The Woman That I Am
Thanks To granddaughter Kenzie for 2 sides of Woman Art40 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Perfect verse. No SPAGs of any kind, and I always look very deep, whether I know/respect the author or not. But this one is perfect!
I don't know how I missed it on first release, but I am surely glad I found it in your portfolio. I see a message of a crying heart wanting to fly and now you have flown. You are sharing yourself and all your gifts with everyone; I am sure in real life the same as you do here on FS.
You are such a warm and loving soul, whatever happened that made you feel the way you did in the beginning of this poem is a tragedy, an atrocity against yourself and women in general. Nobody should ever have to write or think words like that because of personal experience.
I, for one, am so glad you are the woman that "you am!"
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Perfect verse. No SPAGs of any kind, and I always look very deep, whether I know/respect the author or not. But this one is perfect!
I don't know how I missed it on first release, but I am surely glad I found it in your portfolio. I see a message of a crying heart wanting to fly and now you have flown. You are sharing yourself and all your gifts with everyone; I am sure in real life the same as you do here on FS.
You are such a warm and loving soul, whatever happened that made you feel the way you did in the beginning of this poem is a tragedy, an atrocity against yourself and women in general. Nobody should ever have to write or think words like that because of personal experience.
I, for one, am so glad you are the woman that "you am!"
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Gary, I love you! This review and your very kind words are so thoughtful and caring that I may have to print it out and frame it. I so very much appreciate your gracious gift of six stars as well. Isn't it true that our biggest lessons in life are the ones that were negative. Of course I am not talking about the molestation and rape as I know now that those were not my fault, but the way we respond; keeping something secret that could have changed the course of time if we had told, feeling the need to numb, when we could have given it to God and I guess any mistakes that we have made. Kind of like Terry's story of School of Hard knocks. I not only attended that school, as you did, but I was held back many years in a row. Maybe that is why we are so close, because we both had been there and came through it because of our Heavenly Father and our Savior Jesus Christ. Thanks again my awesome big brother and bff.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Another lovely, sweet, and self-aware poem! It deserved to win the 'As I Am' contest, and I'm so glad you got that recognition.
I love your rhyme scheme and your unflinching honesty, both of which are rarely seen in us amateurs. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Another lovely, sweet, and self-aware poem! It deserved to win the 'As I Am' contest, and I'm so glad you got that recognition.
I love your rhyme scheme and your unflinching honesty, both of which are rarely seen in us amateurs. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you Sam for such sweet words and review. It is so nice to have friends like you my dear one! I appreciate your kindness!
Comment from jp88
What a beautiful piece, I'm not surprised it won the contest. It's so strong, but written in a plain and matter-of-fact style which I think suited the topic well. It portrays the story of a strong woman that managed to be (as in live and deal with the troubles of her life) and it is an inspirational bit.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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What a beautiful piece, I'm not surprised it won the contest. It's so strong, but written in a plain and matter-of-fact style which I think suited the topic well. It portrays the story of a strong woman that managed to be (as in live and deal with the troubles of her life) and it is an inspirational bit.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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I thank you so very much for such kind words and review. I appreciate it my friend, more than you could know!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Debi,
I'm so glad you won this contest! Your words are so beautiful; I can wholeheartedly identify with them. I once was empty, and I know it is hard to believe, I keep alot of my emotions bottled up until I explode.
Congratulations on this win.
Good luck with all your writing in the future.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Debi,
I'm so glad you won this contest! Your words are so beautiful; I can wholeheartedly identify with them. I once was empty, and I know it is hard to believe, I keep alot of my emotions bottled up until I explode.
Congratulations on this win.
Good luck with all your writing in the future.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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I can't thank you enough Cindy for such a wonderful review and kind words.
As much as it never is good that someone can relate (especially someone I care about) yet it's nice to have that understanding. Thank you my dear friend!
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You?re welcome, Debi.
I consider you a good friend, too.😊
Comment from Frank Malley
"The Woman That I Am" is a sweet condensed biography narrated by a woman who describes the ups and downs of her life and ends up fulfilled and happy to have achieved the earthly status of one who loves and helps others. The author writes in iambic heptameter and uses an A-A-B-B rhyming scheme for each of the four stanzas in the poem.
