The Other Side
What lies ahead44 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Hello Paul,
I had a question at the end of the first stanza...
leave my humble place of birth â?" (Is this â?" supposed to be there?)
This ship of life that we call Earth.
I love classically rhymed poems, which so many people don't do anymore. (That might make me an old geezer.) I appreciate someone with an ear for a beat and who knows how to use a thesaurus!
The message is interesting too. I was just so happy about the form; I was distracted for a bit. Your poem reminds me of some that my brother wrote. Nice work.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Hello Paul,
I had a question at the end of the first stanza...
leave my humble place of birth â?" (Is this â?" supposed to be there?)
This ship of life that we call Earth.
I love classically rhymed poems, which so many people don't do anymore. (That might make me an old geezer.) I appreciate someone with an ear for a beat and who knows how to use a thesaurus!
The message is interesting too. I was just so happy about the form; I was distracted for a bit. Your poem reminds me of some that my brother wrote. Nice work.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Thomas. I have edited out the glitch. I'm an old geezer right there with you.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A well-crafted and beautifully written poem of faith. The rhyming is perfect, with an easy flow. I like the thought of no disagreements to fix or sides to choose.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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A well-crafted and beautifully written poem of faith. The rhyming is perfect, with an easy flow. I like the thought of no disagreements to fix or sides to choose.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Mary. I really think things will be fine.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love the idea of a place where there are no sides and we can just get to know people without emotion burgeoning anger. This is beautifully rhymed with a great flow.
Mike
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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I love the idea of a place where there are no sides and we can just get to know people without emotion burgeoning anger. This is beautifully rhymed with a great flow.
Mike
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Mike. There will probably be emotions there, but not the ones that you allude to.
Comment from Gunner Lil
Love it. An easy read. Has good flow and pace. Had this reader wanting more.
In school, Saint Stan's the nun said, "God has a chart and on one side he marks the bad and the other side he marks the good. You need more good than bad to get to heaven."
Thank you!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Love it. An easy read. Has good flow and pace. Had this reader wanting more.
In school, Saint Stan's the nun said, "God has a chart and on one side he marks the bad and the other side he marks the good. You need more good than bad to get to heaven."
Thank you!
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Lil. I need some more time to work on my chart.
