Fisherman in the Sea
Overboard and alone.21 total reviews
Comment from Charlie Shine
Nice piece of work.
Written really well.
Very good imagery.
Charlie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023
Nice piece of work.
Written really well.
Very good imagery.
Charlie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023
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Well, hello again, Charlie. I am honored that you searched for one of my poems that 'spoke' to you. Thank you for all the stars and the comment about the imagery.
I hope you have a great day.
Comment from Fleedleflump
This was really cool - it's not often I see a story in a nonet form! Good use of S sounds and I love the float forged from pants. Really effectively done. I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
This was really cool - it's not often I see a story in a nonet form! Good use of S sounds and I love the float forged from pants. Really effectively done. I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Mike, I highly value your remarks, being such a talented writer as you are. This was a new form for me, and it was pretty challenging. I am more than glad that you enjoyed it. Many thanks.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, along with the font choice.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You tell a good story with a few words.
-You have a good hook at the beginning,
then show the creativity of fisherman to help him survive.
-The ending is very good when his efforts led to his safety.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
-Very nice artwork and presentation, along with the font choice.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You tell a good story with a few words.
-You have a good hook at the beginning,
then show the creativity of fisherman to help him survive.
-The ending is very good when his efforts led to his safety.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much, Pam, for your review and all the stars. Of course, I liked all your comments because they were all positive; however, please feel free, at any time, to offer suggestions if you think they will help.
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You are welcome. I appreciate your reply. I do offer suggestions if I see something worth noting.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi leather, good nonet format and one very smart fisherman:
made a float from pants
(I sure hope that he was wearing undies,
especially when he touched the shore.)
Well-chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
Hi leather, good nonet format and one very smart fisherman:
made a float from pants
(I sure hope that he was wearing undies,
especially when he touched the shore.)
Well-chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thanks, LateBloomer, for the review and all the stars. Oh, how I had to work and rework that thing to get it into a good format.
Now about his coming ashore--I heard a few chuckles about that event.
Comment from BermyBye50
Leather,
This is a excellent entry in the Nonet poetry contest. It is well-written and flows smoothly. The theme is clear and the tells a complete story of the urgency surviving a unexpected accident at sea.
Cheers,
Eugene
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
Leather,
This is a excellent entry in the Nonet poetry contest. It is well-written and flows smoothly. The theme is clear and the tells a complete story of the urgency surviving a unexpected accident at sea.
Cheers,
Eugene
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Eugene, for your review, stars, and comments. I appreciate your reading it and hearing that it read smoothly.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought you did a wonderful job with this. I like how you used the nonet form but it didn't seem forced. That final word was perfect - wouldn't have ended it any other way. Very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
I thought you did a wonderful job with this. I like how you used the nonet form but it didn't seem forced. That final word was perfect - wouldn't have ended it any other way. Very creative and well written.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Michael, for your review, compliments, and all the stars. I'm glad the poem didn't sound forced--that's something I try to avoid.
Thanks again.
Comment from lancellot
Well, the form is correct and having read this twice, I can see it is written in a similar style as the example provided on the contest page. So, everything is within the rules. I would say, that it needs a more rhythmic tone.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
Well, the form is correct and having read this twice, I can see it is written in a similar style as the example provided on the contest page. So, everything is within the rules. I would say, that it needs a more rhythmic tone.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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I'm impressed that you took the time to check out the contest rules. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What an interesting, tough scary, story in a nonet, Leather.
I enjoyed reading it. Great job with the syllable count per line,
the art choice, and the smooth flow of your storyline.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
What an interesting, tough scary, story in a nonet, Leather.
I enjoyed reading it. Great job with the syllable count per line,
the art choice, and the smooth flow of your storyline.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Jan, for your review and rating--I appreciate it. I'm so glad you enjoyed it as it took a considerable amount of work to get those syllables worked into lines that formed a triangular shape. Helen prodded me to rework it at one point and I'm glad she did. It is so nice to have reviewers such as yourself and Helen. Thanks again.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow this is quite an heroic write about being stranded at sea and managing to get to the shore to safety, I was overjoyed you managed to fit it into the nonet perfectly, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
Wow this is quite an heroic write about being stranded at sea and managing to get to the shore to safety, I was overjoyed you managed to fit it into the nonet perfectly, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Dolly, for reviewing and putting all those stars in place. I must give Ivochenka (spelling?) some credit because she reviewed it and suggested that I rework it so the lines descended more triangularly. I resisted doing that for nearly a day because that wasn't a rule requirement from FanStory; however, in the end, I relented because I knew that it would look pleasing.
So with a push from Helen and some extra work on my part, it is now in the shape you see. Thank you for the compliment--it made all the work worthwhile.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
I don't know if this is a true story or not, but if it is I am very glad that you survived. This is a beautiful poem, and the picture you selected matches perfectly. Best of luck to you in all of your writing endeavors.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
I don't know if this is a true story or not, but if it is I am very glad that you survived. This is a beautiful poem, and the picture you selected matches perfectly. Best of luck to you in all of your writing endeavors.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Hello, Monica, I'm not sure if we have met before--I don't think so. But, I want to thank you for your review, all the stars, and well wishes.
The story is fictional, but it just might be possible. There really is a way to turn a pair of long pants into a floating device.
Again, thank you for taking the time to read this poem