Collateral Damage
A Naani Poem for the club challenge15 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Kym,
This is a good poem for the club telling of how war can break spiritual ties too. The sadness it brings can cause the songs in the mind and heart of past happiness.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Kym,
This is a good poem for the club telling of how war can break spiritual ties too. The sadness it brings can cause the songs in the mind and heart of past happiness.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you Joan, for your wonderful and understanding comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You?re welcome.
Joan
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very nicely done. I feel that this poem was written after a terrible time. The end of WW2 for example. Where all hope is lost but there is a small flame. Very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Very nicely done. I feel that this poem was written after a terrible time. The end of WW2 for example. Where all hope is lost but there is a small flame. Very creative and well written.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and yes there is always hope, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It's going to take much work getting things back together. Too much has happened. The building's can be replaced, however not the lives lost. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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It's going to take much work getting things back together. Too much has happened. The building's can be replaced, however not the lives lost. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are welcome
Comment from Wendy G
Well done. I do like the image of silent strings from instruments once sound. The link with our lost humanity (with our war-torn hearts and lost love) indicates that out hearts were once sound instruments, but are no longer. A sad comment on humanity! Excellent, and thought-provoking.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Well done. I do like the image of silent strings from instruments once sound. The link with our lost humanity (with our war-torn hearts and lost love) indicates that out hearts were once sound instruments, but are no longer. A sad comment on humanity! Excellent, and thought-provoking.
Wendy
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful and understanding comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is lovely and does, indeed, carry the flavor of either Indian or Japanese syntax. The musician in me especially likes "fall silent like broken strings." That silence is harsh and desolate.
Very well done and enjoyable to read.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This is lovely and does, indeed, carry the flavor of either Indian or Japanese syntax. The musician in me especially likes "fall silent like broken strings." That silence is harsh and desolate.
Very well done and enjoyable to read.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for such a wonderful review and understanding comments, as always very much appreciate ****kahpot
