The Last Text
Made to raise awareness about texting and driving.62 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
What a sobering poem, Thomas. I believe that more of these awareness pieces need to be written. The adults, in some cases, are worse than the kids. Thank you for sharing.
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What a sobering poem, Thomas. I believe that more of these awareness pieces need to be written. The adults, in some cases, are worse than the kids. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem is vivid, descriptive and real. You have adequately presented exactly what many young people think prior to a fatal accident. Yes. A ticket would have been better. Your specific wording allows the reader to not only read what your are saying, but feel the impact. This work should be printed in all high school and college newspapers. A mature audience could also benefit.
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This poem is vivid, descriptive and real. You have adequately presented exactly what many young people think prior to a fatal accident. Yes. A ticket would have been better. Your specific wording allows the reader to not only read what your are saying, but feel the impact. This work should be printed in all high school and college newspapers. A mature audience could also benefit.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from jp88
I was so worried for the people in the story from the second I read the title, having that sense of foreboding what this would be about, but at the same time hoping that it wouldn't - you've kept the tension alive until the very end. Really nice piece!
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I was so worried for the people in the story from the second I read the title, having that sense of foreboding what this would be about, but at the same time hoping that it wouldn't - you've kept the tension alive until the very end. Really nice piece!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good work.
We, my wife and I, had occasion to meet another couple. We learned that they'd had two kids. We talked about ours and their daughter. I naively asked, "And your son?"
the wife responded, "Don't text and drive."
Best wishes.
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Good work.
We, my wife and I, had occasion to meet another couple. We learned that they'd had two kids. We talked about ours and their daughter. I naively asked, "And your son?"
the wife responded, "Don't text and drive."
Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from Sanku
This is well written and is the need of the hour. Cell phones play havoc with our lives. Man invention destined to make our lives easier is now a cause for ending that life...Thank you for writing and posting.
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This is well written and is the need of the hour. Cell phones play havoc with our lives. Man invention destined to make our lives easier is now a cause for ending that life...Thank you for writing and posting.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
Comment from Gloria ....
A wonderful free verse, with a strong POV. The setting one of willful people breaking all the traffic laws, running red lights and stop signs, and then sadly causing their own demise through sheer lack of respect for the power of a vehicle.
Good use of metaphor, and I agree that much of the technology mankind has created is being misused, which is really a pity.
Thank you for sharing, Thomas. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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A wonderful free verse, with a strong POV. The setting one of willful people breaking all the traffic laws, running red lights and stop signs, and then sadly causing their own demise through sheer lack of respect for the power of a vehicle.
Good use of metaphor, and I agree that much of the technology mankind has created is being misused, which is really a pity.
Thank you for sharing, Thomas. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the review!
Comment from Aussie
Amen! Well written on a pet subject of mine. So many killed from lack of attention and breaking the law. We have cameras to catch offenders now, huge fines for those who are caught. It should be law to leave cell phones in the trunk. K xx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Amen! Well written on a pet subject of mine. So many killed from lack of attention and breaking the law. We have cameras to catch offenders now, huge fines for those who are caught. It should be law to leave cell phones in the trunk. K xx
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much for the review!
Comment from Fleedleflump
I would hope nobody is idiotic enough to think they can use a phone - or any other distraction - while they drive. Really, people should just remember they're wieldng a ton of metal with only seconds between life and death.
Your descriptions of the crash and effects are effective and unsettling.
Mike
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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I would hope nobody is idiotic enough to think they can use a phone - or any other distraction - while they drive. Really, people should just remember they're wieldng a ton of metal with only seconds between life and death.
Your descriptions of the crash and effects are effective and unsettling.
Mike
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Agreed. Unfortunately, it as an extremely common issue. Thank you for the review!
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Wow! Very real and poignant. I have never texted while driving, but for a few years, my brother had that habit, and I can only be glad that our family nagging had it's desired effect and he doesn't do it anymore! Your poem addresses a very serious subject, and it does it very well. Great job!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Wow! Very real and poignant. I have never texted while driving, but for a few years, my brother had that habit, and I can only be glad that our family nagging had it's desired effect and he doesn't do it anymore! Your poem addresses a very serious subject, and it does it very well. Great job!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your very kind words!
Comment from amahra
Thank you for this well-crafted poem. Fantastic Job!
Firm, white pillows of regret smacked us in the face
With a force so vengeful it could have been alive. [Great lines]
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this well-crafted poem. Fantastic Job!
Firm, white pillows of regret smacked us in the face
With a force so vengeful it could have been alive. [Great lines]
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you!!
