, this is a remarkable write - smooth with just a marginal touch of caustic humor, causing me more than a moment's chuckle - thank you. I just could not do less than Six Stars. We all need more laughter - every where - thank you again. Best wishes in the contest with this jewel...
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, this is a remarkable write - smooth with just a marginal touch of caustic humor, causing me more than a moment's chuckle - thank you. I just could not do less than Six Stars. We all need more laughter - every where - thank you again. Best wishes in the contest with this jewel...
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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In my opinion, this is a remarkable write - smooth with just a marginal touch of caustic humor, causing me more than a moment's chuckle - thank you. I just could not do less than Six Stars. We all need more laughter - every where - thank you again. Best wishes in the contest with this jewel...
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind words and the six-star rating. I appreciate your taking the time to read the piece.
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You are very welcome indeed, Faith - thank you for sharing...Eve
Comment from Marienkiefer
This haiku, gives us the freshness of an ordinary morning, then a foreboding and the inclination that something is about to happen...I find this haiku intriguing.
Most sparkling lines: Veiled threat on display.
Good luck on the competition.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This haiku, gives us the freshness of an ordinary morning, then a foreboding and the inclination that something is about to happen...I find this haiku intriguing.
Most sparkling lines: Veiled threat on display.
Good luck on the competition.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Laurie Holding
Usually I would caution against using this kind of font, but for this image and these words, it works! I though this was a tremendous use of very few words, with "veiled threat" bringing up an actual image of a veil. Really well done. Good luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Usually I would caution against using this kind of font, but for this image and these words, it works! I though this was a tremendous use of very few words, with "veiled threat" bringing up an actual image of a veil. Really well done. Good luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It makes me think when I see something spun so well as a web. We're going to knock them down, of course. For starters, we don't know what kind of spider lives in them. Despite this, they worked for hours. If they were looking for places out of sight, you would think they would find them. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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It makes me think when I see something spun so well as a web. We're going to knock them down, of course. For starters, we don't know what kind of spider lives in them. Despite this, they worked for hours. If they were looking for places out of sight, you would think they would find them. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thanks for reading.
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You are welcome.
Comment from BermyBye50
Faith,
This is a wonderful Haiku. The first two lines expresses nature's innocence displayed in the silky spider's web. The words 'morning droplets cling' in the first line implies there is something more to be wary of. And the third line 'veiled threat on display' completes the thought with the danger explicitly revealed.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Faith,
This is a wonderful Haiku. The first two lines expresses nature's innocence displayed in the silky spider's web. The words 'morning droplets cling' in the first line implies there is something more to be wary of. And the third line 'veiled threat on display' completes the thought with the danger explicitly revealed.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
