Fall Slips In
There are clues when fall arrives2 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
This haiku names two things that indicate the arrival of fall: the "slight chill in the air," and "School bells..." The old fashioned school bell would be a pleasure to hear as an alternative to modern buzzers and klaxons.
Fall Slips In" reminds the reader of two emblems that mark the fall, and its author hasn't even mentioned leaves! This short poem has lines that end with similar sounds: "air," "hear,"and "here." A sonic consistency like this is like taps on the reader's wrist.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This haiku names two things that indicate the arrival of fall: the "slight chill in the air," and "School bells..." The old fashioned school bell would be a pleasure to hear as an alternative to modern buzzers and klaxons.
Fall Slips In" reminds the reader of two emblems that mark the fall, and its author hasn't even mentioned leaves! This short poem has lines that end with similar sounds: "air," "hear,"and "here." A sonic consistency like this is like taps on the reader's wrist.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Yes, I agree about the school bells. I was a teacher for ten years, and those buzzers they use now are SO annoying. I hated when it was time for it to go off. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
What a terrific job you have done here illuminating all the things that make Fall wonderful! It is my favorite season, and you have done it big-time justice!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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What a terrific job you have done here illuminating all the things that make Fall wonderful! It is my favorite season, and you have done it big-time justice!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I was hoping to bring it to life without mentioning the usual go to about leaves. Your review is appreciated.
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You accomplished that goal beautifully!!