I am whom I am
Who am I?4 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Borrowed just a little bit didn't you Jake. (I am a dreamer.
And I am not the only one.) John Lennon - Imagine
Para 2, Line 3: insert (how) between (matter) and (hard)
Para 2, Line 5: Remove one space between (I am) and (.)
Para 4, Line 1: Remove one space between (straight) and (white)
Para 6, Line 3: Insert (it) between (And) and (has)
Para 7, Line 1: (democrat) should be (Democrat)
Para 8, Line 2: I THINK (agonistic) should be (agnostic) (agonistic) means psychology relating to fighting or aggression. Whereas (agnostic) means the belief that the existence of God, or the divine or the supernatural is unknown or unknowable. I think, after having spoken with you several times here on FS, that you definitely lean more agnostic than agonistic.
Para 10, Line 3: Insert (be) between (to) and (a)
Para 11, Line 2: (a) should be (an)
Para 11, Line 2: What is (expat)?
Para 12, Line 4: Remove one space between (the) and (only)
Para 14, Lines 2 & 3: SHOULD (SF) be (FS) (FanStory)
And here I thought I knew you. Now I do.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Borrowed just a little bit didn't you Jake. (I am a dreamer.
And I am not the only one.) John Lennon - Imagine
Para 2, Line 3: insert (how) between (matter) and (hard)
Para 2, Line 5: Remove one space between (I am) and (.)
Para 4, Line 1: Remove one space between (straight) and (white)
Para 6, Line 3: Insert (it) between (And) and (has)
Para 7, Line 1: (democrat) should be (Democrat)
Para 8, Line 2: I THINK (agonistic) should be (agnostic) (agonistic) means psychology relating to fighting or aggression. Whereas (agnostic) means the belief that the existence of God, or the divine or the supernatural is unknown or unknowable. I think, after having spoken with you several times here on FS, that you definitely lean more agnostic than agonistic.
Para 10, Line 3: Insert (be) between (to) and (a)
Para 11, Line 2: (a) should be (an)
Para 11, Line 2: What is (expat)?
Para 12, Line 4: Remove one space between (the) and (only)
Para 14, Lines 2 & 3: SHOULD (SF) be (FS) (FanStory)
And here I thought I knew you. Now I do.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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wow thanks so much for the detailed critique as always. I will fix this now. I have a problem with typos noticing extra spaces particularly due to a lifetime slight learning disability.
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That's what I do Jake. lol
Good stuff.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I enjoyed this "assessment" of who you are. It is honest, interesting, and well-written.
I wish you well in the contest.
This should be a contender.
Best regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this "assessment" of who you are. It is honest, interesting, and well-written.
I wish you well in the contest.
This should be a contender.
Best regards,
Mary
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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thanks appreciate it
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I enjoyed this Jake. You managed to pack so much information into your free verse, with enviable concision. I particularly liked your self-depreciation, and the revealing of flaws. Kate xx
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this Jake. You managed to pack so much information into your free verse, with enviable concision. I particularly liked your self-depreciation, and the revealing of flaws. Kate xx
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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thanks a lot
Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, now we know who you are, somewhat. I know you are a poet, and I enjoy reading your postings on this site. I will never meet you in person, but consider you a friend on FanStory. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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Well, now we know who you are, somewhat. I know you are a poet, and I enjoy reading your postings on this site. I will never meet you in person, but consider you a friend on FanStory. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
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thanks, my friend.