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Comment from GARY MACLEAN
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Very symbolic in its simplicity. The new moon is always a welcome sight but the darkness before can be frightening. I like the "blind neighbor" thought.

Very nice.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback, Gary.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
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Gypsy, This is a very well written modern haiku you have penned about the blind neighbor borrowing a cup of darkness - New Moon. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
    Teri, thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. (*=*) Blessings to you too.

    Gypsy
    "The poet waits to paint the unsaid." ?Atticus
Comment from aryr
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A wonderful haiku, Gypsy. Great play on words- having a blind neighbor who borrows a cup of darkness. I really enjoyed this play on the words, it was fantastic. Blessed be n hugs!

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much, Aryr. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a lovely day. Blessed be (*=*)

    Gypsy
    "The poet waits to paint the unsaid." ?Atticus
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Gypsy,
This is a great modern Haiku.
Your syllable count is perfect,
and your lettering and photo give your poem a beautifully haunting.tone.
Great work.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much, my friend. It's always good to hear from you. Good night or morning... wherever you may be.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your modern Haiku Poem- good word count and flow- theme good and connection to notes makes your intent more clear and thought provoking- good job

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much, my friend. It's always good to hear from you. Good night or morning... wherever you may be.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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I like the reference to the moon as the "blind neighbor" which "borrows a cup of darkness" from the shadow of the Earth. Great way to refer to how neighbors borrow things from each other. Very poetically said!

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much, Helen, mygood friend. It's always good to hear from you. Good night or morning... wherever you may be.

    I hope all is well.

    Marival hugs!
reply by lyenochka on 15-Aug-2022
    It's night but a lot earlier than where you are. Hugs and sweet dreams!
Comment from royowen
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I loved the inference here, the blindman borrowing a cup of darkness, as if he doesn't have enough already, perhaps giving more sightedness to the "seeing" one, well done Gypsy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
reply by royowen on 14-Aug-2022
    Well done
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Exceptional
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I don't know why, but I just really love the moon. And the idea of it as a neighbor borrowing a cup of darkness really makes me happy for some reason.

Lovely.

Take care,
Erika

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much for your time and kind six stars review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis