Dave is Still a Child
Contest Entry6 total reviews
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You have done a great job with the prompt, very creative!
I think this is a fun prompt and it seems as though you
enjoyed writing this verse.
Your writing feels happy, playful, and light. The photo adds
a lot of character and dimension to your writing.
I think sometimes it is a good idea for poets to write just
for fun !
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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You have done a great job with the prompt, very creative!
I think this is a fun prompt and it seems as though you
enjoyed writing this verse.
Your writing feels happy, playful, and light. The photo adds
a lot of character and dimension to your writing.
I think sometimes it is a good idea for poets to write just
for fun !
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
I'm sorry for not providing individual feedback last time. I have to admit that I have always had a hard time with poetry that doesn't rhyme. I even make my haiku rhyme, which people tell me I shouldn't. I'm not telling you your poem should rhyme. People can do whatever they want with their poems - that's the beauty of it.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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I'm sorry for not providing individual feedback last time. I have to admit that I have always had a hard time with poetry that doesn't rhyme. I even make my haiku rhyme, which people tell me I shouldn't. I'm not telling you your poem should rhyme. People can do whatever they want with their poems - that's the beauty of it.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Well, one thing for sure, I'm glad he is "still" potty trained.
5th line (child) should be (child's)
Nothing wrong with Kool-Aid, one of my favorites.
What the heck, let the guy be. He isn't hurting anyone. We too often try to force people into this pre-conceived mold of who and what they should be. This guy is living his life.
Great glimpse into a life maybe most of us would like to live.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Well, one thing for sure, I'm glad he is "still" potty trained.
5th line (child) should be (child's)
Nothing wrong with Kool-Aid, one of my favorites.
What the heck, let the guy be. He isn't hurting anyone. We too often try to force people into this pre-conceived mold of who and what they should be. This guy is living his life.
Great glimpse into a life maybe most of us would like to live.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistake.
Comment from nomi338
The Peter Pan Syndrome is real and it does affect some men. Michael Jackson was supposed to suffer from a minor version of it. However, I think that his observing his older brothers romancing some of their female fans may have scarred him for life.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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The Peter Pan Syndrome is real and it does affect some men. Michael Jackson was supposed to suffer from a minor version of it. However, I think that his observing his older brothers romancing some of their female fans may have scarred him for life.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from LovnPeace
Delima here. Very good visuals match the picture. I understand some fight growing up, but please. I wish you luck with your admission into the contest. Blessings, Barbara. xo
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Delima here. Very good visuals match the picture. I understand some fight growing up, but please. I wish you luck with your admission into the contest. Blessings, Barbara. xo
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Fleedleflump
It sounds to me as though he's living his best life! I think we're all kids at heart, and would take any excuse to just play and not need to worry. Many thanks for the great fun entry :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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It sounds to me as though he's living his best life! I think we're all kids at heart, and would take any excuse to just play and not need to worry. Many thanks for the great fun entry :-)
Mike
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
