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Gone, But Not Really

A father's spirit lives on in his daughter

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Comment from HarryT
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Just one problem, "students" (students') should be possessive form. Like this piece. I believe it speaks to many daughters. I hope my daughter will feel the same after I depart. Excellent writing and expressed emotions.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    No, Harry, it's plural. My students play piano. (Perhaps you were thinking of 'play' as a noun instead of a verb.) Thank you, though, for not just noticing, but caring enough to let me know. I always appreciate that. (I bet your daughters love that trait in you, too. My dad was also a 'noticer.')
reply by HarryT on 22-Aug-2022
    Yes, I was thinking of play as a performance. Thanks for the correction. Great piece.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Thanks for being an encourager, too.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
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Good poem for the contest. He obviously had a lasting influence on you and what a tribute poem to him--you still feel his presence and your identity is tied to being his daughter. Well done.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
    You're so right.
Comment from Anne Johnston
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This is a great entry for the contest. Your rhyming is good and you have shared a great memory of your dad, and how you are like him in many ways. That is neat about finding the closest parking spot. My pattern is to find the farthest one away and get in some walking. Wondering if you are referring to Lake George, NY in your notes. That is a wonderful place to visit.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2022
    Yes, Lake George, NY! My college roommate and I visit annually because it is halfway between my home in Upstate NY and hers in Montpelier, VT.

    My husband is like you with parking, and I try to explain that it's such a waste--my father would provide GREAT parking spots for him, too...but he prefers walking. (This is why G-d made him so handsome...so I'd overlook such quirks, don'tcha know...)

    Thanks for the lovely review.
reply by Anne Johnston on 21-Aug-2022
    You are welcome. I spent a few days in Vermont with family last week
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
    So beautiful up there!!