This poem focuses on the trials life puts an individual through and writes about a solution this person has found. The poem flows well but it lacks any phrases or description that would make E.A. Robinson's beard bristle.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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"The Woman That I Am" is a sweet condensed biography narrated by a woman who describes the ups and downs of her life and ends up fulfilled and happy to have achieved the earthly status of one who loves and helps others. The author writes in iambic heptameter and uses an A-A-B-B rhyming scheme for each of the four stanzas in the poem.
This poem focuses on the trials life puts an individual through and writes about a solution this person has found. The poem flows well but it lacks any phrases or description that would make E.A. Robinson's beard bristle.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Awe Frank, you ole softy you! I knew you had a great big heart and I am very appreciative of the kind review and comments. You are an awesome friend Frank and I thank you very much.
And if you are talking about one of my favorite poets, Edwin, I only knew him when he had a mustache. : )
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Hi Debi. Well, you certainly clobbered me in the poem contest re who I am. I didn't get even one vote, and I realize that what FS readers want is endless happy endings with wheaties and raisins. I'm too dark in my perceptions of life, and being happy is the primary goal for most of us. At any rate, Debi, may you be well and congratulations on your contest winner.
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I appreciate that very much Frank. Thank you!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning write of personal reflection and growth, contained within the struggle of human frailty in its search for the divine - smoothly rendered in its rhyming rhythm and conclusive assured acceptance...
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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In my opinion, a stunning write of personal reflection and growth, contained within the struggle of human frailty in its search for the divine - smoothly rendered in its rhyming rhythm and conclusive assured acceptance...
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Eve. I appreciate such a lovely and kind review and words and as always, it was so good to hear from you!
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You are very welcome, Debi, an inspiring read - thank you for sharing...Eve
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a wonderfully written poem. Just amazing. Flows well and great rhymes. Beautiful artwork to compliment your words as well. Congrats on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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This is a wonderfully written poem. Just amazing. Flows well and great rhymes. Beautiful artwork to compliment your words as well. Congrats on winning the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you so very much Joanne! You are so sweet and I just love you to pieces. I so appreciate your very kind review, lovely words and your very generous six stars. I can't tell you how much that means to me. You are a very dear friend!
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You?re very welcome my friend ❤️
Comment from Sanku
From a tormented, abused life you have come out victorious and is now able to face yourself without guilt .The past was put behind with the help of Jesus .Very well written ,Congratulation on your win.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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From a tormented, abused life you have come out victorious and is now able to face yourself without guilt .The past was put behind with the help of Jesus .Very well written ,Congratulation on your win.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Sanku, I thank you!! Sorry I wasn't trying to be funny with that rhyme. Actually I appreciate so very much your kind review and words.
Yes, so thankful that we know that Jesus will never let us down!
Thanks again my dear friend!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Looking at the picture with your story... Are you blue or red? Something else? People can be four colors:
Blues are compassionate, helpful, detail-oriented, imaginative, and social.
Greens are calm, introverted, intellectual, troubleshooters, and cautious.
Yellows are rule followers, agreeable, patient, and relaxed.
Reds are competitive, take-charge, decision-makers who get things done.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Looking at the picture with your story... Are you blue or red? Something else? People can be four colors:
Blues are compassionate, helpful, detail-oriented, imaginative, and social.
Greens are calm, introverted, intellectual, troubleshooters, and cautious.
Yellows are rule followers, agreeable, patient, and relaxed.
Reds are competitive, take-charge, decision-makers who get things done.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thanks Thomas, but the blue one is smiling so that must be the girl that went with the poem you forgot to mention. The colors were irrelevant tho!p0
I hope you did read my poem too. Thanks Thomas
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Oh, yes, I did. I read it as you talking of a religious experience that changed your life.
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Thank you,
Comment from amahra
This is a wonderful inspiring poem. Fantastic!
I look myself straight in the eye; praise God who I've become
My life that serves much purpose now, no longer is a sham
Because I'm proud to show the world, the woman that I am [These are powerful lines that describes a self-loving woman.]
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This is a wonderful inspiring poem. Fantastic!
I look myself straight in the eye; praise God who I've become
My life that serves much purpose now, no longer is a sham
Because I'm proud to show the world, the woman that I am [These are powerful lines that describes a self-loving woman.]
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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And you are such a wonderful inspiring friend! I thank you for always being so kind, supportive and so gracious. It's wonderful to have friends with such big hearts such as you. Thank you!